Claims and the Body Paragraphs March 9, 2015

Warm-up 3/9 What is argumentative writing? Take a side on an issue and defend this side using evidence What is the function of a transition sentence? To end one idea and move to the next Define claim- an arguable statement that takes a side to an issue

Feedback from Friday’s Claims Feedback in the form of numbers that correspond to the numbers on the chart. These are the trends that I saw amongst all of the claims. Take a minute and read through the box- it will help you understand the criteria for a good claim

How to Write a Claim Hypothetical Prompt: Is technology hurting our social skills? Claim (THESIS)- This is stated in the Intro Paragraph: Technology is damaging social skills in the classroom and in the workplace. Body Paragraphs- Body Paragraph 1- in the classroom Body Paragraph 2- in the workplace

Rewind and Rewrite Take 4 minutes and Rewrite your CLAIM using the feedback from Friday and the chart. Exchange your claims with a partner and provide feedback.

Topic Sentences Main idea sentence of the paragraph which introduces what the entire paragraph will be about. ONE SENTENCE- Directly related to the claim. Example: The abundance of technology available to the younger generations has inhibited development of social skills within the classroom. The rest of the paragraph will provide evidence to support this opinion statement.

Background Sentence Provides the reader with a little information about the topic before jumping right into the quote. Usually 1-2 sentences MAXIMUM. Example: Children have lost the art of articulating their ideas aloud and have become quiet in their interactions, mainly through social media platforms.

Evidence Evidence directly backs up your claim statement: technology is damaging social skills in the classroom. Lead into the quote so that it sounds infused into your own writing: A recent study done in 2012 demonstrated that “one in four people spend more time socializing online [...] than they do in person” (Fowlkes). This is possibly causing psychological effects in the future as studies find that “ideas expressed in a message often lose their meaning and[... people often] say something in a text [they] wouldn’t say in person” (University Journal Editorial Board).

SAY, MEAN, MATTER Here’s where you might need to explain the evidence a little further... Let’s Take a Look: With more online interactions and less face-to-face conversations, students are more likely to lose the art of conversing in respectable and appropriate ways. Often times, this leads to issues that are beyond school campuses and fall in the jurisdiction of the police.

Addressing the Count Claim This is where you acknowledge that there’s another side to the argument, but make sure you bring the reader quickly back to your side. Let’s take a look: Technology definitely has its benefits and students can converse with classrooms across the globe and prepare for a world increasingly interfacing through technology; however, the proper training and monitoring of technology use is not being exercised in most households.

Transition Sentence Transitions end your ideas so that you may go into your next paragraph with more evidence. Let’s Take a Look: The results of not being taught the proper usage of technology has created classrooms lacking interpersonal social skills and more hidden drama behind the screens.

Putting it all together The abundance of technology available to the younger generations has inhibited development of social skills within the classroom. Children have lost the art of articulating their ideas aloud and have become quiet in their interactions, mainly through social media platforms. A recent study done in 2012 demonstrated that “one in four people spend more time socializing online [...] than they do in person” (Fowlkes). This is possibly causing psychological effects in the future as studies find that “ideas expressed in a message often lose their meaning and[... people often] say something in a text [they] wouldn’t say in person” (University Journal Editorial Board). With more online interactions and less face-to-face conversations, students are more likely to lose the art of conversing in respectable and appropriate ways. Often times, this leads to issues that are beyond school campuses and fall in the jurisdiction of the police. Technology definitely has its benefits and students can converse with classrooms across the globe and prepare for a world increasingly interfacing through technology; however, the proper training and monitoring of technology use is not being exercised in most households. The results of not being taught the proper usage of technology has created classrooms lacking interpersonal social skills and more hidden drama behind the screens.

Now you try... Using your CLAIM and the EVIDENCE from the articles, write your first body paragraph. PLEASE FINISH YOUR 1ST PARAGRAPH FOR HOMEWORK TONIGHT IF YOUR DON’T FINISH IN CLASS.

March 10 Body Paragraphs

Warm-up 3/10 What’s the difference between a direct quote and paraphrasing? Direct quotes are the author’s words exactly placed in quotation marks and a paraphrase is the author’s words in your own words. What is plagiarism? Using someone’s words as if they were your own and not giving credit back to the person who wrote it Which direct quote is quoted properly from Lennie’s last words to George? B

Recap From Yesterday What are the most important parts of a claim? Your issue, your side, your topics for your body paragraphs What is a topic sentence? First sentence in your body paragraph, it introduces your topic. Why do you need to explain your evidence? To connect your evidence to your claim After you present your evidence in your paragraph, what comes next? Address the counter-claim

Internal Citations - Citing the author’s work within the essay. In Of Mice and Men, John Steinbeck describes the character Lennie as a bear in which “[h]is arms did not swing at his sides, but hung loosely” (Steinbeck 2). <-- internal citation Why is it important to lead into your quote with your own words instead of just saying your quote alone? This is called a “lead in” to a quote. It’s important to make the quote sound like it fits into your essay as if their words are your words. It helps your essay sound smoother and it helps your reader understand the evidence more. Direct Quote --> Lead in -->

Paraphrase Original Quote: “I could feel Jacob’s note in my pocket, like it suddenly weighed ten pounds” (Meyer 34). Paraphrase: Bella’s note from Jacob was a constant reminder of what she had lost (Meyer 34). Why do we still have to place an internal citation at the end of a paraphrase? Anything that is not common knowledge or anything that you didn’t know before you read something is information you need to paraphrase or directly quote. A paraphrase is someone else’s ideas or research put into your own words. You must give them credit.

Check Your Citations in your Body Paragraph #1 Your internal citations will only have an Author’s last name in parenthesis. Each time you refer to a different source in your paper, your need to give credit to the author = internal citation. Check your direct quotes, paraphrases, and internal citations.

Use this information to... Make corrections to your 1st body paragraph Write your 2nd body paragraph Homework: Finish both body paragraphs of your essay only.