1. Graded Destiny Essays
Let’s See How We Did

2. My Marks Check mark over word = good word choice
Circled on rubric = missing or incorrect
Pencil comments = feedback about content
Highlighted sentences = you need to fix grammatically

3. Notes in General Strong points
general structure (intro, body, conclusion)
good topic sentences
Improve (see exemplar)
tighten with stronger theses & concluding/linking sentences in body paragraphs
explain significance of quote

4. Minor Mistakes call author by last name
in-text citation = last name only
punctuation of titles
poems, short stories, & songs all use quotes; do NOT underline
Spell out numbers <100

5. Verb Tense Inconsistency
“Today was the best day of my life! I bought a new car. I was looking forward to this day for a long time. The car that I wanted is waiting for me when I had pulled up. I ran to it, looked inside, and will get a salesman to help me. I was able to drive the car around the neighborhood and I discovered that I had to have it. I would talk to the salesman and convince him to give me a good price. I am happy as I drive away from the dealership in my new Corvette.”

6. Run-Ons How many “who does what” MUST join with
A sentence = a “who does what”
I like pink cows they are neat
MUST join with
, conjunction (, and) ;
subordinating conjunction (because)
probably shouldn’t have more than 3 per sentence

7. Pronoun-Antecedent
Everybody believes that they can control their destiny.
Each person must decide their own view on destiny.

8. Redneck Grammar Ninja
If you judy chop a sentence with a subordinating conjunction, ____________.
If the grammar ninja chops a sentence, it must __________________.
If the one-legged sentence comes first in the sentence, ______________________.
Two independent sentences can be joined by the grammar cupid with ____________.