Chapter 8 Being Concise More is in vain when less will serve. Precise Clear Forthright Familiar Concise Fluid More is in vain when less will serve. Sir Isaac Newton Title slide for presentation about Being Concise (Chapter 8). Reference for picture: "Sir Isaac Newton (1643-1727)" by Sir Godfrey Kneller - http://www.phys.uu.nl/~vgent/astrology/images/newton1689.jpg]. Licensed under Public domain via Wikimedia Commons - http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Sir_Isaac_Newton_(1643-1727).jpg#mediaviewer/File:Sir_Isaac_Newton_(1643-1727).jpg

To be concise, you should learn what kinds of words to cut Needless adjectives and adverbs Redundancies Mapping slide for presentation about being concise Writing zeroes Needless passive voice

A redundancy is a needless repetition of words guarantee my opinion absolute guarantee my personal opinion blended together bright green in color blended bright green Pages 119-120

Many redundancies exist in scientific writing already existing alternative choices at the present time basic fundamentals currently under way completely eliminate continue to remain currently being empty space first began had done previously introduced a new mix together never before none at all now at this time period of time private industry separate entities start out still persists whether or not Page 120

Writing zeroes are empty phrases that fatten sentences it is my intent to show that = 0 as a matter of fact = 0 as is well known = 0 it is noteworthy = 0 the presence of = 0 Page 122

Many phrases are near zeroes at this point in time = at that point in time = has the ability to = has the potential to = in the event that = in the vicinity of = owing to the fact that = the question as to whether = there is no doubt but that = now then can can if near because Pages 120-122 whether no doubt

When searching for writing zeroes, use your eraser Vibration measurements made in the course of the Titan flight test program were complicated by the presence of intense high-frequency excitation of the vehicle shell structure during the re-entry phase of the flight. [Zoofari] Pages 121-122 Before animating the revision, I have the students walk through the example and identify words to challenge. The revision is what the author decided, after balancing precision with conciseness and taking into account the context of this sentence. Reference for image: By ZooFari (Own work) [Public domain], via Wikimedia Commons Vibration measurements made in the Titan flight were complicated by intense high-frequency excitation of the vehicle shell during re-entry.

Needless adjectives often hide behind vague nouns The objective of our work is to obtain experimental data that can be used in conjunction with a comprehensive chemical kinetics modeling study to generate a detailed understanding of the fundamental processes that lead to engine knock. Our goal is to obtain experimental data that can be used with a chemical kinetics model to explain the processes that lead to engine knock. Page 123 Before animating the revision, I have the students walk through the example and identify words to challenge. The revision is what the author decided, after balancing precision with conciseness and taking into account the context of this sentence.

Many adverbs are unnecessary rather unique slows down well proven rather unique slows down well proven The achievement of our success relies very heavily on a rather detailed understanding of the somewhat complex processes that govern the gas velocities. Our success relies on understanding the complex processes that govern the gas velocities. Pages 123-124 Before animating the revision, I have the students walk through the example and identify words to challenge. The revision is what the author decided, after balancing precision with conciseness and taking into account the context of this sentence.

Needless passive verbs attract long phrases and words It was then concluded that a second complete solar mirror field corrosion survey should be conducted in July to determine whether the tenfold annual corrosion rate projection was valid and to allow determination whether subsequent corrective measures would be effective in retarding corrosion propagation. syllable count 83 We decided to survey the solar mirror field a second time in July to see whether the corrosion rate would increase tenfold as projected and to see whether stowing the mirrors in a vertical position would slow the rate. 60 syllable count Page 125 Before animating the revision, I have the students walk through the example and identify words to challenge. The revision is what the author decided, after balancing precision with conciseness and taking into account the context of this sentence.

In summary, to be concise, you should learn what to cut in your writing Needless adjectives and adverbs Redundancies Conclusion slide for presentation about being concise Writing zeroes Needless passive voice

In summary, to be concise, you should learn what kinds of words to cut Needless adjectives and adverbs Redundancies Conclusion slide for presentation about being concise Writing zeroes Needless passive voice