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Personal Narrative Writing Organization – Using the Flee Map I had a job working in the cafeteria during breakfast times in college. One day, I was late for work. First, Then, Last, Woke up Dressed Cafeteria Clocked in Serving Line Curlers/slippers Dark Uniform Keys disoriented Clock_____ Panic_____ Working in the cafeteria was not a very exciting job, but the day I was late certainly is a day I will remember. Not only was I late, but I was embarrassed by not being fully dressed for work.

Late for Work Tick, tock. Tick, tock. Tick, tock. My eyes slowly opened as I could hear the sound. There was a little light coming through the window. What was that sound? Where was it coming from? As I searched with my eyes around the room, my eyes stopped on the maker of the tick, tock. That’s when I realized I was late for work. I panicked immediately! Next, I had to get dress quickly. I couldn’t turn the light on, because my roommate was still asleep. I had to get dressed in the dark. I found my uniform without any problems, because I had it laid out the night before over the door. Finding my keys weren’t so easy. I finally found them on my dresser. Last, I went to the cafeteria. I had to clock in. I was 30 minutes late. I went to the serving line and helped serve breakfast. While I was serving breakfast, I realized I was wearing curlers in my hair and slippers on my feet. Working in the cafeteria was not a very exciting job, but the day I was late certainly is a day I will remember. Not only was I late, but I was embarrassed by not being fully dressed for work.

Late for Work Changing the verbs Tick, tock. Tick, tock. Tick, tock. My eyes slowly opened as I could hear the sound. There was a little light peaking through the window. What was that sound? Where was it coming from? As I searched with my eyes around the room, my eyes stopped on the maker of the tick, tock. That’s when I realized I was late for work. I panicked immediately! Next, I had to get dress quickly. I couldn’t turn the light on, because my roommate was still asleep. I had to get dressed in the dark. I searched for my uniform without any problems, because I had it laid out the night before over the door. Finding my keys wasn’t so easy. I finally discovered them on my dresser. Last, I sprinted to the cafeteria. I had to clock in. I was 30 minutes late. I went to the serving line and helped serve breakfast. While I slopping up breakfast, I realized I was wearing curlers in my hair and slippers on my feet. Working in the cafeteria was not a very exciting job, but the day I was late certainly is a day I will remember. Not only was I late, but I was embarrassed by not being fully dressed for work.

Late for Work Adding “juicy words” Tick, tock. Tick, tock. Tick, tock. My sleepy eyes slowly opened as I could hear the sound. There was a little light peaking through the window. What was that sound? Where was it coming from? As I searched with my eyes around the room, my eyes stopped on the maker of the tick, tock. That’s when I realized I was late for work. I panicked immediately! Next, I had to get dress quickly. I couldn’t turn the light on, because my roommate was still asleep. I had to get dressed in the shadows of the dark room. I searched for my red and white striped uniform without any problems, because I had it laid out the night before over the door. Finding my keys wasn’t so easy. I finally discovered them on my dresser. Last, I sprinted to the cafeteria like a cheetah in the wild. I had to clock in. I was 30 minutes late. After explaining to my boss what happened, I went to the serving line and helped serve breakfast which consisted of steaming hot scrambled eggs with white shredded cheese on top, mouth-watering sausage and crispy bacon. While I dishing up breakfast, I realized I was wearing curlers in my hair and slippers on my feet. Oh no, I thought. This is certainly not my day! May be I should have just stayed in bed. Working in the cafeteria was not a very exciting job, but the day I was late certainly is a day I will remember. Not only was I late, but I was embarrassed by not being fully dressed for work.

Late for Work Tick, tock. Tick, tock. Tick, tock. My sleepy eyes slowly opened as I could hear the sound. There was a little light peaking through the window. What was that sound? Where was it coming from? As I searched with my eyes around the room, my eyes stopped on the maker of the tick, tock. That’s when I realized I was late for work. I panicked immediately! Next, I had to get dress quickly. I couldn’t turn the light on, because my roommate was still asleep. I had to get dressed in the shadows of the dark room. I searched for my red and white striped uniform without any problems, because I had it laid out the night before over the door. Finding my keys wasn’t so easy. I finally discovered them on my dresser. Last, I sprinted to the cafeteria like a cheetah in the wild. I had to clock in. I was 30 minutes late. After explaining to my boss what happened, I went to the serving line and helped serve breakfast which consisted of steaming hot scrambled eggs with white shredded cheese on top, mouth-watering sausage and crispy bacon. While I dishing up breakfast, I realized I was wearing curlers in my hair and slippers on my feet. Oh no, I thought. This is certainly not my day! May be I should have just stayed in bed. Working in the cafeteria was not a very exciting job, but the day I was late certainly is a day I will remember. Not only was I late, but I was embarrassed by not being fully dressed for work.

Conclusion Should be the best part of paper What a reader remembers most about your story – final impressions Brings closure to the reader Sums up or brings final perspective on topic

Conclusion Restates the Introduction Explains why the event is memorable or may tell an important lesson learned Contains 4-5 strong sentences reviewing main points Briefly describes feelings about topic

Examples of Endings Happy Endings Sad Endings Surprise Endings

Examples of Endings Happy Endings Sad Endings Surprise Endings Assignment Look at the stories in your reader. Make a tree map listing the title of the story under the type of ending the author uses.

Late for Work Tick, tock. Tick, tock. Tick, tock. My sleepy eyes slowly opened as I could hear the sound. There was a little light peaking through the window. What was that sound? Where was it coming from? As I searched with my eyes around the room, my eyes stopped on the maker of the tick, tock. That’s when I realized I was late for work. I panicked immediately! Next, I had to get dress quickly. I couldn’t turn the light on, because my roommate was still asleep. I had to get dressed in the shadows of the dark room. I searched for my red and white striped uniform without any problems, because I had it laid out the night before over the door. Finding my keys wasn’t so easy. I finally discovered them on my dresser. Last, I sprinted to the cafeteria like a cheetah in the wild. I had to clock in. I was 30 minutes late. After explaining to my boss what happened, I went to the serving line and helped serve breakfast which consisted of steaming hot scrambled eggs with white shredded cheese on top, mouth-watering sausage and crispy bacon. While I dishing up breakfast, I realized I was wearing curlers in my hair and slippers on my feet. Oh no, I thought. This is certainly not my day! May be I should have just stayed in bed. Working in the cafeteria was not a very exciting job, but the day I was late certainly is a day I will remember. Not only was I late, but I was embarrassed by not being fully dressed for work.

Late for Work Late for Work Working in the cafeteria was not a very exciting job, but the day I was late certainly is a day I will remember. Not only was I late, but I was embarrassed by not being fully dressed for work. Good Ending

Late for Work Late for Work Working in the cafeteria was not a very exciting job, but the day I was late certainly is a day I will remember. Not only was I late, but I was embarrassed by not being fully dressed for work. Oh, well. Being late for work wasn’t the worst thing that has happened to me. I even laugh about it now. To this very day, however, I still get nervous about not hearing my alarm clock. I still use the same alarm clock that I had when I was in college. Every night I make sure to check it so that it will go off at the time I set it for. As a back up I set my watch - just in case. Better Ending

Late for Work Tick, tock. Tick, tock. Tick, tock. My sleepy eyes slowly opened as I could hear the sound. There was a little light peaking through the window. What was that sound? Where was it coming from? As I searched with my eyes around the room, my eyes stopped on the maker of the tick, tock. That’s when I realized I was late for work. I panicked immediately! Panicking wasn’t going to solve the problem. So, I got ready quickly. I couldn’t turn the light on, because my roommate was still asleep. I put my clothes on in the shadows of the dark room. I searched for my red and white striped uniform without any problems, because I had it laid out the night before over the door. Finding my keys wasn’t so easy. I finally discovered them on my dresser. As soon as I was dressed, I sprinted to the cafeteria like a cheetah in the wild. I had to clock in. I was 30 minutes late. After explaining to my boss what happened, I went to the serving line and helped serve breakfast which consisted of steaming hot scrambled eggs with white shredded cheese on top, mouth-watering sausage and crispy bacon. While dishing up breakfast, I realized I was wearing curlers in my hair and slippers on my feet. Oh no, I thought. This is certainly not my day! Maybe I should have just stayed in bed. Oh, well. Being late for work wasn’t the worst thing that has happened to me. I even laugh about it now. To this very day, however, I still get nervous about not hearing my alarm clock. I still use the same alarm clock that I had when I was in college. Every night I make sure to check it so that it will go off at the time I set it for. As a back up I set my watch - just in case.

Assignment: Rewrite the final draft of your “late story.” Change your ending and edit for correct conventions.