1. Common Essay Mistakes
2015

2. Cuckoos Nest: Mini Essay #1
Passive Voice/ Wordiness
Quote Incorporation
Literary Terms in Intro

3. Literary Terms in Intro
Jobs for your Intro: Context and Hinting at Literary Terms/Meaning
The patients have all gathered for a group therapy meeting and Harding begins on a rant comparing the patients to rabbits and the Nurse as a wolf. Harding continues to build on this metaphor until McMurphy challenges it and pushes the metaphor in another direction……
You don’t want your introduction to be interchangeable between all your different entries.

4. Passive Voice CUT: “the reader” “one” “seen/shown”
You are making declarations, not beating around the bush.

5. Further Examples The savannah is roamed by beautiful giraffes.
The entire stretch of highway was paved by the crew.
A scathing review was written by the critic
The students’ questions are always answered by the teacher.
The video was posted on Facebook by Alex.

6. Passive Voice/ sentence structure
Coloring Time:
Long Sentences: words
Medium Sentences: words
Short Sentences: 9-10 words
What do you have the most of? What is your longest sentence?
Write your longest sentence on a piece of paper.

7. Before and After
Once you have your longest sentence on a separate sheet you have to cut it down. If you get stuck then pass it to Ms. McKee to redistribute to someone.
You can cut it down or make it into multiple sentences.
Try not to add too many commas.

8. Quote Incorporation
Document on website.
VETO: “says”