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General Points ‘Titles’ with quotation marks and capital letters Line of argument must be clear in the introduction Avoid assertions that are not backed up. Use the sheets at the back of the booklet for adding academic rigour

Economy of Words… Owen starts the poem by describing the soldiers as being “Bent double, like old beggars under sacks”. This use of simile shows the reader how physically difficult life was for the men that they have to be stooped over as their backs are too weak to support themselves. The fact that they look like “old beggars” suggests that they are in a pitiable situation which will shock the reader and helps to emphasise how terrible the war was for the soldiers. (81) Instead Owen’s opening simile, “Bent double, like old beggars under sacks”, immediately introduces the theme of premature ageing, emphasising the degenerative nature of war on the human body. Characteristic of many of his poems, Owen’s imagery reveals the dehumanisation of the men who he also describes as “coughing like hags”, which has connotations of the unworldly and evil. (57)

This is mainly paraphrasing what the quote describes Economy of Words… Owen starts the poem by describing the soldiers as being “Bent double, like old beggars under sacks”. This use of simile shows the reader how physically difficult life was for the men that they have to be stooped over as their backs are too weak to support themselves. The fact that they look like “old beggars” suggests that they are in a pitiable situation which will shock the reader and helps to emphasise how terrible the war was for the soldiers. (81) Instead Owen’s opening simile, “Bent double, like old beggars under sacks”, immediately introduces the theme of premature ageing, emphasising the degenerative nature of war on the human body. Characteristic of many of his poems, Owen’s imagery reveals the dehumanisation of the men who he also describes as “coughing like hags”, which has connotations of the unworldly and evil. (57) This is analysing WHY the quote describes what it does the way that it does

Planning and Background Reading Research your chosen poem Re-print it and annotate with new ideas Plan, Plan, Plan Let’s look at an example