1. Revising Argumentative Writing
AKA – annotating your own writing to help improve your writing so Mrs. Schulte doesn’t lose her mind whilst grading your writing.

2. Writer’s Workshop = Revising, Rewriting, Reworking
Today – we will start the self- revision process.
If you do not finish in class, your homework is to finish it (based on these slides) and bring two CLEAN copies – PRINTED – to class tomorrow.
If you forget and have to run to the library to print before class, you will be tardy to class. But a tardy is better than a zero.
Writer’s Workshop = Revising, Rewriting, Reworking
“I've found the best way to revise your own work is to pretend that somebody else wrote it and then to rip the living sh*t out of it.” 
- Don Roff (author and screenwriter)

3. What to highlight? Thesis = yellow Main Idea sentences = pink
Evidence (quotes, facts, examples) = green
Analysis (what you said about evidence) = blue/purple
Make sure your separate evidence and analysis.
Link = orange

4. Revising - Thesis CONCESSION vs LIST - ??
*** Remember: Your thesis is the main message / argument of your paper. Presents the topic of the paper and states your stance. It should also tell the reader what the paper is about and guide your writing.
Read over your thesis and ask yourself:
Is this too general?
Do I have some kick-butt arguments that I support in my paper?
Is it clear what I’m trying to argue?
Do I pretend to be a reasonable person and concede one point to the “other” side?
Original thesis: We must save the whales.
Revised thesis: Because our planet's health may depend upon biological diversity, we should save the whales.
CONCESSION vs LIST - ??

5. Revising – Intro Paragraphs
Is my 1st sentence (or couple sentences) part of a STAMPy Introduction?
Do I ONLY have 1-2 (MAYBE 3) sentences to bridge to my thesis?
Is my thesis the last sentence in that paragraph?
Do I bring in evidence into my introduction? (If so, you should just light your paper on fire now….just kidding. Don’t actually do that!)

6. Revising - Evidence
Underline your three claims in your thesis statement.
Number them 1, 2, and 3.
Go to body paragraph 1. Find your first piece of evidence (should be green). Ask yourself – is this the most effective, most convincing piece of evidence out of everything I read?
If the answer is yes, move on to your next piece of evidence.
If the answer is no, make some notes, do some work as to how it can be improved. What’s the “oomf” that is missing?
Repeat for each body paragraph and each piece of evidence.
Do you have three different sources within your essay? Citations?
If you are missing evidence within a body paragraph – FIND IT NOW!

7. Editing - Conventions
Read through your paper and check for misspelled words (aka – red squiggly lines).
Check that every sentence starts with a capital letter and ends with a period.
Check FANBOYS! Maybe circle every FANBOYS and check the punctuation rule for it. 