Repeated feedback among essays - what not to do Lack of strong topic sentence that orients discussion around support for thesis, NOT plot Using exclusively full sentence quotations, often with repetitive language announcing the use of a quote, and comma to introduce long quote: “By looking at this quote, one can see how Jack adheres completely to these characteristics, “Jack had meant to leave him in doubt….” Including quote first and then explaining the context of the quote Incorrect use of parenthetical citation format Lack of mini-conclusion at end of paragraph that wraps up all the ideas discussed with an eye to significance

How does Homer characterize Zeus through his relationship to other gods in Book 1 of The Odyssey? Known as king of the gods, Zeus technically rules over all and is yet shown to be a fearful and hesitating character in Book 1 of Homer's epic, The Odyssey. Topic sentence establishes name of text and author, responds directly to the prompt and sets up a focus for the rest of the ideas. WHAT NOT TO DO Compare to: At the beginning of Book 1 of Homer’s epic, The Odyssey, Zeus is talking about how Aegisthus went against the warnings of the gods and was punished as a result.

How does Homer characterize Zeus through his relationship to other gods in Book 1 of The Odyssey? Known as king of the gods, Zeus technically rules over all and is yet shown to be a fearful and hesitating character in Book 1 of Homer's epic, The Odyssey. Zeus is the first featured immortal, and he provides entrance to the discussion of Odysseus by first presenting the plight of Aegisthus, who acted against the will of all the gods and was therefore punished. Athena, who has been waiting for such an opportunity, uses Aegisthus' fate to highlight Odysseus's: “But my heart breaks for Odysseus, / that seasoned veteran cursed by fate so long” (Homer 79). Set up the context of any quote before you give the quote so that you orient the reader to the events and prepare them for why this quote will be important. Carefully use correct parenthetical citation format: end the quote, end quote mark, parenthetical citation, end parenthetical citation, period. WHAT NOT TO DO Compare to: Zeus is the first featured immortal, and he provides entrance to the discussion of Odysseus by first presenting the plight of Aegisthus, who acted against the will of all the gods and was therefore punished. “But my heart breaks for Odysseus, / that seasoned veteran cursed by fate so long.” (Homer 79) Athena, who has been waiting for such an opportunity, uses Aegisthus' fate to highlight Odysseus's.

How does Homer characterize Zeus through his relationship to other gods in Book 1 of The Odyssey? Known as king of the gods, Zeus technically rules over all and is yet shown to be a fearful and hesitating character in Book 1 of Homer's epic, The Odyssey. Zeus is the first featured immortal, and he provides entrance to the discussion of Odysseus by first presenting the plight of Aegisthus, who acted against the will of all the gods and was therefore punished. Athena, who has been waiting for such an opportunity, uses Aegisthus' fate to highlight Odysseus's: “But my heart breaks for Odysseus, / that seasoned veteran cursed by fate so long” (Homer 79). It quickly becomes apparent the even though Zeus “marshals the thunderheads” (79), he is still fearful of his brother, Poseidon, who has been the cause of Odysseus's delay. It has taken his brother's absence to make him act differently; now that Poseidon is “receiv[ing] an offering” from the Ethiopians (78), Zeus feels moderately comfortable allowing Athena to act behind Poseidon's back. Use only pieces of quotes incorporated into your own original sentences to make the ideas more intrinsically your own. This provides a chance to draw richly on the text without having to take long pauses from constructing your own ideas and responses to material. If you continue to refer to only one source, once you’re cited the author in the first parenthetical citation, you can provide page citations alone for subsequent ones. Use brackets [] to indicate words you’ve added to quotes or ways you’ve had to shift the langauge of the quote to fit in your grammatical structure. When quoting poetry, slashes / indicate that how the line was broken in the original.

How does Homer characterize Zeus through his relationship to other gods in Book 1 of The Odyssey? Known as king of the gods, Zeus technically rules over all and is yet shown to be a fearful and hesitating character in Book 1 of Homer's epic, The Odyssey. Zeus is the first featured immortal, and he provides entrance to the discussion of Odysseus by first presenting the plight of Aegisthus, who acted against the will of all the gods and was therefore punished. Athena, who has been waiting for such an opportunity, uses Aegisthus' fate to highlight Odysseus's: “But my heart breaks for Odysseus, / that seasoned veteran cursed by fate so long” (Homer 79). It quickly becomes apparent the even though Zeus “marshals the thunderheads” (79), he is still fearful of his brother, Poseidon, who has been the cause of Odysseus's delay. It has taken his brother's absence to make him act differently; now that Poseidon is “receiv[ing] an offering” from the Ethiopians (78), Zeus feels moderately comfortable allowing Athena to act behind Poseidon's back. His indecision is notable through his hesitant diction in the rhetorical question he addresses to Athena: “Lord Poseidon, I trust, will let his anger go. How can he stand his ground against the will of all the gods at once - one god alone?” (80) The fact that she doesn't even bother to answer his question, but moves quickly, “Eyes flashing bright” (80), before Zeus changes his mind (or Poseidon unexpectedly returns) characterizes Zeus as a figurehead only. Long quotes (3-5 lines within the paragraph text) should be separated from the text with blank lines on top and bottom and five-space indents to left and right margins and single-spaced. Quotations are not needed unless you are quoting dialogue (as in this case) - the format indicates it is a quote on its own. Note the colon to introduce a quote in this form, the lack of indent in the line that comes after, and the follow up on the significance of the quote at the end.

How does Homer characterize Zeus through his relationship to other gods in Book 1 of The Odyssey? Known as king of the gods, Zeus technically rules over all and is yet shown to be a fearful and hesitating character in Book 1 of Homer's epic, The Odyssey. Zeus is the first featured immortal, and he provides entrance to the discussion of Odysseus by first presenting the plight of Aegisthus, who acted against the will of all the gods and was therefore punished. Athena, who has been waiting for such an opportunity, uses Aegisthus' fate to highlight Odysseus's: “But my heart breaks for Odysseus, / that seasoned veteran cursed by fate so long” (Homer 79). It quickly becomes apparent the even though Zeus “marshals the thunderheads” (79), he is still fearful of his brother, Poseidon, who has been the cause of Odysseus's delay. It has taken his brother's absence to make him act differently; now that Poseidon is “receiv[ing] an offering” from the Ethiopians (78), Zeus feels moderately comfortable allowing Athena to act behind Poseidon's back. His indecision is notable through his hesitant diction in the rhetorical question he addresses to Athena: Lord Poseidon, I trust, will let his anger go. How can he stand his ground against the will of all the gods at once - one god alone? (80) The fact that she doesn't even bother to answer his question, but moves quickly, “Eyes flashing bright” (80), before Zeus changes his mind (or Poseidon unexpectedly returns) characterizes Zeus as a figurehead only. It is Athena through her cunning and persuasive strategies, that possesses power over her “superior,” Zeus. Note the final sentence that ties together the points made in direct acknowledgment of the stated question and my focus for the paragraph as established in the topic sentence.

How does Homer characterize Zeus through his relationship to other gods in Book 1 of The Odyssey? Known as king of the gods, Zeus technically rules over all and is yet shown to be a fearful and hesitating character in Book 1 of Homer's epic, The Odyssey. Zeus is the first featured immortal, and he provides entrance to the discussion of Odysseus by first presenting the plight of Aegisthus, who acted against the will of all the gods and was therefore punished. Athena, who has been waiting for such an opportunity, uses Aegisthus' fate to highlight Odysseus's: “But my heart breaks for Odysseus, / that seasoned veteran cursed by fate so long” (Homer 79). It quickly becomes apparent the even though Zeus “marshals the thunderheads” (79), he is still fearful of his brother, Poseidon, who has been the cause of Odysseus's delay. It has taken his brother's absence to make him act differently; now that Poseidon is “receiv[ing] an offering” from the Ethiopians (78), Zeus feels moderately comfortable allowing Athena to act behind Poseidon's back. His indecision is notable through his hesitant diction in the rhetorical question he addresses to Athena: Lord Poseidon, I trust, will let his anger go. How can he stand his ground against the will of all the gods at once - one god alone? (80) The fact that she doesn't even bother to answer his question, but moves quickly, “Eyes flashing bright” (80), before Zeus changes his mind (or Poseidon unexpectedly returns) characterizes Zeus as a figurehead only. It is Athena through her cunning and persuasive strategies, that possesses power over her “superior,” Zeus. Homer. The Odyssey. Trans. Robert Fagles. New York: Penguin Books, Treat the title the same way here as in the essay. Make sure the way you reference the source in the parenthetical citation agrees with the first word(s) of the Works Cited format.

How does Homer characterize Zeus through his relationship to other gods in Book 1 of The Odyssey? Known as king of the gods, Zeus technically rules over all and is yet shown to be a fearful and hesitating character in Book 1 of Homer's epic, The Odyssey. Zeus is the first featured immortal, and he provides entrance to the discussion of Odysseus by first presenting the plight of Aegisthus, who acted against the will of all the gods and was therefore punished. Athena, who has been waiting for such an opportunity, uses Aegisthus' fate to highlight Odysseus's: “But my heart breaks for Odysseus, / that seasoned veteran cursed by fate so long” (Homer 79). It quickly becomes apparent the even though Zeus “marshals the thunderheads” (79), he is still fearful of his brother, Poseidon, who has been the cause of Odysseus's delay. It has taken his brother's absence to make him act differently; now that Poseidon is “receiv[ing] an offering” from the Ethiopians (78), Zeus feels moderately comfortable allowing Athena to act behind Poseidon's back. His indecision is notable through his hesitant diction in the rhetorical question he addresses to Athena: Lord Poseidon, I trust, will let his anger go. How can he stand his ground against the will of all the gods at once - one god alone? (80) The fact that she doesn't even bother to answer his question, but moves quickly, “Eyes flashing bright” (80), before Zeus changes his mind (or Poseidon unexpectedly returns) characterizes Zeus as a figurehead only. It is Athena through her cunning and persuasive strategies, that possesses power over her “superior,” Zeus. Homer. The Odyssey. Trans. Robert Fagles. New York: Penguin Books, How does Homer characterize Telemachus through his relationship with the visitors to his house at the beginning of Book 1 of The Odyssey?