1. Day 1 Use of comma after introductory phrase Use of apostrophe to show joint possession Use of comma and coordinating conjunction to combine sentences Combining sentences In A Separate Peace the Super Suicide Society of the Summer Session was Gene and Finnys cooperative idea. Finny created “blitzball” on his own. No one wondered why Finny was so popular. Finny was handsome. Finny was athletic.

2. Day 1 In A Separate Peace, the Super Suicide Society of the Summer Session was Gene and Finny’s cooperative idea, but Finny created “blitzball” on his own. Use of comma after introductory phrase Use of apostrophe to show joint possession Use of comma and coordinating conjunction to combine sentences No one wondered why the handsome and athletic Finny was so popular. Combining sentences

3. Day 2 Elimination of colon between preposition and object Elimination of commas with restrictive infinitive phrase Correct pronoun case in compound construction Surviving a jump off the huge tree called for: bravery, balance, and luck. One of the first students, to jump from the tree, was Finny. Between you and I, he made a foolish choice.

4. Day 2 Surviving a jump off the huge tree called for bravery, balance, and luck. Elimination of colon between preposition and object One of the first students to jump from the tree was Finny. Between you and me, he made a foolish choice. Elimination of commas with restrictive infinitive phrase Correct pronoun case in compound construction

5. Day 3 An admirable character Finny was bold and daring. After Finny jumped off of the tree and crashed to the ground (his leg smashed,) Gene was able to jump totally without fear. Correct placement of comma with parentheses Elimination of unnecessary preposition Use of comma to set off appositive

6. Day 3 An admirable character, Finny was bold and daring. Use of comma to set off appositive After Finny jumped off the tree and crashed to the ground (his leg smashed), Gene was able to jump totally without fear. Elimination of unnecessary preposition Correct placement of comma with parentheses

7. Day 4 Looking at the boys on the ground, Leper yelled “Which one is Finny? Oh, that’s him.” When Gene met Dr.Stanploe, he explained the situation. Correction of unclear pronoun reference Correct pronoun case Use of comma to set off a direct quotation

8. Day 4 Looking at the boys on the ground, Leper yelled, “ Which one is Finny? Oh, that’s he.” Use of comma to set off a direct quotation Correct pronoun case When Gene met Dr.Stanpole, the doctor explained the situation. Correction of unclear pronoun reference

9. Day 5 “No, I won’t wait until graduation to enter the war!” Leper exclaimed as he skied between the many trees. Soon after, a group of seniors were drafted into the war. Subject and verb agreement Use of between/among Use of exclamation point after interjection

10. Day 5 “No! I won’t wait until graduation to enter the war!” Leper exclaimed as he skied among the many trees. Use of exclamation point after interjection Use of between/among Soon after, a group of seniors was drafted into the war. Subject and verb agreement