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Power! PUNCH! Pizazz!
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The parts of the story that the reader just can’t forget.
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The writer has weighed the options and chosen a description that best captures what is wanted.
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The reader should be able to SEE the characters, the events, the setting, etc. The words make the story play like a movie in the reader’s mind.
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Show the unique nature of writing through different word choices. Bad Example: He was tall and scary. Better Example: Jonny was as tall as a tree…if you stood in his shadow, you could feel an angry chill.
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Reminder: A verb is a word that expresses action or being. Examples: attack, belittle, disapprove, exercise, float, flip, harrass, pinch, pretend, sneeze, etc.
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Bad Example: Julian Nicole Michaels whispered subtly into the rustling breeze as the lazily floating water rippled and bubbled over the slippery, moss-covered boulders in the lingering glow of twilight. Yikes! Can you imagine how long that book would be? Better Example: Julian whispered her thoughts into the wind, letting it carry her worries away. Still gives a mental picture without all the fluff and pomp.
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The topic If it is a scary story, beautiful fluffy language might not work. Use, instead, sharp and suspenseful language. The audience Five-year-olds read at a much different level than 55-year-olds. “Jane ran fast” might be powerful for a young child, but would bore an older reader to tears. The purpose Refer to the first two! The topic (point wanted to express) and the audience determine the purpose.
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WORD CHOICE: WEAK WRITING SAMPLE STUDENT WRITING SAMPLE Austin Hunter 1135 Key Lane San Rafael, CA 95521 (916) 555-2368 Job Objective: To help people with their computers and stuff. Experience: I’ve been playing around on computers for a few years now. I know a lot about computers. I’ve helped at school with the computer classes. Education: I graduated from Lewiston High School with a 3.0 GPA. I took CAD (computer class) at my high school. Hobbies: Soccer, guitar, hanging out. References: Available upon request.
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Don’t repeat the same powerful words over, and over, and over, and over, and over and…get it? Bad Example: Her sapphire eyes beheld her sapphire dress with pleasure. She ran outside, under the sapphire sky and saw Jenny coming In her sapphire car…blah, blah, blah. Bad Example: Danny got into the car, then Danny put on his seatbelt. Danny started the car and drove to Denny’s. Danny found a parking place… You know what the reader is thinking? “I hate the name Danny.”
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In groups, take the rest of the period to get as far as you can in the packet. Add at least 3-4 words to each section.
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POWERFUL WORDS
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Sight words describe appearance, shapes, movements, and colors.
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Scarlet Burgundy Blood Wine Garnet Flame Carmine Vermilion Auburn Cardinal Crimson Currant Strawberry Coral Rose Salmon pink
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Sky Sapphire Azure Delft Porcelain Aquamarine Robin’s egg Prussian blue Peacock Teal Cobalt Powder Ice Bluish Cerulean
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Celery Apple Moss Pea Kelly Emerald Neon-green Olive Pistachio Chartreuse Forest Yellow-green Grass-green Verdant Jade
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Almond Amber Tawny Hazel Cinnamon Nutmeg chocolate Honey Brunette Cocoa Nut brown Fawn Toasted Coffee Tea Rust Ginger Walnut Bronze Mahogany Caramel Drab Khaki Bay Puce Umber Russet
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Beige Buff Peach Apricot Buttercup Chartreuse Tangerine persimmon Canary Chrome Gold Topaz Ochre Saffron Sulfur Mustard Butterscotch Orange
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Coal Licorice Sable Raven Inky Pitch Shadowy Murky Lightless Dark Midnight Swarthy Stygian Moonless Dim
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Ashen Dove Silver Platinum Granite Lead Pewter Neutral Slate Dun Mouse Foggy Stormy Misty
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Amethyst Orchid Mauve Plum Pansy Eggplant Mulberry Fuchsia Magenta Wine Violet Pale purple Heliotrope Grape
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Gold Topaz Ochre Mustard Tangerine Persimmon Carrot Ginger Pumpkin
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Snow Marble Cream Oyster Platinum Bloodless Sallow Filmy Smoky Alabaster Colorless Pale Pallid Ghostly Bleached Wan Pasty Cadaverous Translucent Chalky Fair Blond
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Colorless Rainbow Drab Stark Bland Neon Metallic Vivid Vibrant Bright Pale
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Freckled Spotted Striped Clear Shiny Glowing Fluid Sparkling Iridescent Glazed Transparent Grimy Dark Dismal Rotted Worn
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Curved Loose Crooked Awkward Tired Exhausted Arid Ramshackle Ugly Cheap Messy Shabby Untidy Straight Orderly Formal
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Crisp Pretty Heavy Flat Stout Rigid Narrow Overloaded Congested Cluttered Crowded Jammed Packed Squeezed Bruised Stretched Lean Slender
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Frightened Nervous Tearful Apprehensive Fearful Shy Timid Miniature Strong Tiny Sickly Pasty Pale Fragile Frail Healthy Robust Hardy
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Run Scamper Scramble Dart Spin Stride Streak Gallop drive Dash Careen Rush Race Zoom Zip Ram Chase Hurl
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Sail Fly Swing Plunge Swoop Bounce Plummet Drop smash Swerve Flick Whisk Rip Shove Swat
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Crawl Slouch Lumber Bend Saunter Loiter Stray Stalk Stagger Lope Waddle Slither Drag Sway soar
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Lift Drift Droop Heave Dawdle
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Scrolled Globular Crimped Crinkled Conical Cylindrical Tubular Hollow Wide Portly Clustered Tufted Pendulous Jutting Triangular Rectangular Hexagonal Narrow Stretched
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Octagonal Square Pyramidal Tapering Branching Twiggy Split Broken straight Spindly Skinny Thin Wiry Shapely Winged Shapeless Crooked Curved
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Words that create a vivid picture!
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Cool Creamy Savory Acidic Buttery Bittersweet Hardy Mellow Crisp Ripe Tasteless Vinegary Fruity
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Tangy Unripe Alkaline Medicinal Fishy Gingery Hot Overripe Spoiled Rotten Gooey Tart Nutty
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Aromatic Perfumed Flowery Heady Fresh Balmy Earthy Piney Odorous Pungent Tempting Savory Sharp Gamey Briny Acidic Acrid Gaseous
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Reeking Rotten Spoiled Sickly Stagnant Musty Mildewed Damp Dank Stench Stale
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Words that best create vivid mind picture.
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Cold Icy Lukewarm Tepid Warm Hot Steamy Touch Elastic Wet Slippery Spongy Mushy Oily Fleshy Leathery Silky Satiny
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Frostbitten Brittle Sinewy Bubbly Moist Tender Fragile Thin Dull Dry Pulpy Rough Sandy Prickly Furry Soft Smooth
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Words that create the most vivid sound for the reader to hear.
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Bump Boom Bang Explode Roar Scream Shout Yell Whistle Whine Squawk Bark Bawl Bray Bluster Rage Blare Rumble Grate Slam Clap Stomp
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Stamp Noise Discord Jangle Rasp Clash Caterwaul Clamor Tumult Riot Racket Brawl Yowl Shatter
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Hum Murmur Whir Twitter Patter Mutter Crackle Bleat Peep Melody Resonance Harmony musical Gurgle Swish Rush Chime Tinkle Clink Hush Still Speechless Mute Faint Inaudible
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Stutter Giggle Guffaw Laugh Sing Yell Scream Screech Snort Bellow Murmur Whisper Whimper Talk Speak Drawl Hiss Chatter Growl
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