1. Welcome to CAHSEE BOOTCAMP Week 7

2. Celebration Time!!!!

3. Do Now  Choose the option that makes the most sense 1. That collection of essays, John wants on the bottom shelf. A. John wants them, that collection of essays B. John wants that collection of essays C. Wanted by John, that collection of essays D. Leave as is ** Issue is the object word order

4. Do Now…  2. Walking and to jog and to cycle are activities many people can enjoy A. To walk, and jogging and cycle B. To walk, to jog, and cycling C. Walking, Jogging, and cycling D. Leave as is ** The problem with this question is parallel structure

5. AGENDA  Do Now- (5 Minutes)  PPT- Writing Strategies (15)  Group Activity #1- (Paragraph Essay) (5-7)  Activity #2- Transitions (5-7 )  Group Activity #3-Sentence Variety (10 Minutes)  Group Activity #4- Redundant Expressions (10 min)  Group Activity #5-Precise language (10 min)  Review Exemplary Essay (10 min)  Survey/Goals (10 min)  Reminders (1 min)  If there is time remaining have students complete their biographical essay (week 6)

6. Coherence  In coherent writing, sentences fit together and flow in a logical and clear way. The ideas tie together smoothly and clearly, and readers can easily follow along

7. Factors of Coherent Writing  Appropriate paragraph breaks  Appropriate transitions  Sentence variety  Concise and precise language  Appropriate verb form

8. Paragraphs  Tell the reader when a new point or new information is presented. Each paragraph should tell the reader something new and important.  Indent to begin new paragraphs…  At the beginning of a story  Changing topic  Making a new point  When the speaker changes  When the place changes  When time changes

9. Activity I ( Paragraph Essay)  Students will work on pages 5 &6  Students can work independently or with a partner  Prepare to share with the class  (5-7 Minutes)

10. Transitions  Readers want to know when changes are coming or when important points are going to be made.  Words or phrases that serve as bridges from one idea to the next  Without transitions sentences and paragraphs seem choppy

11. Transition Examples Transitions to CompareTransitions to Contrast Also In the same way Just as… Likewise As in… Here, too, Although While On the contrary Nevertheless Yet Unlike/ However Transitions to EmphasizeTransitions to Clarify Indeed Truly For this reason Simply stated In fact Another key point Most importantly For example For instance In other words Simply stated Therefore

12. Transitions… Transitions to add InformationTransitions to Conclude In addition Moreover Furthermore Equally important Another factor Finally In summary In conclusion Lastly Therefore Transitions to List Information First Second Third In addition Another factor In the beginning/end

13. Activity II (Transitions Exercise)  Students will work on page 9  Students can work independently or with a partner  Prepare to share with the class

14. Sentence Variety  Readers become board with words and sentences that never vary  Avoid short, choppy sentences in which the same pattern is repeated.  There are five ways to avoid choppy sentences: 1. Use commas 2. Use conjunctions 3. Use relative clauses 4. Use participles 5. Use subordinate clauses

15. (Activity III)Examples & Practice  Complete pages 11-15 as a class  Review the examples and complete and answer all the questions  Complete page 16 (individually)

16. Concise Writing  Avoid redundant words (unnecessary and repetitive).  Examples:  Kind of  Sort of  Type of  Really  Basically  Actually

17. Activity IV(Redundant Expressions)  Student will individually complete page 20  Prepare to share with the class

18. Precise Language  Use specific words  Avoid using terms such as “nice.” “good,” or “thing. They make the writing dry and uninteresting.  Example: The man is good.  ** How is the man good? Is he compassionate? Is he generous? Is he equitable?

19. Activity V (Precise language)  Students will complete page 27.  Prepare to share with the class.

20. Example Of Essay  Review what a solid essay looks like (See attachment)  Attached to email.

21. Reminders: (1 min)  ELA Cahsee- Tuesday 3/18  Math Cahsee- Wednesday 3/19  Testing in Advisory classes  BOTH DAYS start at 7:45am  Study over your notes!  Be on time!  Late or Absent= won’t take the test (automatic NO PASS!!!)

22. Escort students to the cave at 10:30am (lunch and shirts)