EDITING YOUR PARAGRAPH: TIQAAA-IQAAA

CB: YOUR NAME Grab a different colored pen to edit!

Step One:  Read the entire paragraph without making corrections.  Think to yourself:  Does it flow? Does each sentence flow into the next?

Step Two:  Thesis/Topic Sentence: Does it have the following? 1. The reasons people immigrate to other countries 2. What we can learn from their stories

Step Three:  Intro to Quotes: Does it have the following? Do you mention WHO is speaking the quote? Does it mention briefly WHAT is happening in the excerpts at the exact time of your quote? The title of the excerpt your quote came from? EX: “I was dreaming of coming to America”  This is most evident in “I was dreaming of coming to America” when…

What do you notice about the way I connected my intro to quote and my quote? Embedding Quotes:  How to embedded a quote: She compares life as being the opposite of a “crystal stair” (2). Piggy finds a conch shell in the water and gives it to Ralph. He knows that they “can use it to call the others. Have a meeting”(16). DISREGARD THIS SLIDE

Quotes:  When quoting a novel:  Make sure there are “quotation marks” around your quote.  Dialogue + Narrator: “ ‘Shut up, Piggy’ said Jack” (5).  When you are only using quotes from different sources, then you need the author’s name after a quote (Golding).  There needs to be a period outside the (parenthesis). Unless there is a ? or a ! at the end of the quote. Then you don’t need any punctuation after the (parenthesis)

Step Five:  Analysis:  Are there phrases such as… This quote shows that… Here we can clearly see that… The quote is saying that… This is obviously/obvious…  Does the analysis EXPLAIN HOW your quote is proving your thesis? Try using the same language in your analysis that you used in your thesis.  Are there two sentences of analysis per quote? Do they flow or connect to each other? If it says anything like this, CROSS IS OUT!

Transitional Sentence:  Does it explain what the reader JUST discussed? And, what they are ABOUT to discuss?  Does it use transitional language to show the relationship between the two examples?  Although…  In the beginning…  At first…

Conclusion:  Does it…  Restate the overall message IN A NEW WAY?  Explain WHY anyone should care about this message? Or the “So What?” of the paragraph.  NO QUESTIONS or QUOTES at the end!  EX: It is important for people to follow the rules set in place by society. Democracy only works when citizens obey the law.

Extras…  Words that aren’t allowed:  Quote  Clearly  I  You

MLA FORMAT  Top left Corner:  Your Name  Teacher  Class (English 10 period ___)  Date (day month year)  Top Right Corner:  Last name and page #  Double Spaced  One inch margins all around.  Size 12 font  Title in the middle, size 12 font, NOT bold.

Introduction Paragraph = A.N.T  A- Attention getter  N- Necessary Information  T- Thesis

Attention Getters:  Fact/Statistic  Quote (from novel, or other source)  Dialogue (between characters)  Description of something/someone  Question (this is easy- try something more challenging)  Universal Idea (All men are created equal)

Necessary Information:  Background information your reader would need to have a better understanding of your essay.  Title of text  Author  Summary of text/event/issue

Thesis:  ONE sentence  What you are going to try to prove  Cannot be a quote  Is opinion based- can be argued (without saying “I think...”).

Body Paragraphs = TIQA  T- Topic Sentence  I- Introduce quote  Q- Quote  A- Analysis/Commentary

Topic Sentence:  Based on your thesis  Your first main idea  Should state what your first paragraph is about  Ex: World War one left mental scars on those who fought in the war

I-Introduce Quote  Introduces your evidence  Includes who is speaking, or where the quote came from.  Provides background/summary of your evidence for reader.  Ex: This is most evidence when Paul is on the front lines with Kat. Paul says, “ QUOTE…”  Ex: This can be seen when… The narrator explains, “QUOTE…”

Quote:  Any line(s) of text  No more than three sentences  Needs “around” it  Page number after quote (15)  You can also put (Remarque 15) but this is usually used when you are quoting MORE THAN ONE author in a single essay.

Analysis/Commentary  This is where you explain HOW your QUOTE is an example of your thesis.  What is happening in the quote that supports your claim?  Be specific  Three or more sentences.  Ex: This quote shows that…

Conclusion = 1, 2, 3  1. Restate thesis  2. Restate main ideas from each body paragraph  3. SO WHAT? What is the message one should take away from your essay?