1. Redrafting your dissertation Dr Cheryl Lange

2. You’ve finished the first draft - well done Don’t race off to show it to your supervisor. There are still a couple of important things you need to do. Set aside your work for a few days Redraft Many ideas in this presentation are adapted from Evans, D & Gruba, P 2002 (2 nd ed.) How to write a better thesis, Melbourne, Melbourne University Press, pp. 123-139.

3. Things to check 1.Structure 2. Spelling, grammar, punctuation, formatting, etc.

4. Structure – some questions Is there a table of contents? (check that there is agreement between the table of contents and your chapter headings) Does the Introduction mention –why the research is being done – what the aim is –how the aim will be achieved –what the scope of the dissertation is? Do the conclusions correspond with the aim? Note areas to be improved in the margins of the text

5. Redraft questions – ask yourself Does the logic of my argument flow from introduction to conclusion? (If not, fix up any gaps, repetitions, problems with order, etc.) Has my aim shifted during my research? (If yes, re-write your aim.) Is there material in the body that would be better off in an appendix? (If so, move it to an appendix.) Have important points emerged that I didn’t consider when structuring my first draft? (If so, work out how/where to incorporate them.)

6. Results – more questions Are the results of my experiments, interviews or other aspects of my own work clearly presented and explained? Am I discussing the implications of my results as I go? (OK if you are doing a dissertation in the humanities and some social sciences. NOT OK, for dissertations in physical, biological sciences.)

7. Discussion and Conclusions Have I discussed my findings in terms of improving or extending current theory or practice? (This may not be necessary for some coursework dissertations.) Do my conclusions follow on from my discussion? (They should.) Have I introduced new discussion topics into my conclusion? (If yes, you will have to rewrite your discussion to include the new ideas or rewrite your conclusion and leave them out.) Do my conclusions explain the implications of my work for theory or practice or provide recommendations? (They should, depending on your dissertation requirements.)

8. More redrafting questions Does my formatting confirm to the specifications of my unit/discipline? Have I checked my spelling thoroughly (don’t rely solely on spell check) Does my punctuation help the reader understand my various points of view? Have I labelled all my tables and figures correctly? Have I meticulously checked my referencing? Redrafting takes time but it MUST be done

9. Want to impress your examiners? Use a clear, direct writing style

10. Tips for writing concisely Circle the prepositions (of, in, about, for, onto, into) Draw a box around the "is" verb forms Ask, "Where's the action?” Change the "action" into a simple verb Move the doer into the subject (Who's kicking whom) Eliminate any unnecessary slow wind-ups Eliminate any redundancies. http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/635/1/

11. An example http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/635/1/

12. More help? See Guide to Grammar and Writing Concise Sentences for lists of redundant phrases: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/concise.htm http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/concise.htm About.Com Grammar and Compositions lists 200 Common Redundancies: http://grammar.about.com/od/words/a/redundancies.htm http://grammar.about.com/od/words/a/redundancies.htm