1. Sr. Paper Peer Revision #2 Intro. + Body Paragraph #1

2. Pass the paper. Check MLA format 12 pt. TIMES New Roman, double-spaced MLA heading MLA page numbering- also TIMES 1” margins Centered title

3. Pass the paper. Read the introduction and check for the following organization: – Attention grabber – Background information – Block quotation – Thesis statement

4. Pass the paper. Read the introduction. Check for smooth transitions between the parts of the intro. Write “add transition” where any ideas “jump” from one to the next.

5. Pass the paper. Read the introduction. Check for “be” verbs and casual language– put an X over any of the following: – I/ you/ we/ us/ yours/ me/ my/ mine – Am, is, are, was, were, be, being, been – Clichés/ idioms/ too casual language – Vague language such as the word “things” or “stuff”

6. Pass the paper. Locate the thesis statement and check for the FIRST trait listed in the thesis statement. Then check the topic sentence of Body Paragraph #1– it should have that trait in it. If the thesis is NOT in order and the first trait is not actually FIRST, please tell them to reorder the list of traits in the thesis statement.

7. Same person. Read Body Paragraph #1 and check for the following order: – Topic sentence – Quote #1 – Commentary (at least 2 sentences) – Quote #2 – Commentary (at least 2 sentences) – Quote #3 – Commentary (at least 2 sentences) – Concluding sentence

8. Pass the paper. Body Paragraph #1- check the topic sentence It should mention key words from the THEME in the THESIS. Circle these. It should mention a specific Gothic trait from the THESIS. Circle this. It should mention a specific AUTHOR and TITLE of a piece– circle this. Make sure the title is formatted properly– essays/ poems/ short stories should be in quotation marks; novels should be italicized

9. Pass the paper. Body Paragraph #1– check the quotations. Each quote should be BLENDED with TCS. – Transition – Context – Speaker The TCS must come BEFORE the quote! C = PLOT/ not a chapter number or page number Label the TCS of EACH quote! If any part is missing, tell them to add it in.

10. Pass the paper. Body Paragraph #1– quotations. Check that each quote is blended properly– make sure they are NOT fragments or run-on sentences Make sure that they haven’t switched pronouns from third person he/she to first person I in the quote Also, make sure they have included an MLA internal citation for each quote that comes AFTER the quotation marks but BEFORE the period. – Sentence, “quote” (citation).

11. Pass the paper. Body paragraph #1– commentary Check that each quotation has AT LEAST TWO SENTENCES after it to explain it!! Make sure that the commentary CONNECTS BACK TO THE THEME IDEAS! Each commentary should explain HOW the quote SHOWS the theme!

12. Pass the paper. Body Paragraph #1– Concluding sentence. Make sure the paragraph has a concluding sentence that rephrases the TOPIC SENTENCE ideas, including the THEME Make sure this sentence uses DIFFERENT WORDS than the THESIS and TOPIC SENTENCE

13. Pass the paper. Body Paragraph #1– editing. Read the paragraph and circle any grammar/ spelling errors that you see. Cross out any “be” verbs and any cases of first or second person pronouns (quotes excluded).

14. Give back to the owner. HW: Make revisions as needed. Also, add Body Paragraph #2 by Tuesday! Bring a new, updated draft for peer revision.