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常见写作错误自纠 坚果托福 秀文
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常见错误常见错误 篇章层面 词句层面 思路层面
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少论证 父母应该教导孩子独立完成作业还是帮助 他们? To begin with, encouraging the child to solve the problems alone, which will not only develop the child’s independence but also help him to adapt the society. For example, a child meets a problem, and he asks to his father right away, then he got the solution from his father.
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一次只做一个 project 好还是同时 N 个 project 好? First of all, with upgraded technologies one can fulfill his or her achievement much easier than before through various learning methods. For instance, we're connecting to every corner of the world through internet and other medium every day. People benefit from such development and knowledge is no longer sealed inside paper books. On the contrary, people in the past can only acquire knowledge and information by reading paper books. One cannot access to certain knowledge If the book contains that knowledge is beyond reach.
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少例子 一次只做一个 project 好还是同时 N 个 project 好? Furthermore, money has always been a indispensable factor in education. In the past, the one with money were much easier to become educated than the one without, and this has not changed. However, the amount of people who can afford money on education has raised dramatically. As a result, people became educated easier.
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Colleges or Universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working. Secondly, having students focus on their careers and jobs will increase the rate at which students acquire knowledge in those fields. On condition that many university students who do not know what they can do in the future, they think the future is dim. Hence, it is high time to offer students some career courses. On the one hand, it is importance to tell students make a clear career plan in advance. On the other hand,to offer students some internship chances. I assume that you are familiar with the words, who once said”genuine knowledge comes form practice.” Students get to internships at companies before they graduate, it gives them a great opportunity to learn about their field of study. Slowing the good future career planning of students will easily stand up in their mind.
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例子与主题无关 hiring more teachers or spending more on facilities. First, teacher plays a vital role in helping us to solve problem in our daily life. Because teachers are concerned with our emotion condition, thus, we talk about him and he provide some advice for us. I still remember that at one time, my parents did not get along well with each other. They always ranted against that made me fell in a flutter, so my school record was straight-away glide. my teacher asked me the reason and then he contact with my parent, ever since, my parent did not have a row at home.
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Children should do jobs that are similar to those of their parents. His father, my uncle, who teaches the basketball in a club, has a positive influence on my cousin. My uncle started training my cousin since he was six years old; my cousin shows his great talent for basketball. Besides, his team won the first prize in my city; he was the youngest player at that time. He told us his dream was to be a superstar in the NBA. A recent survey can back my point. The survey, conducted by a prestigious Chinese facility, after polling thousands of children aged between 15 to 20, has found a significant percentage of respondents claimed they prefer choose the similar jobs as their parents. Therefore, parents play a vital role in their children' life, especially when their children are facing with choosing jobs.
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主谓一致 Less bugs will contain in the devices. First and foremost, every single child have the feeling that when they have problem. Working in the office has the facility to help. Provided by the national laboratory, the public are shocked by the result.
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主语谓语 A lot of projects come together, may cause unbalance. The leaders are tend to promote the making of lows about legalize the marriage of homosexuals. Because we can successfully solve the problems. When the government would pay much more attention to the environment problems.
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口语化表达 There are hundreds of thousands of stories about young people influencing culture, and the popularity of listening to rock music is one of them. Han Han, a famous 80s writer, donated 400 thousand Yuan to organize a fund to help children in the mountain area. And my elder brother, who is a manager in the Wanda enterprise in my city, donated two buildings to his high school. The instances cannot be exampled to the limit.
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口语化表达 Perhaps the most crucial and efficient way of learning in the modern society is whether we can take advantages from education system or not, as we all know nowadays the expansion of university enrollment increases rapidly, so many students can go to the college to broad their horizons.
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口语化表达 Obviously, no I want give an example, Just as the investigation shows, We can arrive at some conclusion, like this student may get too motivation to improve him quality of learning. Let's bring us discussion here to a more present and practical context, it can be given a concrete example.
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How could you say that people are less happy, when people can always find something to relax themselves? But to what extent? Perhaps, they can borrow money to me when I’m lack of money; perhaps, they can offer me a promising job when I lose my job.
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表达绝对化 On another hand, parents cannot understand and accept the younger’s thoughts. What's most important of career for one person is the decent social status which is also unavailable by social life. Obviously, it's the best way that universities provide students more relative courses.
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That , what , which Our ancestor could not imagine their offspring can create those tools to make people's life convenient. However, people who harbor such idea are seemed to fail to take into account the basic fact many old people try hard to catch up with current world.
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First of all, one property of the sports and social activities is that balancing our daily study and normal life. However, people who harbor such idea are seemed to fail to take into account the basic fact many old people try hard to catch up with current world.
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When we are in office, we could learn from the conversation and know more about that we do not know. Therefore, I insist that there are other great progress will be achieved in the future.
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In my opinion, only doing things what he want to do is a definitely a very harmful or detriment habit. They do not understand me at all in these things. As we know, the parent's attitude of studying is similar to the parents did 50 years ago.
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比较级 In the modern times that is more faster than over past few years, to develop our economy is toughly. both of us felt that we were the most happiest person in this world. He has more money than me
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代词 My father, a kind person, instructs me to help everyone we meet in the street as best as I can. When the officer feels overwhelmed in the working tasks, or the student gets swamped in the final exam, he just wants to release the pressure, and then, continues to struggle hard sparing no effort. That is what we humans dream of truly.
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冠词 when I’m with friend who can have fun with me, Consequently, student pass the graduate. 可数名词: a the s 不可数名词: the some
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标点符号 Accordingly by focusing only on the classes students will need in their future careers, universities can eliminate lessons that are useless. he should go to the place where can afford him a good stage to show himself completely, therefore, the big city is a good choice for them.
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中式表达 if every time when he learns a kind of new knowledge, than, he asks others how to use the knowledge rather than thinking by himself, May be there is no internet, then he cannot do that. As we all know that some playboys always get together and talk about the woman, the things in the club and the money they spend.
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逻辑错误 When we put our back into a business, our brain is always full of fancy, what is more, we need to keep a sober brain to face each problems in this time. To begin with, just do one project in the rule time. (一次只做一个 project 好还是同时 N 个 project 好?)
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Currently, in our society, a numerous number of families own cars. Even more, some families own more than one. Thus, we have so many traffic accidents, and our relatives and good friends lose their lives in the crash case. Also, we meet traffic jam every day. Different people hold different opinion. In my opinion, however, to be entirely honest with friends is a not impossible. (开头第一句)
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