1. Personal Essay A Person I Admire
Name _____________________ Period _____

2. Getting Started Audience: Fifth Grade Students Parents and Families
Teachers and Principals
Purpose: Write an essay describing a person you admire
Voice: Personal Essay
Format: Multiple Paragraph Essay

3. Paragraph One Opening/Lead Closing/Concluding Paragraph
Paragraph Two
Physical Traits
Descriptive Essay Map
Paragraph Three
Redeeming Quality #1
Paragraph Four
Redeeming Quality #2
Paragraph Five
Closing/Concluding Paragraph

4. Personal Essay Graphic Organizer
Subject Statement and Lead
Paragraph #1
Topic #1
Detail
Paragraph #2
Topic #2
Detail
Paragraph #3
Topic/ #3
Detail
Paragraph #4
Closing/Conclusion
Paragraph #5

5. Admirable Personality Traits and Redeeming Qualities
Admirable Qualities and Personality Traits Evidence Of Qualities and Traits

6. Admirable Personality Traits
Redeeming Qualities
Person Redeeming Qualities Evidence
Herman Boone
Bill Yoast
Julius Cambell
Gary Bertier

7. Brainstorming
Person Qualities I Admire/Personality Traits Evidence

8. Grab The Reader’s Attention Lead
Paragraph #1
Introduction
Beginning
The introductory paragraph has a few important functions.
Grab The Reader’s Attention
Lead
Present the Subject of the Essay
Topic Sentence
Briefly Explain Topics
Support Sentences

9. Physical Characteristics
Paragraph 2
Middle
Detail Digging Questions Elaboration
Detail #1
Detail #2
Detail #3
Detail #4
Detail #5
Detail #6

10. Paragraph Three Redeeming Quality #1 Middle
Fill in redeeming quality #1 here.
Story That Shows This Quality

11. Paragraph Four Redeeming Quality #2 Middle
Fill in redeeming quality #2 here.
Story That Shows This Quality

12. Paragraph 5 Conclusion End Sum up the main points of the essay
Leave the reader with a clear understanding of subject
Finish with a powerful sentence

13. Things That Are Bugging Me
Revision Questions
Ideas
Does my essay have a clear focus?
Have I used an effective lead?
Have I used specific details, examples, and facts?
Have I elaborated on details, examples, and facts?
Organization
Is my essay broken into effective paragraphs?
Are my paragraphs connected to each other and to the subject?
Do I have effective topic sentences for each paragraph?
Are my body sentences organized to help create meaning?
Have I used an effective closing for my essay?
Voice
Do I use language in an engaging way that keeps readers interested?
Does my writing show that I care about the subject?
Does my writing show that I am thinking about the reader?
Does my writing present an appropriate level of language? (not too informal)
Word Choice
Do I use specific nouns?
Do I use interesting adjectives?
Is my writing free of wordy phrases and unnecessary words?
Sentence Fluency
Are my sentences complete?
Are they clear and easy to understand?
Did I try to vary my sentence structure?
Conventions
follows the basic rules of grammar
follows the basic rules of spelling
follows the basic rules of capitalization
follows the basic rules of punctuation
Revision Worksheet
Things That Are Bugging Me

14. I want to focus on the following areas:
Editing Worksheet
Editing Checklist
Conventions
Do my sentences follow the basic rules of grammar?
Are all my words spelled correctly?
Have I followed the basic rules of capitalization?
Are all my sentences punctuated correctly?
Does my essay look neat and presentable?
I want to focus on the following areas:

15. Publishing/Computer Cluster Guidelines
Publishing Format
Publishing/Computer Cluster Guidelines 
Publishing Guidelines
12 point font
Black
Times New Roman, Calibri, Comic Sans
1.5 Line Spacing
Title
First and Last Name
Period
Check paragraph indentations and spacing.
Title
First and Last Name
Period #

16. Writing Process Rubric
Personal Essay Rubric
Six Traits Rubric
Ideas
essay is informative with a clear focus
has an effective lead
contains specific details, examples, and facts
elaborates on details, examples, and facts
Organization
essay is broken into effective paragraphs
paragraphs are connected to each other and subject
paragraphs have effective topic sentences
body sentences are organized to create meaning
essay has an effective closing
Voice
speaks in an engaging way that keeps readers interested
shows that writer cares about the subject
shows that the writer is thinking about the reader
presents an appropriate level of language (not too informal)
Word Choice
specific nouns are used to create meaning
interesting adjectives
writing is free of wordiness
Sentence Fluency
sentences are clear and easy to understand
shows a variety in sentence beginnings and lengths
Conventions
follows the basic rules of grammar
follows the basic rules of spelling
follows the basic rules of capitalization
follows the basic rules of punctuation
Name:
Period:
Title: A Person I Admire
Type: Personal Essay
Length: Multiple Paragraphs
Feedback
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Writing Process Rubric
Prewriting
brainstorms and plans writing
Rough Draft Writing
uses plan to generate rough draft
Revising
makes revisions
Editing
proofreads and edits writing
Publishing
writing is neat and presentable