1. AS YOU COME IN
March 20, 2018
Think about the student essay you read yesterday. What advice would you give the author to revise and improve her essay? Respond in your journals in 3-5 sentences. Be detailed and specific!
Homework: Complete your Works Cited by Friday to be submitted with your rough draft. Use instructions on blog.

2. AND A LOT OF CONTRACTIONS AND 1ST/2ND PERSON!!!
OUTLINE FEEDBACK
What I’ve noticed so far:
No _____________ _________ around article titles.
Evidence does not clearly support ___________________ or comes from one article.
Commentary is just restating the ____________________ or does not connect to reason/claim. It does not explain why it matters.
Also, sometimes _____________________ is just more evidence.
___________________ is insufficient or does not mention the controversy/debate around the topic.
Repetitive or confusing _________ - ins.
Counter-argument ___________________ is structured incorrectly.
Boring, snore-fest _____________________ and __________________.
quotation
marks
reason
AND A LOT OF CONTRACTIONS AND 1ST/2ND PERSON!!!
evidence
commentary
Background
lead
paragraph
hooks
clinchers

3. ROUGH DRAFT
Due Friday at the latest. Will be collected with your works cited for a 40% grade.
Name
Teacher’s Name(s)  Ms. Tansey (NOT Molly Tansey)
ELA, _____ period
20 March 2018
Title
Here is where your hook would be. Notice how the paragraph is indented. Every paragraph you write should be
indented.
Make sure you skip lines!!!