1. Thesis Statement Strengthening
Missing One or More Key Features
Key Feature(s) Missing
Strong Thesis Statement
Throughout the French and Indian Cinderella, there are similarities and differences.
The French and Mexican versions are very similar. Both go through a stage of mistreatment from their stepmothers. Then both characters overcome multiple obstacles. Finally, they reach “happily ever after.”
Cinderella is a very popular story, told in many different ways. In fact, the French and Mexican stories have different endings.

2. Following the Thesis Map
Thesis: Even though both the French and German versions of Cinderella ended with Cinderella marrying the prince, there were different obstacles and different outcomes for the stepsisters.
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3. How to Write a Strong Conclusion Paragraph
Conclusion Paragraph Structure and Model Conclusion Paragraph
How to Write a Strong Conclusion Paragraph

4. Conclusion Paragraph Structure
Restate your thesis in a new way.
Do not simply rewrite it; come up with a fresh way to remind your reader about your essay’s objective.
Summarize.
Summarize the essay’s main ideas by revisiting some of the evidence you provided and the points you made in your body paragraphs.
“So what?”
Address the greater significance of your topic. In this case, think about how the similarities and differences you covered in your essay reveal either different or similar themes. You need to make sure your reader knows why your thesis is important and isn’t left asking “so what?” about your point.

5. Model Conclusion Paragraph
Even though Perrault’s “Cinderella; or The Little Glass Slipper” shares similar obstacles with the Grimms’ “Cinderella,” the godmother figures and magical transformations are very different. Both stories’ Cinderella characters must overcome the obstacle of performing dirty housework. Though both have godmother figures, the French version’s godmother is the classic fairy godmother, while the German version’s godmother is a white bird who grants Cinderella’s wishes. The magical transformations which cause Cinderella’s wishes to come true are different as well. Perrault’s fairy godmother uses her magic wand to transform animals and Cinderella’s clothes, but the Grimm brothers’ white bird simply gives Cinderella the garments she needs to attend the festival at the hazel tree. All in all, despite the dissimilar cultures and elements of the tales, there are enough similarities so that they both carry a very similar message: treat others the way you want to be treated, a message which rings true no matter what culture one comes from.
The 1st sentence restates the thesis in a new way.
The middle summarizes the essay’s main points.
The end addresses the greater significance: despite cultural differences, the message remains the same.