1. WR115 An Introduction to College Writing Through Critical Reading: A Community of Scholars Examines Sports in Society Monday, July 23, 2012 First Drafts & Unity Noun Phrase Appositives

2. Order of Business 10:20-10:35 Quiz: Shitty First Drafts 10:40-10:45 Reflective Freewrite & Homework Check 10:45-11:10Review: Linking Sentences to Blueprints to First Drafts 11:10-11:15BREAK 11:15-11:45Unity Workshop 11:45-12:05 Noun Phrase Appositives Ticket out the Door 12:05-12:10Homework Review

3. Quiz: Shitty First Drafts 1.According to Anne Lamott, what is the first draft like? 2.What kind of writing job did Anne Lamott have before she started to write fiction? 3.What advice for dealing with critical voices in her head did a hypnotist give Anne Lamott years ago?

4. Reflective Freewrite & Homework Check Place your homework on the table nearest where you sit and your Cornell Notes for “Shitty First Drafts” and your blueprint and if you have it, your first draft of Essay 1 ready for inspection. Please reflect and write about where you are in the essay-writing process

5. Overview of the Essay-Writing Process

6. Essay 1: Finding your Thesis Statement Write about what process you used to identify your thesis statement. 1.Did you use the Linking Sentences Worksheet to find which of your ideas Is most interesting to you? Is most connected to your other ideas? 2.Did you brainstorm a second time to see what ideas emerged? 3.Did you use another method? If so, what? 4.Are you still stuck?

7. Thesis Workshop Silently and reflectively review your Linking Ideas Worksheet. Consider the following and jot notes down on the worksheet: Which of your ideas do you like the best? Why? How are these ideas connected to other ideas? Take turns explaining to the others what you most like about your ideas and which ones are most connected to other ideas. When it is your turn to listen and respond, ask one clarifying question and one probing question (handout).handout Take notes.

8. Thesis Formation Once you have selected your main idea (thesis), you’ll need to shape it into a sentence: The thesis should be an opinion—yours! It should be debatable (more than one point of view) The thesis should state some kind of relationship, like cause-effect. Get busy!

9. The Blueprint (Outline) Once you have formulated your thesis statement, it’s time to complete a blueprint.blueprint The blueprint is a virtual first draft. It shows how you are going to develop your thesis statement. Your three or four topic sentences should each develop your thesis in some significant way. The topic sentences should be drawn either directly or indirectly from your linking sentences worksheet, where you wrote out sentences detailing how your different ideas are related. Once you reach to this stage, you have organized the basic framework of your essay.framework

10. Introductory Paragraphs You needn’t worry about writing an introduction until after you have outlined your paper. Many writers will not write their introductions until after they have written a first draft. An introduction introduces the thesis statement. Sometimes the writer will explain why the reader should care about the topic, why the topic is important, and/or introduce the vocabulary and background the reader will need to understand the paper. Some writers like to introduce their thesis statement by telling a story, which can be factual or may be a scenario (imagine a situation…) It’s a good idea to write one or two sentences transitioning the reader from the introduction to the thesis. In formal college papers, it’s a good idea to place the thesis at the end of the introduction. The thesis will be one or two sentences long.

11. Developing your Topic Sentences (Body Paragraphs) Each of your body paragraphs needs to be headed by a strong topic sentence. The topic sentence does two things: 1.It says something significant about the thesis statement, preferably by using a snippet or key word from the thesis. In this manner, the topic sentence ties the body paragraph to the thesis statement. 2.It expresses the main idea of the paragraph. Topic sentences should generally NOT begin with there is, there are, or it is. These words state that something merely exists.

12. How Body Paragraphs Are Organized Each body paragraph should be organized so that a reader who is assumed to know very little about the topic can follow and understand what the writer is expressing. This format is recommended : Topic Sentence Then write a sentence or two explaining the topic sentence or making a major point. Then write one or more sentences that provide support for that major point—facts, authoritative opinions, anecdotes, explanation And always provide an example or two to really make your ideas come alive Another major point (if desired) Support + examples Concluding sentence

13. Concluding Paragraphs Concluding paragraphs in formal essays have one job to do: to concisely bring the reader full circle. In order to do this, a simple summary or re-iteration of your major points and your thesis statement is all that is called for. Your concluding paragraph should be short and sweet like a roasted maggot.

14. A Word to the Wise Remember, first drafts are first drafts. They are meant to be revised, which means that you look at your ideas at least two more times, each time with “new eyes”– those of your reviewer(s). Every time you even begin to think that you are writing something that is a mere shake away from a final draft, when in fact you are writing a first draft, please remember “Shitty First Drafts” by Anne Lamott.“Shitty First Drafts” by Anne Lamott

15. Take a Break But keep it short! http://timer.onlineclock.net/

16. Unity Workshop See Unity Review Workshop handout.Unity Review Workshop handout

17. Appositive Workshop Compare the two handouts for differences in wording. What strikes you as an important difference? Which version is more informative?

18. Noun Phrase Appositive Workshop A noun phrase appositive is a phrase of 1 to many words that is positioned next to noun (a subject or object) in a sentence. This phrase and the noun are a pair, and each can be substituted for the other. Noun phrase appositives function in two important ways: 1.To add more information to a piece of writing in a very economical manner. 2.To combine sentences artfully and concisely.

19. Mini-Midterm Review Finding prepositional phrases in sentences Finding main verbs and their subjects in sentences Combining sentences using appositives A few questions about the Syllabus

20. Homework Assigned 1.Second Draft, Essay 1 Due Wednesday, July 25 th Unity check: fully review and revise your second draft for unity. Read Unity Workshop Handout. Add noun phrase appositives to your second draft. 2.Study for the Mini-Midterm Wednesday, July 25 th 3. Read Appositive Workshop Handout; find as many appositives in Version A (yellow) as possible. Due Wednesday, July 25th