1. July 20111
doc.: IEEE /0997r0
July 2011
Response to Comments received on the proposed a PAR and 5C
Date:
Authors:
Gerald Chouinard, CRC
Jon Rosdahl, CSR

2. From
2.1 Title:
What is the real work that is being cited in the title?
5.2 Scope:
suggest the following for your Scope: This amendment defines new Management and Control Plan interfaces for the IEEE standard.  The existing Management Information Base (MIB) is enhanced to accommodate the new interfaces. The Primitives for Cognitive Radio Capabilities have been extended to align with the new interface definitions.
Gerald Chouinard, CRC

3. From 802.11 5.3 Other Standard: 5.4 Purpose
Should be yes: “PAWS” or similar database protocol standard.
5.4 Purpose
The scope and purpose should describe the final document not the project. If you do not include a purpose statement in the Amendment it is better to write “Document will not have a purpose statement”.
Gerald Chouinard, CRC

4. From 802.11 5.5 Need: 5.6 Stakeholders –
The statement should be more succinct and focused.
5.6 Stakeholders –
Who are the stakeholders, not just lists of industry descriptions.
List who has stake in not who is looking to include.
Gerald Chouinard, CRC

5. From
8.1 note:
you need to include the item number that you are commenting on. ("Item Number and Explanation"). This is a better Scope statement that what is in 5.2.
General: Please check the instructions for PARs again, and comply with the instructions.
Gerald Chouinard, CRC

6. From 802.11 Five Criteria is not numbered… 1. Broad Market Potential
a) What does this have to do with the scope of the proposed project?
a) Live-stock monitoring may need a MIB, but Live-Stock Monitoring applications are probably not the motivation for enhancing the MIB. Rewrite Market Potential.
3. Distinct Identity:
c) The proposed title, scope and purpose were not defined to make it easy for anyone to select this standard for relevant applications.
5.3 Other Standard:
Should be yes: “PAWS” or similar database protocol standard.
Gerald Chouinard, CRC

7. From
In the Need section of the PAR the phrase “purposed-designed” is awkward.  Please use a clearer term.
The text in Section 8.1 of the PAR is included earlier in the Need section, please remove the second occurrence of this text.
In the Section 1a of the 5C it mentions use for disaster recovery and homeland security; however, TV white space availability is intermittent.  It does not seem like TV white space should be used for these mission critical applications.
Gerald Chouinard, CRC

8. From
In the Technical Feasibility section of the 5C please state whether the WG will produce a CA document.
In the Compatibility section of the 5C please include text as to how a will enhance compatibility with the upcoming standard.
Gerald Chouinard, CRC

9. References July 2011 July 20111 doc.: IEEE 802.11-11/0997r0
Gerald Chouinard, CRC
Jon Rosdahl, CSR