1. 惠安第一中学 何 芳 26/12,2008

2. Step one Read loudly and recite. Warm-up:

3. Task 1 Read loudly and recite. A good beginning makes a good ending. Don’t put off till tomorrow what shall be done today. Don’t put off till tomorrow what shall be done today. Attitude makes everything; practice makes perfect.

4. Recitation is a good way to improve your writing ! A good beginning makes a good ending. Don’t put off till tomorrow what shall be done today. Don’t put off till tomorrow what shall be done today. Attitude makes everything; practice makes perfect.

5. Step Two Enjoy a good passage. Enjoy reading

6. Whether or not should Senior 3 students go spring outing? We have had a heated discussion. Opinions are divided on the question. Most students, about 65%, are for the idea that Senior 3 students should go spring outing. They think it good for their health to be close to nature and breathe some fresh air and what’s more, they can relax themselves for a while and rest their brains so that they will be more energetic. They think it will do good to their students. On the other hand, about 35% students are against the idea. They say that with college entrance examination drawing near, they don’t feel like going anywhere. Besides, they think going spring outing will take at least a day off. They can’t afford the time. They think they should fix their attention on their studies. Task 2 Enjoy a good passage.( sheet 1)

7. How is it a good passage? Fixed patterns Effective linking words Complicated grammar patterns had a heated discussion; for a while; do good to; afford the time; fix their attention on what’s more; On the one hand,… On the other hand;… Besides; …so that… ~the idea that Senior 3 students should go spring outing; ~with college entrance examination drawing near; ~ They think it good for their health to be close to nature and breathe some fresh air. ~ Going spring outing will take at least a day off.

8. Step Three How to compose a good passage ? Focus on

9. Follow the five basic steps ： １．认真审题，把握主题； ２． 抓准要点，勾勒大纲； 3 ．紧扣要点，扩写成文； 4 ．添加过渡，确保连贯； 5. 查错补漏，修饰文章。 Examine the writing requirements ； ensure not to digress from the main subject) Grab the main points; figure out the outline Expand points into sentences; Link the sentences to build up a passage; Check and correct the errors;make the passage perfect. How to compose a good passage?

10. 第二节：书面表达（满分 25 分） 某网站最近在网上征集 “ 全民节约 ” 活动的建议。你班学 生对此进行讨论。以下是讨论结果。请以李华的名义给 网站写一封信。信的开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数 （词数： 120 左右）。 参考词汇：一次性的 throw-away 回收站： recycle station Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you to share the ideas of National ThriftAction 。 —————————————————— ———————————————————————— ———————————————————————— ——————————————. 社会现状我们的建议 1 、饭店餐馆使用一次性筷子和 塑料袋。 1 、建议饭店不使用一次性工具。 2 、车辆增多，原油短缺，价格 上涨。 2 、建议上学上班骑自行车 3 、每年有大量纸被扔掉了，造 成大量浪费。 3 、增加废纸回收，在学校办公 场所设回收站。 4 、处处存在浪费电现象。 4 、 “ 少开一盏灯；合理调节空调 温度 ” 。 Look closely at the requirements. Task 3 writing (Ss’ sheet 2) :

11. 审 --- 认真审题，把握主题 体裁 人称时态 题材 说明文 浪费现象 及建议 一般现在时第一人称

12. Let’s follow the second step: 抓 --- 抓准要点，勾勒大纲

13. Suggestions: Body Wasting phenomena: 1.overused chopsticks and plastic bags 2.Shortage of oil 3.thrown-away paper 4.Electricity wasting 1.no offering to restaurants 2. Go to school by bike 3. more recyle stations 4.Turn on less lignt Outline 1 of the writing: Introduction paragraph: … Conclusion paragraph: …

14. Introduction paragraph: … Point 3… Point 4.. Body Point 1… Point 2… Phenomenon 1 Suggestion 1 Phenomenon 2 Suggestion 2 Phenomenon 3 Suggestion 3 Phenomenon 4 Suggestion 4 Outline 2 of the writing:

15. Group discussion(1 min) Outline 1 or Outline 2 ?

16. Let’s follow the third step: 扩 --- 紧扣要点，扩写成句

17. Body 1.overused chopsticks and plastic bags 2.Shortage of oil 3.thrown-away paper 4.Electricity wasting 1.no offering to restaurants 2. Go to school by bike 3. more recyle stations 4.Turn on less light Expand the points into sentences: Wasting electricity is common everywhere The restaurant shouldn’t offer throw-away chopsticks to people. governments should also set up more recycle stations at the public places. one shall turn on less light and turn air-conditioner one more degree up in summer and down in winter. Many restaurants use throw-away chopsticks and plastic bags. more cars run on the road,but the gasoline is in short supply. Every year much paper is thrown away.. I suggest going to school or work by bike.

18. 一、写作中句型灵活转换, 避免在整篇文章中只使用一两个句式 : More cars run on the road, and they cause the shortage of oil. With more cars running on the road, the gasoline is in short supply. A. 用 with+ 宾语 + 宾补结构合并为简单句 Tips for expanding the points into sentences:

19. B. 合并为复合句 A lot of trees are cut down to produce paper, but much paper is thrown away every year. Every year much paper is thrown away,which makes more trees cut down to produce paper. 一、写作中句型灵活转换, 避免在整篇文章中只使用一两个句式 : Tips for expanding the points into sentences:

20. We can go to school or go to work by bike so that we can help to reduce oil. Going to school or work by bike, we can help to save gasoline. C. 用分词短语作状语： 一、写作中句型灵活转换, 避免在整篇文章中只使用一两个句式 : Tips for expanding the points into sentences:

21. 二、 要灵活运用诸如倒装句、强调句、套用句型 和高级词汇等来增加文采. Not only is a large amount of paper thrown away, but also electricity is wasted everywhere. In a word, it’s high time we started things about conserving resources rather than wasting them. It is the wasting phenomena that make the environment worse and worse. Tips for expanding the points into sentences:

22. Group work (5 mins) Expand the points into sentences:

23. Let’s follow the fourth step: 连 --- 添加过渡，确保连贯

24. 四、用过渡句连接段落 三、用连词衔接 一、把作目的状语的不定式置于句首 二、把作状语的分词短语放在句首 Tips for linking: 五、开好头，结好尾

25. To solve this problem, we suggest that restaurants should not use them again. 一、把作目的状语的不定式置于句首 Tips for linking: 二、把作状语的分词短语放在句首 To save electricity, one shall turn on less light and turn air-conditioner one more degree up in summer and down in winter. Going to school or work by bike, we can help to save gasoline.

26. 三、用连词衔接 Tips for linking: As far as I’m concerned, As we all can see, What’s more, What’s worse, On the one hand, But on the other hand, In fact, Besides, Which,that,who, etc. Not only…but also… … 四、用过渡句连接段落 So how can we settle these problems?

27. 五、开好头 We can see many throw-away chopsticks and bags in the restaurant. As we all can see, there are so many throw-away chopsticks and plastic bags used every day. We notice that almost all restaurants use throw- away chopsticks and plastic bags. Tips for linking: Hope my suggestions will be of help. In a word, it’s high time we started things about conserving resources rather than wasting them. 五、结好尾

28. Group work (5 mins) Link the sentences to build up a passage :

29. Step Four Presentation and assessment Check and correct the errors ; make the passage perfect.

30. Presentation

31. Let’s follow the fifth step: 查 --- 查错补漏，修饰文章 语言地道， 无汉语式英语 时态语态时态语态 单复数单复数 词性词性 冠词冠词 主谓动宾搭配主谓动宾搭配

32. Reading makes a full man; conference a ready man; and writing an exact man. --Francis Bacon 阅读使人充实，交谈使人机智，写作使人精确。 -- 培根

33. Step Five Assignment Complete your half-finished passages !

35. 1.There is many restaurants use throw-away chopstick. 2.More and more cars ran on the roads, which cause short supply of oil. Check and correct the errors;make the passage perfect. 1.There are many restaurants using throw-away chopsticks. 1.There are throw-away chopsticks used in the restaurants. 2.More and more cars are running on the roads, which causes the short supply of oil.

36. 4.Every year many paper is throw away. 5.Electric is wasting everywhere. 3.The price of oil are getting more and more expensive. Check and correct the errors;make the passage perfect. 3.The price of oil is getting higher and higher. 3.The oil is getting more and more expensive. 4.Every year much paper is thrown away. 5.Electricity is wasted everywhere.

37. OK,Work has been well done! Let’s enjoy!

38. Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you to share the ideas of National Thrift Action. As we all can see, there are so many throw-away chopsticks and plastic bags used every day. What’s worse, there are more and more cars running on the roads, which causes the shortage of oil and makes the price of the oil go up fast. On the one hand, the forests are becoming fewer and fewer. But on the other hand, much paper is thrown away every year, which makes a lot of trees cut down to produce paper again. What’s more, wasting electricity is common everywhere. So how can we settle these problems? As far as I’m concerned, the restaurants shouldn’t offer throw-away chopsticks to people. And students can go to school by bike. Besides, governments should also set up more recycle stations at the public places. To save electricity, one shall turn less light on and turn his air-conditioner one more degree up in summer and down in winter. In a word, it’s high time we started things about conserving resources rather than wasting them. Best wishes to you. Yours sincerely, Li Hua

39. 审 --- 认真审题，把握主题 体裁 人称时态 题材

40. 1.Does the writing contain all the points provided? 2.Are there any mistakes in tenses or sentence structures? 3.Is the writing correctly punctuated? 4.Does the writing have a good word choice? 5.Is it persuasive? Peer assessment (5 mins)