1. Step-by-Step-get right to the most important part & hold reader’s attention Show-not-Tell-create a picture in the reader’s mind Relevant Dialogue-give the story real -life Figurative Language-similes, metaphors, idioms, hyperboles, personification

2. It was the 8 th inning of the champion game. The score was 4 to 5. We were down by 1 point. I was up to bat. The crowd was chanting my name. I was nervous as I approached the plate. The pitcher looked fierce and I hoped he didn’t sense my fear. The next thing I knew there was a fast ball heading my way. I swung and missed! The crowed grew silent. I lifted my bat up and waited. The next pitch was a curve ball. I lifted my bat and swung as hard as I could. I hit a home run and the crowed went crazy. It was the 8 th inning of the champion game. The score was 4 to 5. We were down by 1 point. I was up to bat. The crowd was chanting my name. I was nervous as I approached the plate. The pitcher looked fierce and I hoped he didn’t sense my fear. The next thing I knew there was a fast ball heading my way. I swung and missed! The crowed grew silent. I lifted my bat up and waited. The next pitch was a curve ball. I lifted my bat and swung as hard as I could. I hit a home run and the crowed went crazy. Step by Step

3. Show-Not-Tell It was the 8 th inning of the champion game. The score was 4 to 5. We were down by 1 point. And I was up to bat. The crowd was chanting my name. I hands were shaking as I grabbed the bat and slowly approached the plate. The pitcher glared at me and I hoped he didn’t notice my legs trembling. I took a breath, tapped by bat three times on the plate, lifted my bat, swung and missed! The crowed grew silent. I lifted my bat up and waited. The next pitch was a curve ball. Why did I swing? My last chance. Something happened. This time I glared at the pitcher. I tapped my bat three times on the plate as if tell him where I wanted the pitch. The next thing I knew there was a fast ball heading my way. I swung as hard as I could. It was the 8 th inning of the champion game. The score was 4 to 5. We were down by 1 point. And I was up to bat. The crowd was chanting my name. I hands were shaking as I grabbed the bat and slowly approached the plate. The pitcher glared at me and I hoped he didn’t notice my legs trembling. I took a breath, tapped by bat three times on the plate, lifted my bat, swung and missed! The crowed grew silent. I lifted my bat up and waited. The next pitch was a curve ball. Why did I swing? My last chance. Something happened. This time I glared at the pitcher. I tapped my bat three times on the plate as if tell him where I wanted the pitch. The next thing I knew there was a fast ball heading my way. I swung as hard as I could.

4. Relevant Dialogue It was the 8 th inning of the champion game. The score was 4 to 5. We were down by 1 point. And I was up to bat. The crowd was chanting my name, “Danny, Danny, Danny!” I was nervous as I approached the plate. The pitcher looked fierce and I hoped he didn’t sense my fear. The next thing I knew there was a fast ball heading my way. I swung and missed! The crowed grew silent. I lifted my bat up and waited. The next pitch was a curve ball. Why did I swing? My last chance. Just then the catcher taunted, “He’s got nothing!” Something happened. I lifted my bat and swung as hard as I could. I hit a home run and the crowed went crazy. My teammates were waiting for at home plate. It was the 8 th inning of the champion game. The score was 4 to 5. We were down by 1 point. And I was up to bat. The crowd was chanting my name, “Danny, Danny, Danny!” I was nervous as I approached the plate. The pitcher looked fierce and I hoped he didn’t sense my fear. The next thing I knew there was a fast ball heading my way. I swung and missed! The crowed grew silent. I lifted my bat up and waited. The next pitch was a curve ball. Why did I swing? My last chance. Just then the catcher taunted, “He’s got nothing!” Something happened. I lifted my bat and swung as hard as I could. I hit a home run and the crowed went crazy. My teammates were waiting for at home plate.

5. Figurative Language It was the 8 th inning of the champion game. The score was 4 to 5. We were down by 1 point and I was up to bat. The crowd was chanting my name. My stomach was in knots as I approached the plate. The pitcher looked fierce and I felt under the gun The next thing I knew there was a fast ball heading my way. I swung and missed! The crowed grew silent. I lifted my bat up and waited. The next pitch was a curve ball which I was a swing and a miss. Now I had a bone to pick. I lifted my bat and swung as hard as I could. I hit a home run and the crowed went crazy. My teammates were waiting for at home plate. It was the 8 th inning of the champion game. The score was 4 to 5. We were down by 1 point and I was up to bat. The crowd was chanting my name. My stomach was in knots as I approached the plate. The pitcher looked fierce and I felt under the gun The next thing I knew there was a fast ball heading my way. I swung and missed! The crowed grew silent. I lifted my bat up and waited. The next pitch was a curve ball which I was a swing and a miss. Now I had a bone to pick. I lifted my bat and swung as hard as I could. I hit a home run and the crowed went crazy. My teammates were waiting for at home plate.