 Sign-in  Funny Resume Mistakes  Review of Clusters, Absolutes and Relative Clauses  GSR Step 8—Positioning Free Modifiers  GSR Step 9—Parallelism  GSR Step 10—Making Things Non-parallel (with a point)  Combining Sentences Assignment  Journal  Coming Up…

 I can ruin a whole store if hired.  Objective: Decent pay, decent benefits and no complains.  I expect my salary commiserate with my experience.  This is a ruff draft of my resume.

 We can have verb, noun and adjective clusters. › Verb clusters are made by taking the verb on a BSP-1 or BSP-2, changing it to an –ing form, then moving it to start off a sentence.  The solution deteriorated after an hour.  Deteriorating after an hour, the solution exploded.

 To make a noun cluster, we start with BSP-3s (you remember, the ones that have linking verbs?)  We take the part of the BSP that is describing and move it around. › John is a talented musician. › A talented musician, John plays numerous instruments.

 We can make adjective clusters the same way we make noun clusters, except this time, we start with BSP-4s (the ones with the descriptive modifiers in there). › The program was faulty in its program statements. › Faulty in its program statements, the program had to be rewritten. › The road was blocked by a tree. › Blocked by a tree, the road was impassible.

 Another type of free modifier--the absolute--is formed by taking away or removing the “to be” from a base clause. › His nose was running. › His nose running, Jack looked pitiful. › Her hands were blue from the cold. › Her hands blue from the cold, Misty huddled near the fire.

 A free "relative clause" is created by replacing a noun with a relative pronoun such as "who" or "which." › Dogs are mammals. › Dogs make good pets. › Dogs, which make good pets, are mammals. › Dogs, which are mammals, make good pets.

 Once freed from its original base clause, a modifying structure may appear in any of three positions: initial (before the new base clause), middle (in the middle of the new base clause), or final (after the new base clause)

 Clutching her purse to her chest, Pamela stumbled into the room.  Pamela, clutching her purse to her chest, stumbled into the room.  Pamela stumbled into the room, clutching her purse to her chest.

 In GSR, Parallelism works by allowing us to combine sentences that have similar structures (BSPs), and that describe the same thing, into a single sentence. › The material may be easily recognized. › It is dark brown outside. › It is grey-green within. › Dark brown outside, grey-green within, the material may be easily recognized.

 He skied down the hill.  He planted his poles mechanically.  He tried to perfect his style.  Skiing down the hill, planting his poles mechanically, he tried to perfect his style.

 The trees swayed mightily. They stretched ominously over us. They threw odd shadows across the road as we passed.  She groused at being late. She hated not being prepared. Susan earned promotions quickly.

 If two or more structures modify another one, then they ought to be parallel; if they do not modify the same structure, then they should not be parallel.  Working in non-parallel structures begins to pull in modifiers which can modify each other (rather than the subject).  Non-parallel modifiers also allows you to have different types of modifiers within the same sentence.

 The machine was a portable Acme unit. The machine was more efficient. The machine reduced liquid waste especially well.  A portable Acme unit, the machine was more efficient, reducing liquid waste especially well.

 She walked down the desert road in the heat of the day. She was hot and wet. Her face was burnt and dusty from the clay-like sand. She wondered why she had ever decided to go sightseeing.  As she walked down the desert road in the heat of the day, hot and wet, her face burnt and dusty from the clay-like sand, she wondered why she had ever decided to go sightseeing.

 Given everything we’ve talked about with adding modifiers (bound and free), combine the sentences in the worksheet. › Note—Not all of them will need clusters/absolutes/clauses—some can be reduced to bound modifiers and “scrunched” into another sentence. › You can do this in class or as homework—it’s due Monday.

 What did you learn this week that will make a difference in your writing?  What did you find most confusing?

 Monday › Steps 11 and 12 of the GSR › Take home GSR test  Wednesday and Friday › No class  Monday the 27 th › GSR test due › Intro to the Paragraph (Chapters 1 & 6 in Paragraphs)