1. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Learning Objective Today, we will revise 1 text to improve sequence. CFU What are we going to do today? What does revise mean? Revise means ________. Activate (or provide) Prior Knowledge CFU Students, you already know how to put steps in order from first to last. This is called sequence. When we write, we use special clue words to show sequence, or the order that things happen. Today, we will use these clue words to revise text to improve sequence. 1 change Rosie wants to make a peanut butter sandwich. Help her by putting the steps in order from first to last. Write the number 1 by what she should do first, 2 by what she should do next, and 3 by what she should do last. Put the two slices together. Take out two slices of bread. Spread the peanut butter on one slice. 1. 2. 3. Name __________________________

2. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Concept Development Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. Not an example of sequence: Example: CFU Why is “My mom makes me eggs for breakfast. She makes me toast, too,” not an example of sequence? Which shows correct sequence below? How do you know? A First, I tie my shoes. Then, I put on my shoes. B First, I put on my shoes. Then, I tie my shoes. My mom makes me eggs for breakfast. She makes toast, too.  Clue words that show sequence: First, Next, Then, After, Later, Last. 1. First, I get out of bed. 2. Next, I get dressed. 3. Then, I have breakfast. 4. After, I brush my teeth. 5. Later, I kiss my dad goodbye. 6. Last, I grab my lunch and walk out the door. 35 words We can use a graphic organizer to order our details before we write them in a paragraph 2. 1. I get out of bed.2. I get dressed. 4. I brush my teeth.6. I grab my lunch and walk out the door. 3. I have breakfast. 5. I kiss my dad goodbye. Getting Ready for School What is the central idea? The central idea is ________. What are details? Details are _______. What is sequence? Sequence is ______. 2 writing that contains at least one sentence

3. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Skill Development/Guided Practice Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. Revise text to improve sequence. Step #1: Read the underlined central idea. Step #2: Read the details in the table. Step #3: Choose which 4 details you would like to include in your writing. (circle) Step #4: Write the details in the graphic organizer. a. Write them in order from first to last. CFU Why did I choose the details that I did? Where did I write the details? What order did I write them in? Why did you choose the details that you did? Where did you write the details? What order did you write them in? I take a bath. I take a shower. I brush my teeth. I put on my pajamas. My mom reads me a story. I get in my bed.I go to sleep. 1.2. 3.4.. I take a bath. I put on my pajamas. I go to sleep. I brush my teeth. Getting Ready for Bed

4. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Skill Development/Guided Practice (continued) Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. Revise text to improve sequence. Step #1: Write a paragraph about the underlined central idea. a. Use the graphic organizer on the previous 3 page. Hint: Use the details you selected from the table. Step #2: Read your finished paragraph to check that it makes sense. Hint: Your details should be in sequential order. 3 right before CFU Why did I use the graphic organizer on the previous page? Why did you use the graphic organizer? At what part of the sentence did I write the sequence words? At what part of the sentence did you write the sequence words? Why is it important to read the finished paragraph each time? Getting Ready for Bed ___________________________________________________________________________ Step #1: Revise your paragraph about the underlined central idea. a. Write a sequence clue word to start your sentence on the lines below. b. Write the first detail from your original 4 paragraph on the lines below. c. Repeat for all the details. Step #2: Read your finished paragraph to check that it makes sense. Hint: Your sequence clue words should be in the correct order. 4 first Sequence Clue Words First Next ThenLast Getting Ready for Bed ___________________________________________________________________________ I First, I took a bath. I put on my pajamas. I brush my teeth. I go to sleep. (Answers may vary) took a bath. Next, I put on my pajamas. Then, I brush my teeth. Last, I go to sleep. (Answers may vary)

5. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Relevance Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. CFU Does anyone else have another reason why it is relevant to be able to revise text to improve sequence? (pair-share) Why is it relevant to be able to revise text to improve sequence? You may give one of my reasons or one of your own. Which reason is the most relevant to you? Why? 2. Revising text to improve sequence can prepare you to write longer pieces of writing, such as a book report. The Party 1. I had my birthday party yesterday. 2. First, I played some games with my friends. 3. Next, everyone sang “Happy Birthday” to me. 4. Then, we had some cake and ice cream. 5. Last, I opened my presents. 34 words 3. Revising text to improve sequence will help you do well on tests. 1. Revising text to improve sequence will help keep your writing organized.  Clue words that show sequence: First, Next, Then, After, Later, Last Sample Test Question: 4. Which pair of sentences shows correct sequence? a. I sliced the bread. The knife was sharp. b. First, I sliced the bread. I like toast. c. First, I sliced the bread. Next, I put it in the toaster. d. First, I ate the bread. Next, I sliced it. There are currently no CST-released questions for this standard.

6. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Step #1: Pair-share the questions below. 1. Why did you put your details in the graphic organizer first? Was it helpful? 2. In your own words, how does using sequence improve your writing? Putting the details in the graphic organizer helps us put them in order. (Answers may vary) Using sequence helps our writing flow more smoothly. (Answers may vary) Summary Closure What did you learn today about revising text to improve sequence? (pair-share) Skill Closure Revise text to improve sequence. Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. Concept Closure Which shows sequence? How do you know? A I was scared. I had a bad dream last night. B He got dressed. He put on his shoes last.  Clue words that show sequence: First, Next, Then, After, Later, Last

7. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Independent Practice Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. Revise text to improve sequence. Step #1: Read the underlined central idea. Step #2: Read the details in the table. Step #3: Choose which 4 details you would like to include in your writing. (circle) Step #4: Write the details in the graphic organizer. a. Write them in order from first to last. We do the calendar. We do some math.We do some reading. We go to recess. We go to lunch.We go to P.E. 1.2. 3.4. School Day Name __________________________ We do the calendar We do some math. We go to recess. We do some reading.

8. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Independent Practice (continued) Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. Revise text to improve sequence. Step #1: Write a paragraph about the underlined central idea. a. Use the graphic organizer on the previous page. Hint: Use the details you selected from the table. Step #2: Read your finished paragraph to check that it makes sense. Hint: Your details should be in sequential order. School Day ___________________________________________________________________________ Step #1: Revise your paragraph about the underlined central idea. a. Write a sequence clue word to start your sentence on the lines below. b. Write the first detail from your original paragraph on the lines below. c. Repeat for all the details. Step #2: Read your finished paragraph to check that it makes sense. Hint: Your sequence clue words should be in the correct order. Sequence Clue Words First Next ThenLast School Day ___________________________________________________________________________ First, we We do the calendar. We do some math. We do some reading. We go to recess. (Answers may vary) do the calendar. Next, we do some math. Then, we do some reading. Last, we go to recess. (Answers may vary)

9. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Periodic Review 1 Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. Revise text to improve sequence. Step #1: Read the underlined central idea. Step #2: Read the details in the table. Step #3: Choose which 4 details you would like to include in your writing. (circle) Step #4: Write the details in the graphic organizer. a. Write them in order from first to last. I would go down the slide. I would go on the swings. I would ride my bike. I would fly a kite. I would have a picnic. I would walk my dog. 1.2. 3.4. If I Went to the Park Name __________________________ I would go on the swings. I would go down the slide. I would have a picnic. I would fly a kite.

10. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Periodic Review 1 (continued) Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. Revise text to improve sequence. Step #1: Write a paragraph about the underlined central idea. a. Use the graphic organizer on the previous page. Hint: Use the details you selected from the table. Step #2: Read your finished paragraph to check that it makes sense. Hint: Your details should be in sequential order. If I Went to the Park ___________________________________________________________________________ Step #1: Revise your paragraph about the underlined central idea. a. Write a sequence clue word to start your sentence on the lines below. b. Write the first detail from your original paragraph on the lines below. c. Repeat for all the details. Step #2: Read your finished paragraph to check that it makes sense. Hint: Your sequence clue words should be in the correct order. Sequence Clue Words First Next ThenLast If I Went to the Park ___________________________________________________________________________ First, I would I would go on the swings. I would go down the slide. I would fly a kite. I would have a picnic. (Answers may vary) go on the swings. Next, I would go down the slide. Then, I would fly a kite. Last, I would have a picnic. (Answers may vary)

11. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Periodic Review 2 Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. Revise text to improve sequence. Step #1: Read the underlined central idea. Step #2: Read the details in the table. Step #3: Choose which 6 details you would like to include in your writing. (circle) Step #4: Write the details in the graphic organizer. a. Write them in order from first to last. I put the meat on the bottom bun. I put on a slice of cheese. I put on some onions. I put on some tomatoes. I put on some lettuce. I put on some ketchup. I put on the top bun. How I Make a Cheeseburger 1.2. 4.6. 3. 5. Name __________________________ I put the meat on the bottom bun. I put on a slice of cheese. I put on some onions. I put on some tomatoes. I put on some ketchup. I put on the top bun.

12. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Periodic Review 2 (continued) Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. Revise text to improve sequence. Step #1: Write a paragraph about the underlined central idea. a. Use the graphic organizer on the previous page. Hint: Use the details you selected from the table. Step #2: Read your finished paragraph to check that it makes sense. Hint: Your details should be in sequential order. How I Make a Cheeseburger ___________________________________________________________________________ Step #1: Revise your paragraph about the underlined central idea. a. Write a sequence clue word to start your sentence on the lines below. b. Write the first detail from your original paragraph on the lines below. c. Repeat for all the details. Step #2: Read your finished paragraph to check that it makes sense. Hint: Your sequence clue words should be in the correct order. Sequence Clue Words First Next Then After Later Last How I Make a Cheeseburger ___________________________________________________________________________ I put the meat on the bottom bun. I put on a slice of cheese. I put on some onions. I put on some tomatoes. I put on some ketchup. I put on the top bun. (Answers may vary) First, I put the meat on the bottom bun. Then, I put on a slice of cheese. Next, I put on some onions. After, I put on some tomatoes. Later, I put on some ketchup. Last, I put on the top bun. (Answers may vary)

13. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Periodic Review 3 Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. Revise text to improve sequence. Step #1: Read the underlined central idea. Step #2: Read the details in the table. Step #3: Choose which 6 details you would like to include in your writing. (circle) Step #4: Write the details in the graphic organizer. a. Write them in order from first to last. I spread sauce on the dough. I sprinkle cheese on top. I put on some mushrooms. I put on some pepperoni. I put on some olives. I put on some peppers. I bake the pizza in the oven. How I Make a Pizza 1.2. 4.6. 3. 5. Name __________________________ I spread sauce on the dough. I sprinkle cheese on top. I put on some mushrooms. I bake the pizza in the oven I put on some olives. I put on some pepperoni.

14. 2nd Grade Writing Strategies 1.4 (3Q) Revise original drafts to improve sequence and provide more descriptive detail. Lesson to be used by EDI-trained teachers only. DataWORKS Educational Research (800) 495-1550 www.dataworks-ed.com ©2012 All rights reserved Comments? feedback@dataworks-ed.com Periodic Review 3 (continued) Revise means to change to make better. The central idea tells what all the sentences or ideas are about. Details are facts that give more information about the central idea. Sequence is the order that things happen. Revise text to improve sequence. Step #1: Write a paragraph about the underlined central idea. a. Use the graphic organizer on the previous page. Hint: Use the details you selected from the table. Step #2: Read your finished paragraph to check that it makes sense. Hint: Your details should be in sequential order. How I Make a Pizza ___________________________________________________________________________ Step #1: Revise your paragraph about the underlined central idea. a. Write a sequence clue word to start your sentence on the lines below. b. Write the first detail from your original paragraph on the lines below. c. Repeat for all the details. Step #2: Read your finished paragraph to check that it makes sense. Hint: Your sequence clue words should be in the correct order. Sequence Clue Words First Next Then After Later Last How I Make a Pizza ___________________________________________________________________________ I spread sauce on the dough. I sprinkle cheese on top. I put on some mushrooms. I put on some pepperoni. I put on some olives. I bake the pizza in the oven. (Answers may vary) First, I spread sauce on the dough. Then, I sprinkle cheese on top. Next, I put on some mushrooms. After, I put on some pepperoni. Later, I put on some olives. Last, I bake the pizza in the oven. (Answers may vary)