1. Analysis of Figurative Language & Reader’s Understanding
Peer Editing
Analysis of Figurative Language & Reader’s Understanding

2. Today’s Learning Target
Goal: To peer edit your practice paragraph.
Learning Target: I can peer edit another student’s paper that will provide quality feedback to the writer to write an improved paragraph for their final draft.

3. Quality Feedback Quality Feedback is NOT… Quality Feedback is…
Constructive Criticism is not an evaluation or a judgment. (You’ve got to provide FEEDBACK!)
Examples of Bad Feedback:
“Good Work!”
“This is a weak paragraph.”
“You’re a really bad writer. What is wrong with you?”
Edit with the Golden Rule in Mind!
Constructive Criticism is FEEDBACK a writer can use to improve their writing.
Example:
“Joe, I really like your idea about how a reader understands the writer’s message and your use of textual evidence is a really good example of your idea.
“Mary, Although you have some good ideas, you also have a lot of grammatical mistakes. It makes me feel lost and confused. Can I help you by showing you where you need to fix things?
Quality Feedback

4. Remember! Constructive Criticism is…
Constructive criticism is the process of offering valid and well-reasoned opinions about the work of others, usually involving both positive and negative comments, in a friendly manner rather than an oppositional one. The purpose of constructive criticism is to improve the outcome.

5. Write your first and last name on the person’s paper on the side where the student has typed his or her name.
Step 1

6. Step 2
Read the entire paper out loud to your editing partner from beginning to end without marking the paper.
WHY? When a student reads the paper out loud, it often sounds different than what we had in our mind when writing.

7. Step 3 Read the introduction (opening sentence) again.
Critique the attention getting device. Does the author state an introductory statement? Does it identify the poem, author, figurative language device(s)? If not, work with each other. You (the editor) write and give suggestions to help make the introduction better.

8. Step 4 Critique the claim (the idea they are trying to prove).
Is there one? If not, help the author write one.
If there is one, underline it.
Is the claim statement clear? If not, help the author clarify the claim.
Is the claim statement provable? In other words, does it express a position that the author can provide information on.
Does the claim clearly express to the reader what the specific and narrow topic of the paragraph?

9. Step 5: Are there citations?
Re-read through the paragraphs and insert citations.
Here’s how: anytime there is textual evidence there should be a citation. This is where your citation comes in handy from your notes.
An example is on the next page.

10. Citation: For Example
In William Wordsworth’s poem, I Wandered Lonely As A Cloud, he uses personification in the following passage: “A host of golden daffodils/Beside the lake, beneath the trees/fluttering and dancing in the breeze” (4-6). This personification compares daffodils to the people, dancing. This comparison makes the reader realize how much joy Wordsworth is feeling in this moment. Wordsworth personifies the daffodils to make them more human, allowing them to be more relatable to the reader. The author’s use of figurative language affects the reader’s understanding of the piece by giving them an opportunity to be a part of his experience, feeling all those same emotions Wordsworth is feeling in his memory. Figurative language is important because it is allowing the reader to gain insight into the experience of the author (457).

11. Step 7: The Conclusion
Critique the Conclusion
Is there a conclusion?
Does the conclusion relate to the body of the paragraph and the claim? If it does not, help the author do this.
Does the conclusion leave the reader satisfied that the paragraph has made its point and the paper has come to a conclusion that makes sense?

12. Step 8: Grammar, Spelling, Formatting
Review the paragraph one more time and locate and fix any grammar and spelling mistakes.
Check the formatting of the paragraph.
The entire paragraph (from beginning to end) should be in
Times New Roman Font
Size 12 Point
Double Spaced.
First line indented.
If not, write on the paper as a reminder for the author to change the formatting for the final copy.

13. What should my paper look like?
Times New Roman
12 Point
Everything is double spaced
Notice the date arrangement
Take Note:
Indented First Line

14. We will now start the process over again with the next student’s paper.
Step 9: Next in line

15. Tomorrow: Final Revisions Due
Tonight you will go home with your newly acquired constructive criticism and use it to revise your paragraph one last time.
Tomorrow you will come to class with your revision and your Poetry Days 1,2,&3 stapled together in this order:
Final Draft of Paragraph on Top
Poetry Day #1
Poetry Day #2
Poetry Day #3
Note: All that will be looked on your 3 days of Poetry will be the practice charts.
Tomorrow: Final Revisions Due