1. Essay Feedback: THEME: FOIL “WORK AS A WHOLE”
EWWW! So many clichés! “Friendship makes you stronger” “Friends bring out the best in you.”
You need to examine what the purpose of this story is. It’s NOT about friendship.
FOIL
Understanding of the concept of a foil.
This essay is about GILGAMESH. How does Enkidu accentuate his qualities?
“WORK AS A WHOLE”
The Humbaba scene is not indicative of Gilgamesh’s journey.
If you stopped your analysis at Enkidu’s life, then you missed half the freakin’ story. What journey did Gilgamesh go on? How does Enkindu continue to affect him?
INTRO/CONCLUSIONS Most were “meh.” Just stick with the thesis.
If you have a highlighted “Embed Quotations” or “Topic Sentences,” then please. PLEASE. PLEEEEEEEEEEEEASE, make sure you work on doing this!

2. OPTIONAL:
You have the chance to gain up to ten points on your essay (ignore previously posted EC option).
Re-write introduction and one of the body paragraphs.
ANNOTATE IT. Explain what you’ve changed/improved from the first attempt.
Staple it to your original essay.
Submit it to me by 4:30 pm tomorrow.