Presentation on theme: "Breakdown of good essay!!"— Presentation transcript:
1 Breakdown of good essay!! Essentials Of WritingBreakdown of good essay!!
2 Steps in the Writing Process 1. Pre-writing (get ideas together, notes)2. Shaping the essay3. First draft (rough draft)4. Revision (peer editing) ideas flow?5. Edit (punctuation6. Final Draft** technically 5 steps
3 Body Paragraph(s) Paragraphs #2 and #3 Eight sentences 100+ words Should relate back to thesisThe “middle part” of an essay = the meat of the hamburgerDevelops the points you want to make
4 Body Paragraph Structure Sentence 1: Topic sentenceSentence 2: Concrete detail, starts with For example,Sentence 3: CommentarySentence 4: CommentarySentence 5: Concrete detail, starts with In additionSentence 6: CommentarySentence 7: CommentarySentence 8: Conclusion, all commentary
5 Concrete DetailsVery specific details that are the backbone of your paragraphs (reasons to support your case)Concrete details include: facts, specific examples, descriptions, quotes, proof, evidence (articles, newspapers, other sources)The reasons why!!
6 Commentary Your opinion about the topic being discussed Synonyms: opinion, interpretation, your own experience with the subject, reflection, how does it impact you, etc.Ask yourself…..How do I feel about this??Further explaining your reasons!!Comment on the point you made!
7 Topic Sentence The very first sentence in your body paragraphs Must have the subject (whatever you’re talking about) and commentary (your feeling)Tells what your entire paragraph will be explainingEx. I like camping more than anything
8 Putting It All Together Sentence #1 (TS): I hate shopping for Christmas. (it contains subject and feeling)Sentence #2 (CD): For example, the lines always have five or six people waiting for one cashier.Sentence # 3 (CM): It takes forever to pay for something how does it affect you?Sentence # 4 (CM): By the time I’m finished, I’m exhausted from running around. how does it affect you?
9 Your Turn!Remember: 2 points of commentary for every concrete detail!!!Sentence #1 (TS): The walls in this classroom are dull and boringSentence # 2 (CD): For example,________Sentence # 3 (CM):__________ (how it makes you feel)Sentence # 4 (CM): __________ how it makes you feel)
10 Concluding Sentence Last sentence in the body paragraph ALL commentary Don’t repeat key wordsSum it all up, give it a finished feeling
11 Tying it All Together Thesis: My favorite season of the year is summer Paragraph 1TS: The biggest reason is the relaxed change in my daily routine.CD: For example, I have time to sleep in and stay up late.CM: There are not emotional or physical demands on me.CM: I can recharge my energies for awhile.CD: In addition, I can watch TV or read as long as I want.CM: I have the leisure to do things I normally wouldn’t.CM: It feels okay to do them when I have unlimited time..CS: Not having any commitments lets me unwind
12 Writing Detectives!! What is wrong with the following commentary?? (TS) Camping is wonderful. For example, I like the fresh air the most. I hated the bites I got there. In addition, my family argued the whole time.How can me make this better. Let’s hear your examples!!
13 Great Job! This sounds much better…. Camping is wonderful. For example, I like the fresh air the most. I always feel healthier after some time in the mountains. It feels good to breathe deeply after the smog of the city.Yellow= concrete detailOrange= commentary
14 With A Partner…. Enhance the following commentary… Camping is the best vacation. For example, the air is clean and and clear. It sure is good being there. I like it a lot.
15 Introduction Paragraph The very first paragraph in an essayIt includes the thesis (very end, last sentence of your intro paragraph)Writer must find a way to “hook” the reader.
16 Thesis Statement The very last sentence in your intro paragraph The overarching idea of your paper what is the point in this paperMost important sentenceAll body paragraphs should relate back to thesisSentence with subject and opinion (commentary)
17 Types of Intros (Hook the reader) 1. Quotes- Must include quotation marks and cite the source (famous person)2. Anecdote- BRIEF personal story relating to the topic3. Fact/Statistic-4. Definition (WEAK)- Not too long, not a common everyday word5. Question (Can also be very weak) answered in reader’s mind6. Startling information- use exclamation point and word that makes readers jump
18 DO NOT…..Start intro with “ I am going to tell you about” or “This paper is going to be about”Not too much detailNot too shortNot too wordyPerfect = 40+ wordsSee Intro PPT
19 Thesis Statement Last sentence in opening paragraph Contains subject and opinionEX: Australia is the best country of all for a vacationFormat: Intro ParagraphIntro Hook (think of your options) = 4 sentencesThesis after your hook= 1 sentence
20 Lets PracticeFor each thesis, underline the subject and circle the opinion (commentary)Fishing is fun to do when I’m with my dadEnglish is my favorite classIt’s exciting going to a new schoolTacos are my favorite food
21 Thesis…yes or no? 1. My high school is the best one around__ 2. I have gone to East High for 3 years__3. My family went to Disneyland last year__4. School is a cool place to be__5. We are required to take 4 courses this school year__Answer: Y, N,N,Y,N…How did you do?
22 Conclusion/ Concluding Paragraph Last paragraph in essaySums up ideas and reflects on what was saidSay more commentary about your subject (save the best for last)ALL COMMENTARY!!Do not repeat thesis or key words (same words from paragraphs)Tie it all togetherRESTATE thesis in different words4-5 sentences!! See pgs in yellow handout for help!!