Communication Workshop

Aims for today: You will be able to write a story with the following skills:  1 attracting the reader at the beginning  2 using adjectives or adverbs to make languages vivid.  3 showing the order of events by sequence

Writing: events in my life Step1:Check homework about Ex1. and Ex2. Read the three drafts of a student’s composition on the topic A Day When Everything Went Wrong. Decide which one is the most interesting. The draft C is the most interesting.

(1)attracts the attention of the reader at the beginning of a story. (2)shows the order of events. (3)shares feelings with the reader. (4)use vivid language to make the writing more interesting. Ex2.: Ⅰ discuss their answers about how the writer

May 24 th, 2005 will live in my mind forever. How the writer attracts the attention of the reader Ⅱ Check the answers by reading the correct answers together.

1 强调句型 :It is + 被强调部分 +that clause Eg: It was the first time that I had won the First Prize in this field. Is there any other ways to attract the attention of the reader at the beginning? 2 To start with a question: Do you find housework tiring and boring? ( From Modul4 Unit10 Lesson4 Advertisements 3 Using some attractive adjectives or adverbs for description: Eg: Helen Keller was a very special girl who needed a superb teacher.( From Modul6 Lesson3

How the writer shows the order of events The day started to go wrong the instant I left home. But the trouble was only just Beginning Even then, my troubles were not over. As I got into bed, …

Other words to show orders: Group1 : Firstly,secondly, lastly, finally Group2 : At first, then, next, after that, later on,afterwards, since then, at last Group3: At the beginning, as soon as,before long, soon, meanwhile,immediately, when, suddenly, suddenly when, shortly after that, eventually -----From English weekly(7)

“good luck in the poetry reading competition this afternoon”,said Mr Fan as he quickly passed me. …and you can imagine how I felt by the time. How the writer shares feelings with the reader

How the writer used vivid language to make the writing more interesting The sun was already boiling hot… Mr. fan, the English teacher, a large but friendly man, gave me a nasty surprise. He reminded me in his loud voice that …

As I climbed up the stairs to the classroom, I heard a booming voice behind me. I felt tense and dizzy. When I left the stage people didn’t applaud very loudly and it came as no surprise that I was last in the competition.

I tried, and failed to practise during the lunch break. The result? I couldn’t remember any of the poems and had to keep looking down at my book. The more I looked down, the redder my face became.

More expressions with vivid languages:  Eg: a terrible vocanic eruption a frozen moment in history a great loss an awesome historical site a booming Roman city the decorated walls the authentic objects the extremely rich man in the particularly good mood the freezing cold day

Step3 Summary : Read the three stages and match with the writing skills 1 stage 1 A attract the reader’s attention : 特句式 “you” 2 stage 2 B describe feelings and events: adj./adv direct speech 3 stage 3 C sequence : start to … but …just beginning even though…not over first…next …after that…suddenly when…just then…later… in the end

Step4: writing  Write a story about My Lucky Day according to the pictures given

My Lucky Day

Write a story about My Lucky Day according to the pictures given Find the lost purse Win the First prize Have a big meal

Step5 : Writing guidance: Before writing, you have to be clear about the things below: 1 tenses: 2 address: 3 the events: the past tenses I you find the lost purse win the First Prize have a big meal

▲4 sth. special for this passage: An attractive beginning: 1 Have you ever experienced a particularly lucky day? I have! 2 July 1st will be an unforgettable day in my life! 3 It is the first time I have met so many lucky things happened in the same day.

Sequences:  But that’s just the beginning of my good luck.  Much luckier than that, I …  My good luck isn’t over.  Besides that, a much bigger surprise is waiting for me!

Vivid languages to show the happy feelings:  What a wonderful day ! The sun is so bright; the birds are singing beautifully in the wood.  It is an extremely lucky day!  You can’t imagine my excitement.  I can’t wait to do sth.  I am too excited to express myself.  I am so happy that …

step6 checking Ⅰ share their paper in their group Ⅱ choose the best one of the group to PK in class (7’)

Choose the best group : group content group 1 grou p2 group 3 group 4 group 5 group 6 the best group Attractive (3 分 ) Sequence （ 3 分 ) Vivid (3 分 ) Tense spelling… (1 分 )

Step7 homework(2’)  Polish the writing after class and copy it on the exercise book