Writing Frame and Evaluation How to use the writing frame? Topic sentence Connectives Phrases of evaluation The purpose of the practical lesson was to have knowledge and understanding of … Keywords: eggs, coagulation, protein, essential amino acids, high biological value. I followed health and safety procedures whilst cooking, I ensured …. On the other hand, I could have…. Keywords: oven gloves, sharp knives, oven, hygienic, clean, bacteria Whilst making __________, I encountered some difficulties…. To overcome these difficulties … Keywords: rolling out, cutting out, lining, leakages, overfilling The purpose of the practical was to have knowledge and understanding of the functions of eggs. Eggs have many properties but the two main functions are ‘aeration’ and ‘coagulation’. Swiss roll uses both of these properties. Whilst making the Swiss Roll I used aeration when whisking the eggs and sugar together. The whisking of the eggs and sugar ‘aerates’ the mixture, making the protein in the eggs stretch and trap air. Secondly, I used the property ‘coagulation’. This occurred in the oven whilst the Swiss Roll was being baked. When heat is applied to a protein it makes it ‘coagulate’. Consequently, the egg mixture goes from a liquid state to a solid state. Thus, the heat makes the cake set. I followed safety and hygiene procedures whilst cooking; I ensured that the work surfaces were clean, that I had washed my hands and that I was wearing an apron. Furthermore, where safety was concerned, I made sure that the oven was lit, on the correct temperature and I made sure that I wore oven gloves at all times whilst using the oven. On the other hand, I could have dried my equipment more carefully to prevent bacteria from forming. Whilst making the Swiss Roll, I encountered some difficulties and required the teacher’s help. I found it difficult fitting the whisks into the electric whisk, as I had never used one before. The other difficulty was ‘folding’ the flour into the mixture. To overcome these difficulties, I gained advice from the teacher to ensure I was doing it correctly. Specific sophisticated vocabulary First Person Specific verbs

First person. Correct use of punctuation. Technical language (varies according to topic – to be determined by teacher). Connective phrases: Although, however, on the other hand, despite this ……. Phrases of evaluation “I could have improved ….” “In the future, I would ….” “During this project my task was ….” “I made it because ….” “I have learned that ….” “The results showed ….” Meaningful and specific comments of evaluation (not vague and generally I did well). Detailed comments about your work. Each paragraph should have a topic sentence. All ideas in that paragraph, should link to the topic sentence. WRITING SPECIFICATION EVALUATIONS

Grade4567 Evaluation I am able to write using: First Person Some technical Vocabulary Some connectives relating to evaluation, for e.g. ‘however’ Some reflective phrases: ’I could have improved.’ Some comments about your work, some vague and general. Each paragraph has a topic sentence. Full sentences; capital letters and full stops correct. I am able to write using: First Person Specific technical Vocabulary. Connectives relating to evaluation, for example: ‘however’, ‘despite this’… Phrases of evaluation, for example: ‘During this project my task was…’, ‘I made it because…’, ‘The results showed …’ Specific and detailed comments about your work. Each paragraph should have a topic sentence. All ideas in that paragraph, should link to the topic sentence. Punctuation within sentences, e.g. commas, used correctly. I am able to write using: First Person Specific, sophisticated, technical Vocabulary. Connectives relating to evaluation. Phrases of evaluation, for example: ‘During this project my task was…’, ‘I made it because…’, ’I could have improved…’, ‘In the future I will…’, ‘The results showed …’ Specific and detailed comments about your work, not vague and general. Each paragraph should have a topic sentence. All ideas in that paragraph, should be developed in detail and link to the topic sentence. Full range of punctuation used. Independent ideas developed ??? Grade Descriptors