1. No man is an island, Entire of itself, Every man is a piece of the continent, A part of the main. If a clod be washed away by the sea, Europe is the less. As well as if a promontory were. As well as if a manor of thy friend's Or of thine own were: Any man's death diminishes me, Because I am involved in mankind, And therefore never send to know for whom the bell tolls; It tolls for thee. No Man Is An Island by John Donne (1572-1631)

2. Response Wreck the poem down to 5 lines to capture the main idea On your sheet cross out all but 5 lines that you think capture the poem’s message

3. My Inspiration Why does the bell toll? For whom does the bell toll? The song (sound) of solitude Why the sudden song of the bells? It belongs here even though it breaks the silence, Is a part of this place like winter has its snow. Does it sound for the squirrels scurrying over the ground? Does it ring out the cries of the wind? Does it ring out the cries of the wind? Maybe it tolls for the people who pass While the notes echo on the ground.

4. Personal Memoir Writer’s Workshop Day 11 2 nd Draft Writing: STAR

5. Learning Targets I can identify a weak simple sentence in my 1 st draft. I can substitute at least 3 weak verbs/adjectives in my 1 st draft with strong verbs/adjectives in my 2 nd draft I can take out irrelevant information in my 1 st draft

6. First Draft vs. Second Draft Writing

7. The Power of One Choose one “weak” or dull simple sentence from your 1 st draft memoir Copy the sentence next to Tuesday’s space on the sheet Store this sheet in a VERY secure place! We will need it every day this week.

8. Monday: Tuesday: I skated over to my teammates. Wednesday: Thursday: Friday:

9. Pimp my Write with STAR You need to write these notes in your Writer’s Notebook EDITING section S ubstitute T ake things out A dd R earrange STAR is an acronym to help us remember some of the most common options we have for “pimping” our writing. (This is also where our 4 highlighters will be put to use)

10. Substitute: Choose one color to highlight these types of revisions Replace Overused words Weak verbs with strong verbs Weak adjectives with strong adjectives Common nouns with proper nouns “Dead” words

11. Take Things Out: Choose one color to highlight these types of revisions Take out Unnecessary repetitions Unimportant or irrelevant information Parts that might belong in another piece

12. Closure Fill in one box on the Independent Correction Sheet based on your revision work today HW reminders: Take notes on compound and complex sentences from the WW Day 9 ppt on my website by TOMORROW!