1. Introduction
Is the introduction more than two sentences long? (No: ADD MORE) Is the thesis, a sentence that answers the question given: Do the most successful leaders follow Machiavelli’s rules? (No: MISSING THESIS) Underline what you think is the thesis.

2. Paragraph 1
Is there a first body paragraph? (No: MISSING BODY) Is there a clear topic sentence? (No: MISSING TOPIC) Does the topic sentence support their thesis? (No: TOPIC OFF TOPIC) Is there AT LEAST one quotation or paraphrase from Machiavelli in this paragraph? (No: MISSING MACH QUOTE) Is there AT LEAST one quote or paraphrase from Biography.com? (No: MISSING BIOGRAPHY PARAPHRASE) Is each quotation or paraphrase followed by a citation with the author’s last name or article title? [(Machiavelli 100) (“Richard Nixon”)] (No: MISSING CITATIONS) Is there at least one sentence of explanation following each quote/paraphrase used? (No: NOT ENOUGH EXPLANATION)

3. Paragraph 2 Is there a first body paragraph? (No: MISSING BODY)
Is there a clear topic sentence? (No: MISSING TOPIC)
Does the topic sentence support their thesis? (No: TOPIC OFF TOPIC)
Is there AT LEAST one quotation or paraphrase from Machiavelli in this paragraph? (No: MISSING MACH QUOTE)
Is there AT LEAST one quote or paraphrase from Biography.com? (No: MISSING BIOGRAPHY PARAPHRASE)
Is each quotation or paraphrase followed by a citation with the author’s last name or article title? [(Machiavelli 100) (“Richard Nixon”)] (No: MISSING CITATIONS)
Is there at least one sentence of explanation following each quote/paraphrase used? (No: NOT ENOUGH EXPLANATION)

4. Paragraph 3
Is there a first body paragraph? (No: MISSING BODY) Is there a clear topic sentence? (No: MISSING TOPIC) Does the topic sentence support their thesis? (No: TOPIC OFF TOPIC) Is there AT LEAST one quotation or paraphrase from Machiavelli in this paragraph? (No: MISSING MACH QUOTE) Is there AT LEAST one quote or paraphrase from Biography.com? (No: MISSING BIOGRAPHY PARAPHRASE) Is each quotation or paraphrase followed by a citation with the author’s last name or article title? [(Machiavelli 100) (“Richard Nixon”)] (No: MISSING CITATIONS) Is there at least one sentence of explanation following each quote/paraphrase used? (No: NOT ENOUGH EXPLANATION)

5. Conclusion
Is the conclusion more than two sentences long? (No: ADD MORE) Is the thesis restated in the first sentence of the introduction? (No: MISSING THESIS) Are there five paragraphs total or more? (No: NOT 5 PARAGRAPHS)

6. Works Cited Page
Richard Nixon said, “I am not a crook” (“Richard Nixon”). Or
According to Biography.com, Richard Nixon denied that he had been involved, but recordings later found that this was untrue (“Richard Nixon”).
Work Cited
“Richard Nixon.” Biography.com Accessed on January 23, 2017.
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Are all sources cited listed in a full bibliography at the end of the essay? (No: MISSING BIBLIOGRAPHY or MISSING PART OF BIBLIOGRAPHY)
Are there at least four sources in the bibliography? (No: MISSING SOURCES)

7. Plagiarism Check
Skim the article for numbers: dates, percentages, populations, demographics, etc.
Circle all numbers.
If a number is not written within quotes or a cited paraphrased portion of text, starting with “According to” and ending with a citation like (Smith), then write a ‘P’ in the margin next to the plagiarized fact.

8. Repetition - Blue
***3 minutes of silence while everyone reads through their partners paper. Keep an eye out for repetition of the same or similar PHRASES. Do not highlight individual words at the beginning of a sentence yet.***
Heroes do good for everyone. Martin Luther King was a good man.
He did good things for African Americans.
My dad is a hero because he was in the military. He told me all of the things he did in the military. I am proud of him being in the military because he saved lives in the military.

9. Initial wording - YELLOW
Highlight the first word of every sentence yellow. When finished, In the upper left hand corner of the first page, list any words that were repeated more than 3 times in the whole paper.
Initial
word
repetition: -I
-Then

10. Transitions -Pen
The following are a list of transitions. Please choose one that sounds good for the beginning of each paragraph. If the author has no paragraphs write a large ‘P’ where you think a paragraph is needed. Typically, paragraphs begin when the scene changes or the idea shifts. Furthermore, For example, For instance, However, On the other hand, As a result, In addition, Although, Likewise, Similarly, Therefore, In other words, First, Secondly, Then, Thirdly, Next, Lastly, Overall,

11. List of ‘be’ verbs:
Be verbs - Pink is be am
being
are
been
was
were

12. Be verbs - Pink
BAD:
After many attempts to “revive” downtown Greensboro, it finally appears to be happening. Streets that were once empty after dark are now bustling with activity – or at least they are showing signs of life.
GOOD:
After many attempts to “revive” downtown Greensboro, it finally appears the city is bursting with new life. Streets that once laid desolate after dark awaken with activity – or at least they flicker with signs of life.

13. Return the paper to the original owner.
Number 1-2 on the back of your own essay.
Did I start my story with an interesting introduction that will make the reader want to read more? 1.
Y or N- need imagery in my first paragraph. 5 senses.

14. For 3 minutes, read your OWN paper aloud to yourself
***For 3 minutes, read your OWN paper aloud to yourself. Mark anything that sounds unclear***
Do all of my sentences make sense? 2. Y or N- I circled areas of confusion that need to be fixed with pen or pencil

15. EDITING Sam Soandso Period 1
Number every line of your essay.
Pull out a piece of lined paper, put your name on it
Label it as such to number 12:
Sam Soandso
Period 1
Rule # | Peer Initials | Notes (Line numbers)
1 | J. J | Caps needed line 4 , 24, and 27
2 | |
3 | |

16. Rule 1
RULE-All text inside of in-text citation parentheses needs to start with a capital. i.e. (Smith 20) and (“Recycling For the Future”).
ERROR- “99.9% of the world’s best students reside at Clemens High School” (“top high schools”).
FIX-“99.9% of the world’s best students reside at Clemens High School” (“Top High Schools”).
“I have a dream” (King Jr., Martin Luther)

17. Rule 2:
RULE-If it is not an author’s name in the in-text citation parentheses, it is an article title, and it needs to be in quotation marks. i.e. (“Recycling or the Future”).
ERROR- “99.9% of the world’s best students reside at Clemens High School” (Top High Schools).
FIX- “99.9% of the world’s best students reside at Clemens High School” (“Top High Schools”).
CORRECT AS IS: “99.9% of the world’s best students reside at Clemens High School” (Smith 29).

18. Rule 3
RULE-Periods go at the end of the in-text citation parentheses not at the end of the sentence. If the sentence ends in a question or exclamation mark, those are placed at the end of the sentence; but, a period still goes after the citation.
ERROR- “99.9% of the world’s best students reside at Clemens High School.” (“top high schools”) ~OR~
“99.9% of the world’s best students reside at Clemens High School!” (“top high schools”)
FIX- “99.9% of the world’s best students reside at Clemens High School” (“top high schools”). ~OR~
“99.9% of the world’s best students reside at Clemens High School!” (“top high schools”).

19. Rule 4
RULE- If a sentence starts with any of the following words, it is a complex [ D,I ] sentence that needs a comma before the independent clause:
ERROR- Wherever there are people vices are close by.
FIX- Wherever there are people, vices are close by.
after if
whenever
although
since
where as
than
wherever
as if
though
while
as though
unless in
because
until
before
when

20. Rule 5
Spelling
RULE- (effect/affect, then/than, their/they’re/there, you/you’re)
ERROR:
The affect of greed is never finding happiness with what you have.
Pride was said to be worse then any other vice.
Their is no greater sin than pride.
FIX:
The effect of greed is never finding happiness with what you have.
Pride was said to be worse than any other vice.
There is no greater sin than pride.

21. Rule 6
Any time you said “According to” a name, article title, or book/magazine/website title should follow. This is how they should appear: According to John Smith,…(Smith). According to “The Truth,”…(“The Truth”). According to Time,…(Time). *note commas

22. Rule 7 Capitalization of time periods:
Right: Medieval Era, Middle Ages, 1500s, 16th century
Wrong: medieval era, middle ages, 1500S, 16th Century

23. Rule 8
Capitalization of proper names of places, people, nationalities, and titles:
Right: Machiavelli, Sgt. Jones, Sargent Jones, Bill Clinton, America, Britain, Americans, English, Spanish, New York. “The Prince,” Biography.com.

24. Rule 9 Commas after transitional words For example, However,
For Instance,
Meanwhile, (..and many more! Ask if you aren’t sure if it is a transition word or not)

25. Rule 10 MLA Heading: Double spaced, size 12 Name Teacher Course
Date (10 January 2017)

26. Rule 11 Commas with dialogue:
Machiavelli said, “………” (Machiavelli 100).
Martin Luther King, Jr. said, “I have a dream” (“Martin Luther King Jr.”).

27. Rule 12
When first mentioning a politician, you must type out their whole name. After that you should use their last name only. Topic sentence: Hillary Clinton adhered to Machiavelli’s suggestion. Clinton said, “I have not broken the law.” Topic sentence: Hillary adhered to Machiavelli’s suggestion. Hillary said, “I have not broken the law.”