Presentation on theme: "Do Now: Update your 25 Books Log and Genre Chart. Take out the Rough Draft of your personal narrative and a red pen. Please print a copy if you haven’t."— Presentation transcript:
Do Now: Update your 25 Books Log and Genre Chart. Take out the Rough Draft of your personal narrative and a red pen. Please print a copy if you haven’t. Put your laptop on your storage shelf.
Personal Narrative Revision Show, not Tell Adding dialogue, detail, and description
Dialogue Use dialogue to bring the people in your story to life –Find at least one place to add dialogue or your thoughts Use vivid verbs instead of “said” Make sure your dialogue sounds realistic –Would this person really say that? –Does their speech reveal their personality?
Detail Detailed, specific actions can bring your story to life Use sensory details to paint a picture in your reader’s mind –Sight –Sound –Touch –Taste –Smell Find at least two places to add a sensory detail
Description Have you described: –The people in your story? –The setting? –Your thoughts and feelings? Use strong, powerful adjectives and adverbs. Replace overused words like good, bad, fun, nice, awesome, etc. with more specific terms. –She’s an awesome friend. –She’s a kind and thoughtful person, who always notices the feelings of others.
FLOW Does your story make sense and flow from beginning to middle to end? Do you vary the length of your sentences? –Long sentences are good for description –Short sentences are better for bringing the reader’s attention to a specific part of the story