1. ICE QUOTES EVALUATING

2. LEARNING TARGET Evaluate other students paragraphs, including topic sentence and ICE quote, for the purpose of improving your own writing.

3. CONCLUDING SENTENCES (CS) Should not leave your reader hanging. Restate your topic sentence with different phrasing. Do not end with “This is why…” or “These are the reasons…”

4. SUPPORTING DETAILS (SD) If you make a claim (argument/opinion), you have to back it up with SUPPORT! Your job as the writer is to tell the reader everything including how you came up with your argument/opinion; they shouldn’t have to guess at it! If you tell me Zachariah is helpful to Charlotte, tell me WHY with examples from the text! In paragraphs, you need to include other support besides just the ICE quote. (ICE quotes are important, but come up with two more reasons to support your opinion. Paraphrase the information and explain why it supports your opinion.

5. CAN I USE PERSONAL PRONOUNS? NOOOOOOOO!!!!!!! If you are still making statements using personal pronouns like “I think…” “In my opinion…” etc, STOP!!!!! NO! You do NOT need these. I know it is you! Trust me!!! Consider the following statements. I think Captain Jaggery is punctilious. vs. Captain Jaggery is punctilious. Which one sounds more believable?

6. ONCE AGAIN…HOW WE SCORE… 3 – means you got it!!! You really know how to do this. 2 – means you are catching on and mostly know how to do this. You just need to keep practicing. 1 – means you are still learning and will need some further instruction on ICE quotes. 0 – means you did not attempt it or forgot about it.

7. EVALUATING STUDENTS WORK #1#2#3 TS I C E SD CS Overall

8. EXAMPLE #1 In the novel, The True Confessions of Charlotte Doyle, Captain Jagery’s actions are considered acceptable. Back in the 19 th Century the rich people basically ruled the poor and Captain Jaggery was a very high class genelmen and he did whatever he thought was right without thinking twice. Avi writes “Just to see him made my heart leap joyously with recognition and relief from his find coat, from his tall beaver hat, from his glossy black bookts, from his clean, chiseled countenance, from the dignified way he carried himself, I knew at once without having to be told that this must be Captain Jaggery. And he I saw it in a glance was a gentlemen, the kind of man I was used to.” By the discription of this quote readers can tell that he is a high class gentelman. I mean his the Captain of the ship! So that means he is in controll of what goes on.

9. EXAMPLE #2 In the novel, The True Confessions of Charlotte Doyle, Captain Jaggery’s actions are considered acceptable. Captin Jaggery’s actions are acceptable because it was the 19 th in England and poor people didn’t have the right to form a round robin agenst their captin and try to get revenge on their captain. “If captin Jaggery was so cruel, why should they have signed on again?” Zachariah leaned closer to me “Revenge,” he whispered. The quotation is Charlotte and Zachariah talking, Zachariah is trying to tell her that the crew really don’t like the captin and that something terrible might happen. Captin Jaggery found out what they were planning from Charlotte and that’s why he treats them like that but mostly because he says they are lazy men. In conclusion this is why Captin Jaggery from the novel The True Confessions of Charlotte Doyle is considered acceptable.

10. EXAMPLE #3 In the story, “The True Confessions of Charlotte Doyle” Captain Jaggery has done all the right things to keep his crew in line. One example is when his crew tried over ruling him and they had weapons so he grabbed his guns to defend him and his ship. Another example is when captain Jaggery says “These men meant to murder me and no doubt you” this proves that captain jaggery is doing the right thing because his crew was losing control. The last example is when he keeps them working at all times so they don’t get lazy and stop listening to Jaggery. Those are a few reasons why Captain Jaggery takes the right actions towards his crew.

11. HOW I SCORED THEM. #1#2#3 TS 333 I 210 C 223 E 332 Overall 222