Presentation on theme: "Improving your paper SUGGESTIONS FOR SUCCESS. Writing = Revising Writing IS a process This paper WILL take hard work to get a good grade (or even."— Presentation transcript:
Writing = Revising Writing IS a process This paper WILL take hard work to get a good grade (or even to get a passing grade) You WILL have to make changes from your rough draft to the final draft. Some will be major changes and some might be minor fixes. That’s okay and expected. Typed copy due by Wed. 10/22 at the start of the hour. We will be doing pretty involved peer editing for this paper. Tentative due date for the final paper is Mon 10/27 at the start of the hour. We are turning papers in electronically.
Disclaimer: Just because I didn’t make a comment to improve something doesn’t mean what you have is perfect and will get you an A. I can’t catch every mistake. Listen to the following suggestions and think about YOUR OWN paper and see if you are meeting expectations.
Ask questions I can’t fully explain everything I would like to so if you don’t know how to fix something I may have marked, just ask me for help. It is much easier to just talk with you than to write a novel to explain how to improve.
See me If something says SEE ME that’s not a bad thing. I would just rather talk with you than write a novel.
No attitude intended Please don’t read my questions with attitude or snottiness behind them. That’s not my intention. How does that teach the theme? How does that prove he is smart? I’m asking the questions to try and show you where I, the reader, am getting confused
Get rough draft back Please read my comments I ended up reading EVERYTHING Spent 12 hours this weekend giving you feedback Ask me if you can’t read something I will then go through the rest of this PowerPoint in hopes it will help answer some of your questions If you still have questions, you can ask me throughout the week during typing time. (Or come in before or after school) This PowerPoint will be on my website if you need it.
Quotes Many people are missing: Giving context before the quote Step 1: Intro source Step 3: Analyze quote-explain how the quote PROVES whatever you’re trying to prove. Quotes need to PROVE something not just summarize Your 2 required quotes to show proof: Cannot be in the same body paragraphs Cannot be in the intro or conclusion
ANALYZE QUOTES Still need to analyze your quotes. Explain how your quote proves ________________ (trait, conflict, theme) Without this analysis, your quote is pointless
Characterization Paragraph Keep the SAME traits throughout the paragraph When you get to the similarity and different section you don’t get to pick new character traits. Use the same traits or evidence you provided above.
Similarities and Differences Need one idea to tie thoughts together or you just end up saying random summaries about characters, conflicts, and themes and it’s not clear HOW the 2 ideas are different or the same. Characterization Both women are clever. Character A does this. Character B does this. However the women use their wisdom differently. Character A does this. Character B does this.
Similarities and Differences cont’ Conflict Both conflicts impact a lot of people. Story A’s conflict affects _____. Story B’s conflict affects ____ The motivation behind the conflicts is different. In Story A__________ and in Story B__________ Theme Both themes deal with a lack of respect. In Story A__________. In Story B________ The outcome of the themes are different. Story has a more positive outcome because ___________ whereas Story B has a more negative outcome because_______.
Similarities and differences cont’ I may have written: evidence for each? This means, give an example from each story to prove that similarity or difference. So if you’re saying both characters are nice. Give evidence from Story A to prove she is nice and then evidence from Story B to prove how that character is nice. You should have already mentioned this above. Just remind your reader
Similarities and differences (last one) Shouldn’t be using the SAME similarity/difference ideas between paragraphs. It gets repetitive and your reader will get bored. Also, it makes it look like you can’t think of any other ideas. Which may be true, but you don’t want your reader to know that See me if you need help
Use transitions Remember, your reader will not have the outline. Use transitions or key words between ideas to guide your reader The conflict of Story A is______________ The conflict is resolved when______________
Use compare/contrast language The themes of these two stories are similar because___________________ The difference between these themes is ________________________ If you DO NOT use any compare/contrast language you are NOT comparing and contrasting or making ideas clear for your reader. If you DO NOT use any compare/contrast language you will NOT get a good grade on this paper.
No YOU or YOUR Can’t use YOU, even in your theme. You should be careful who you trust. Revised: People should be careful who they trust.
Spelling The children are stealing Aunty Misery’s PEARS not PAIRS. Threw vs through He threw the ball. She went through the door. We have read many STORIES not STORYS
Miscellaneous comments Don’t use: Things Stuff They are both VAGUE. Say exactly what you mean. Be specific. You are writing about STORIES not BOOKS Don’t start sentences with AND