2 Terms to KnowConcrete Detail (CD) – stuff from the story –the what – can be quotation or paraphrase –facts; examples; illustrations; evidence; support; plot references; citations; What really happened in the story? ; play-by-play announcer
3 Terms to Know Commentary – (CM) – stuff from your head - the “so what?”- words with feelings behind them thatyou can describe to meanalysis; interpretation; a character’s feelings; opinion; inference; insight; reasons; color commentator
4 Terms to Know Ratio – the amount of CD:CM in a body paragraph In English the ratio is 1:2+
5 One-Chunk Body Paragraph Sentence #1 -Topic Sentence – TSSentence #2 – CD –starts with “For example”Sentence #3 – CM - (This shows that)Sentence #4 – CM – (This also show that; This is because; This is important because)Sentence#5 – Circle Sentence – CS – Sums itup and ties back to the thesis(As a result)
6 Sample One Chunk Paragraph In Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone, Harry is a champion to many of the more insecure students at Hogwarts. For example, when Malfoy takes Neville’s Rememberall, Harry takes a broom and gets it back. He cannot stand someone who picks on others. Harry is now a hero to those less fortunate. He has found a place where he belongs and wants to protect the vulnerable.Two Chunk Paragraph
7 Two Chunk ParagraphUsed when the concrete detail are closely related to avoid repetition.Has the basic of Topic Sentence at the beginning and a Circle Sentence at the end.Includes two CD, CM, CM, structures with a transition between.
8 Introduction Opening sentence – STRONG! Draws the readers attention At least three or four sentencesThesis is usually stated at the end.
9 Sample IntroductionBravery cannot exist where defense of the weak is easy. Often, in order to help others, a hero must be willing to act in ways that are scary. In Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone, Harry risks much so that he can be a champion for the underdog.
10 Introduction Hook – Get reader’s attention Anecdote Startling InformationAll commentaryThesis StatementMust include the title of the bookMust include the subject you are discussingMust show your opinion about an arguable topic
11 Sample Thesis Statement The collectivist society of Anthem, by Ayn Rand, exhibited a grave loss of individuality and innovation among the inhabitants.
12 Concluding Paragraph At least three sentences All are CM sentences which give your idea as an ending for the essay.
13 Conclusion Reflects on what you said in the essay All commentary; no concrete detailsDoes NOT repeat thesis statement or introductory paragraphShould relate your knowledge of the subject matter to the world at large – outside the book
14 Sample Concluding Paragraph When faced with adversity, any of us can be a hero. When faced with someone who intimidates us, it would be to our benefit to look for creative solutions rather than running away. Each of us can stretch beyond our “little boy” programming to become a real man.