#2 Organization Thesis: Underline the Thesis. Is it the last sentence in the introduction? It should NOT be the first. Topic sentences: Underline each topic sentence for each body paragraph. Does each relate to the thesis? Suggestions? Turn the paper over, write a #2, sign your name, and make a comment.
#3 Support Does each body paragraph have at least two supporting examples? Number each example. Is there at least one quotation per text? Does each sentence relate to the topic sentence? If not, put a question mark above the sentence in doubt. Does the author comment on the examples? Turn the paper over and sign your name next to #3.
#4 Quotations Does the author introduce each quotation to blend it properly into the essay? Does the author use internal citations? (White) or (“How to Peer Edit”) Does the author discuss or comment on the quotation? Where should he/she? Is there a works cited page? Flip the paper over and write #4 and sign your name.
#5 Voice What is unique about this essay? Write a comment. Circle “things,” “you,” “very” and other tired words. Where does the author need better diction? What grabs your attention with the introduction? Write a comment on the essay. How does the conclusion leave the reader with a fresh perspective?
#6 Grammar/Mechanics Look at the highlighted sentences. Does the author Begin with an “-ing” phrase? Begin with an adverbial conjunction (when, since, during, although, etc.)? Begin with a long prepositional phrase? Use an appositive phrase to make sentences concise? Turn over the essay and sign your name next to #6
Pass the essay to the author. Author -Write three ways you will revise your essay. -Please see Mrs. White for help if needed.