Writer _______________________ Editor _______________________ Saunders/ ___ ELA _____ ______ ______ Peer Editing Before marking any answers on this page, please read entire essay. Please provide useful feedback to the writer by responding to each question or statement as accurately and thoughtfully as possible . Introductory paragraph: 1. Is there a lead in the introductory paragraph? YES NO. What strategy did the writer use? ___________________________ 2. How many sentences is the lead (do not count the thesis statement) ? 1-2 (weak) 3-4 , 5 or more. Does the lead seem: basic (not passing) proficient (passing) advanced (Wow). Is there a thesis statement in the Introductory paragraph? YES NO Which sentence in the paragraph is the thesis statement # __ out of ___ sentences. Does the thesis statement begin with a L.I.P.? YES NO Is the L.I.P. correct? YES NO. If it is incorrect what is missing or wrong? Does the thesis statement contain the 3 paragraph claim ideas? YES NO Quote the supportive claims from the thesis. “the conflict between ________________________, the conflict between _______________________________. And finally the conflict between _______________________” Concluding Paragraph Does the paragraph begin with a transition that identifies this as the concluding paragraph? Does the conclusion restate the paragraph claim ideas? YES NO Did the writer use different words to say the same idea YES NO Did the writer simply copy down what they wrote in the introductory paragraph ? YES NO Did the writer simply copy the paragraph claim YES NO Did the writer restate the thesis? YES NO Did the writer simply recopy the thesis statement from the introduction YES NO Body paragraph #1 Does the paragraph claim identify the conflict and the conflict type? YES NO Who is the conflict between? _______________ and _______________ What is the conflict type? Character vs. ______________. Does the 1st main idea identify both sides of the conflict and what they want? YES NO How many points of evidence are given to support the 1st main idea? _____ Does the 2nd main idea identify any literary elements? YES NO Which literary element does it mention?____________________________ How many quotations are listed as evidence? ____ Are they cited correctly? ___________ Does the paragraph seem complete or does it feel rather skeletal? COMPLETE SKELETAL List any transition words used in the paragraph.__________________________________________________ Did they use any slang or repeat the same word too many times? Write a list. _________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________ Circle any spelling or punctuation errors in the paragraph. How many sentences in this paragraph? ____ Highlight the first word of each sentence in the body paragraph #1 for claim, main ideas & evidence. If a sentence doesn’t fit, write the # of that sentence here. ______________________________________________________________________________________

Body paragraph #2 Does the paragraph claim identify the conflict and the conflict type? YES NO Who is the conflict between? _______________ and _________________ What is the conflict type? Character vs. ____________. Does the 1st main idea identify both sides of the conflict and what they want? YES NO How many points of evidence are given to support the 1st main idea? _____ Does the 2nd main idea identify any literary elements? YES NO Which literary element does it mention?____________________________ How many quotations are listed as evidence? ____ Are they cited correctly? ___________ Does the paragraph seem complete or does it feel rather skeletal? COMPLETE SKELETAL List any transition words used in the paragraph.__________________________________________________ Did they use any slang or repeat the same word too many times? Write a list. _________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________ Circle any spelling or punctuation errors in the paragraph. How many sentences in this paragraph? ____ Highlight the first word of each sentence in the body paragraph #2 for claim, main ideas & evidence. If a sentence doesn’t fit, write the # of that sentence here. ____________________________________________________________________________ Body paragraph #3 Does the paragraph claim identify the conflict and the conflict type? YES NO Who is the conflict between? _____________ and _______________. What is the conflict type? Character vs. ______________. Does the 1st main idea identify both sides of the conflict and what they want? YES NO How many points of evidence are given to support the 1st main idea? _____ Does the 2nd main idea identify any literary elements? YES NO Which literary element does it mention?____________________________ How many quotations are listed as evidence? ____ Are they all cited correctly? ___________ Does the paragraph seem complete or does it feel rather skeletal? COMPLETE SKELETAL List any transition words used in the paragraph.__________________________________________________ Did they use any slang or repeat the same word too many times? Write a list. _________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________ Circle any spelling or punctuation errors in the paragraph. How many sentences in this paragraph? ____ Highlight the first word of each sentence in the body paragraph #3 for claim, main ideas & evidence. If a sentence doesn’t fit, write the # of that sentence here. ____________________________________________________________________________ FEEDBACK: Highlight any answers on this page that show the writer areas that are weak or need fixing before the final draft. COMMENTS: ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________