2. Mechanics Warm Up Punctuate each sentence correctly.
i cant believe it jamie remarked it’s only been a week since i returned home from camp
what is this asked harold he was confused by what his mom gave him after dinner

3. Answers
“I can’t believe it!” Jamie remarked, “it’s only been a week since I returned home from camp.”
“What is this?” asked Harold. He was confused by what his mom gave him after dinner.

4. 8/30 and 8/31
Warm Up
Announcements → Quiz next class! Advanced summer reading due after Labor Day.
Power paragraphs and Voice
Brainstorm for college essay with prompts and rubric
Outline Essay for Friday
I can write a personal narrative.

5. POWER PARAGRAPHS
The "power" concept helps you organize sentences according to different levels of importance. It also reminds you to use topic sentences, supporting sentences, transitions between sentences, and concluding sentences in every paragraph.

6. Power Paragraphs
Strong writing includes consists of details added to each and every paragraph.
The "power number" assigned to each sentence relates to the job it performs in the paragraph:
1st power = the topic sentence and concluding sentence
2nd power = the major detail or supporting idea
3rd power = the minor detail or explanation of the immediately preceding supporting idea
Transitions used within paragraphs usually match the “power number” of the sentence:
2nd power transitions = first, second, third, equally important, besides, furthermore, also, again, next, to begin with, as well as, in addition to, more, even more, more than that, lastly, others, finally
3rd power transitions = for example, for instance, that is to say, namely, just as, specifically, in other words, to be sure, in the same manner, to be specific, such as, this can be made clearer, this can be explained, in fact
Concluding transitions = in conclusion, to conclude, to sum up, for these reasons, in summary, finally, lastly

7. Now, try practicing your power paragraphs with your table partner.

8. VOICE
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9. 1 2 3 Unique The writer speaks to the reader in a voice that is…
Compelling 2
Engaging 3
Unique
The writer has definitely considered the audience while writing.

10. WHO ARE YOU? WHY ARE YOU WRITING?
Your VOICE should be present in every piece of writing you make. Sometimes your presence needs to be strong, but sometimes it should be kept subtle. Think about situations in which you need to be more forceful. Think about situations in which you need to be more understated.

11. Read the following passage. What are you feeling after you read it?
Recently I went to the theater to see a digitally re-mastered new version of Cinderella. When I paid for my ticket, I was shocked that they were charging ten dollars! Ten dollars to see a movie that is not even original. Like many of the remakes out there today, the stories are the same as they were twenty years ago. They don’t even get very good actors. These remakes make me miss the classics.

12. Read the following passage, how does it differ from the last example?
“That’ll be ten dollars,” you hear the cashier demand. Ten dollars! Can you believe it? Ten dollars to see a movie that is not really original. Ten dollars to see some hour-and-a half- knock-off-wannabe-remake. “Digitally re-mastered!” my rear end. I am paying ten dollars to see a new version of Cinderella so that I can see that her foot isn’t white; it’s peach. All of these waste-of-time remakes are exactly the same characters and plotlines as they were twenty years ago. The only new things about them are the one-hit wonder actors doing what they call “acting” in front of cheesy green screens. Whatever happened to the classics? Keyword here: classics.

13. REMEMBER: Vibrant student papers are filled with rich voice—you can hear the authors in their papers.

14. I’m going to pass out three different college essays.
Read yours and mark instances of strong VOICE with an asterisk*.
When you’re finished, share with your table partner.

15. Brainstorm a prompt for YOUR college essay.
Write a POWER PARAGRAPH for your essay.
If time, outline your essay on the back.