REVISIONS-A LOOK BACK * Persuasive Essay Revisions

 Add  Delete  Replace  Rearrange RE-look back revise -VISE - see

 You will need a sheet of paper.  Fold and tear the paper lengthwise.

Use one piece of tape to make “extensions” to your draft.

Introduction-Your attention please!  How does the beginning capture the reader’s attention? ( What device? )  How can you strengthen this? ( Do you have more than 5 sentences in the introduction? )  REQUIRED  On your ‘extension’- Add/change at least two sentences to make improvements to your introduction.

RE-look back revise -VISE - see Introduction: What is the issue? What is the opinion statement? Does the introduction end with a clear statement of opinion?

Body- YOUR SUPPORT  Are there at LEAST 2 body paragraphs? ( If not, you need more)  What is the first reason of support?  What examples or evidence did you provide?  Did you use tools of persuasion? ( See persuasion handout)  Each paragraph needs a minimum of 8-10 sentences.  Do you need to add details to make your argument stronger?  Can you add examples or facts?

Body- WORD CHOICE  CHOOSE AT LEAST 5 WORDS TO REPLACE WITH 5 MORE INTERESTING WORDS. Use a thesaurus. Are there words that are unnecessarily repeated?

BODY- Sentences  Are all sentences complete?  Do you need to combine any to make them clearer?  What transitions can you add?

Conclusion  Does the conclusion summarize your opinion with a STRONG concluding statement or a call to action?  Can you make use of a device?

NOW……  Make a clean copy of your paper IN PENCIL. DO SO NEATLY!

Some general tips  Use standard English. NO text speak.  Write in the third person unless otherwise directed.  Avoid slang terms, clichés and colloquial expressions. Use formal language.

Objectives and Results  Objectives  Course objective 1  Course objective 2  Course objective 3  Results  Expected results  Skills developed  Skill 1  Skill 2

Vocabulary  Term One  Definition A  Definition B  Term Two  Definition  Term Three  Definition

Procedures/Lecture Slide  Add procedure here  Step one  Step two

Graphs/Charts 1

Graphs/Charts 2

Conclusion  Add your conclusions here.

Questions/Discussions  Question One  Discussion  Question Two  Discussion  Questions Three  Discussion