1. 1 Week 9 : “ WORD CHOICE IN EDITING “ Matakuliah: EDITING Tahun: 2006 Versi: 01/01

2. 2 Learning Outcomes You are expexted to be able to use editing system to find and edit incorrect words in a manuscript.

3. 3 Introduction If you frequently find words like "awkward," "vague,“ or "wordy" in between the lines and on the margins of your graded papers, this is the handout for you. Keep in mind that this handout is intended for use during the revision process. Finding the right words is fundamentally an issue of choice, which means first locating what’s not quite right with original choices. Revising for word choice is not about prettifying your writing or sounding sophisticated; it is about expressing your ideas clearly and effectively.

4. 4 Steps in Editing Review your Diction: Remember that others are reading your paper and that even the choice of one word can affect their response to it. Try to anticipate their response, and choose your words accordingly.

5. 5 Steps in Editing Example: Original: The media's exploitation of the Watergate scandal showed how biased it was already. Edited: The media's coverage of the Watergate scandal suggests that perhaps those in the media had already determined Nixon’s guilt.

6. 6 Increasing Clarity by Eliminating Wordiness: I came to the realization that = I realized that She is of the opinion that = She thinks that Concerning the matter of = About During the course of = During In the event that = If In the process of = During, while Helpful Hints for the Wordy

7. 7 Clichés: Why to avoid them and how Clichés are catchy little phrases so frequently used that they’ve become trite, corny, or annoying. They are problematic in our writing because their overuse has diminished their impact and because they require several words where just one would do. Example: Agree to disagree = Disagree Last but not least = Last Up in the air = Unknown/undecided

8. 8 Can you read these right the first time? 1) The bandage was wound around the wound. 2) The farm was used to produce produce. 3) The dump was so full that it had to refuse more refuse. 4) We must polish the Polish furniture. 5) He could lead if he would get the lead out. Word Traps

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