1. Don’t Forget to Remember
Writing Stuff

2. Nitpicky
After you mention Tim Burton’s name once in the essay, you will refer to him as Burton thereafter.
Underline or italicize the titles of movies.
Thesis statement should be at the end of the first paragraph. (we will work on the introduction after break)
Topic sentences should be general to a cinematic technique, not specific to a movie.

3. Do NOT use
A lot
You, me, I, we

4. Grammar
Burton uses high key lighting to create the impression of goodness or innocence. For example, when the model of Willie Wonka’s chocolate factory is lit up.
The highlighted sentence is a fragment (dependent clause).
How can you fix it?