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1 Editing and Revising Practice…. DIRECTIONS. Fix the grammatical errors in each of thefollowing sentences by writing them correctly on a separatesheet of paper.This weekend the best team in football new england patriots play the baltimore ravens at there home stadium gillete feild.My friend sarah and me wanted to watch the cowboys game this weekend but we isnt sure what time their on.Finally it occurs to me that the dallas cowboys arent in the playoffs this weekend which is to bad.
2 Mrs. Patterson English III EssaysMrs. PattersonEnglish III
3 Types of Essays Narrative - Tells a story Creative and imaginativeExpository - Gives informationResearch PaperPersuasive - Tries to convince audience to see your point of viewArgumentDescriptive - Describes a person, place, event etc…Journals
4 What is the TAKS essay? It is the writing portion of the ELA TAKS test It follows the Reading portion, after the three OERsThe prompt is thematically connected to the literature and visual in the Reading portion.
5 What do I have to write?The most popular way to approach the TAKS essay is by writing a personal narrative essay a form of writing in which the writer relates an event, incident, or experience in his or her own life.The personal narrative incorporates vivid descriptive details as well as the thoughts, feelings, and reactions of the writer.
6 Narrative EssayFocuses on specific event, related to the prompt, coming from your personal experience.Introduction - Sets up the story; grabs the reader’s attention (hook)Body - Tell the storyConclusion - What you learned from experience; tie back to prompt.
7 How do I write it? Use first person POV Write from what you know! Be specific…NAME the characters, places, and things…eliminate vague generalities (i.e.-everyone, anybody, someone, we, you)Use vivid active verbsFocus and narrow the story to the real story – hover over the actionUse authentic voice – eliminate street language (“cuz”, “dat”, “thru”, “2”, “til” etc.)Create smooth transitions…avoid “First, we…”, “Second, we…” – Don’t list events!
8 SHOW don’t TELL Some sentences just simply tell the reader information EXAMPLE –The man was really old and walked slowly.Let your words create a picture in the reader’s mindEXAMPLE –A frail, stooped man with paper-thin skin shuffled along slowly in front of me.Give the reader the opportunity to imagine it for themselves and engage in your writing.
9 How do I structure my essay? Begin with an introduction that includes purpose and motivation for the action as well as the characters, setting and timeBuild the body of the text around the ideas you presented in the introductionFinish the essay with an insightful and meaningful conclusion; reflect on what you learned from the experience
10 Of course, don’t forget… to use correct punctuation and spelling!to develop sentencesNo 1-pagersevoke a reader response for the highest score…not just tears…
11 How is the essay scored?On a scale of 0 – 4 (“4” being the highest score)You must score a “2” or higher in order to pass the entire ELA TAKS test
12 What qualifies as a “1”? Focus and Coherence Hard to understand Incomplete or extra information that is off subjectYou aren’t clear about what you’re saying about the promptOrganizationFew/no transitionsIdeas are hard to followDepth of DevelopmentYou give 1+ ideas but don’t developYou just list ideas, and the reader can’t understand themYou leave out information, creating gaps that make it hard to understandVoiceYou don’t seem to care about your ideas, so the reader can’t eitherNo personalityConventionsYour writing does not show the reader you can correctly spell or capitalize, and you have many errors in grammar, usage, and sentence structure that make it really hard to read
13 What qualifies as a “2”? Focus and Coherence Has some focus but may shift quickly from idea to ideaSome sense of completeness, but has extra information that doesn’t make your writing clearer or more interestingOrganizationNeed better transitionsWeak organization and/or too many repeated ideasDepth of DevelopmentYou make lists of ideas and don’t explain them muchYou write one or more ideas and try to develop them, but you don’t write from the heart about themVoiceIn some places you make the reader feel like they know you, but you don’t keep it upSome parts are real/original, but the reader has no sense of your personalityConventionsMany spelling, capitalization, punctuation, grammar, usage, and sentence structure errors that make it harder for me to follow your ideas
14 What qualifies as a “3”? Focus and Coherence Most parts are focused Clear links between ideasMost of your writing is good qualityThe introduction and conclusion add focusOrganizationSentences and paragraphs are smoothly linked to each otherMostly good organizationDepth of DevelopmentGood, clear ideas; most are elaboratedTry to develop all ideas, but some are more developed than othersYou seem to be afraid to take risks and write from the heartVoiceThe reader feels connected to you through most of your writingSounds mostly real and originalYou let your personality come throughConventionsMostly good spelling, capitalization, punctuation, usage, grammar, and sentence structure. Your few, small mistakes don’t get in the way of your writing
15 What qualifies as a “4”? Focus and Coherence Focused! Ideas fit together to form a whileGood intro. and conclusionGood overall qualityMost writing, if not all, leads to the endOrganizationSentences and paragraphs are smoothly linked to each otherYour PLAN makes your ideas clearDepth of DevelopmentIdeas are clear with lots of elaborationHow you tell your ideas is thoughtful/wiseYou aren’t afraid to take risks, to write from your heart, to weave in your experiencesVoiceYour writing sounds real and originalThe reader feels like they know you when they read your writingConventionsNo problems with mechanics at allYou take some chances by writing at high levels, but any errors in doing this doesn’t take away from your paper
16 Before you begin… Read the prompt a couple of times Have a plan…Brainstorm about ideas that you could use to address the promptCreate an outline or write a draft before you put your pencil to the essay paper
17 When you’re done… PROOFREAD!!! Make any corrections If you aren’t sure about spelling of a word, use the dictionary!!!
18 Introduction ExampleWhile sitting alone on a stormy night bored out of my mind, I heard my phone ring from across the room. I ran over the pile of pizza boxes and empty soda cans to answer it just before it disconnected. It was my friend Jake. I should have known then that trouble was ahead.
19 Conclusion ExampleAlthough I did not enjoy the harsh consequences, I did learn a valuable lesson through my poor choice. The pain and disappointment I caused for my parents cannot be erased, but I will strive to make them proud of me by making better decisions that show my true moral character in the future.
20 Your Assignment: Integrity Tell of a time when your integrity (moral character, honesty) was tested. What was the situation and what was your choice? What was the outcome of your decision?Minimum of 1.5 to 2 pages hand-writtenFocus on the 3 primary components of the essay (intro, body, and conclusion), but remember that you should also proof-read for any grammatical or spelling errors.Rough Drafts due next clas.