高中英语写作讲评

The computer is more and more widely used. Young people like to chat on line. When they are chatting, they don’t care about their writing. There have many wrong characters in their compositions, too. Every day, they have many homework. They can’t remember the characters. The government has carried out a new policy. It will make people pay attention to Chinese. It will help students learn Chinese well. We don’t have much time. It’s high time that we took action. We can develop our country by improving our mother tongue first. How do you grade it （定档） ? And why? homework show

ASSESSMENT structureIs the article divided into parts? Does each part have a topic sentence? If not, come up with one. content Are all the details stated? If not, add the missing details. Is everything to the point( 切题 )? Language Does the writer use any linking words? Are there any mistakes? If yes, correct them. Is there any advanced vocabulary （高级词汇） ? If yes, underline them. Are there any good sentence patterns （句式） ? If yes, underline them. Let’s improve it:

ASSESSMENT structureIs the article divided into parts? Does each part have a topic sentence? If not, come up with one. Let’s improve it:

content Are all the details stated? If not, add the missing details. Is everything to the point( 切题 )? Let’s improve it:

Language Does the writer use any linking words? Are there any mistakes? If yes, correct them. Is there any advanced vocabulary （高级词汇） ? If yes, underline them. Are there any good sentence patterns （句式） ? If yes, underline them. Let’s improve it:

Summary: paragraphs topic sentence details to the point advanced vocabulary sentence patterns linking words structure content language writing few mistakes

目前，不少年轻人在写作中喜欢使用网络语言。某英语杂志社就此话 题邀请中学生发表看法。请你参考所给要点，写一篇英语短文。 有的同学认为：幽默；时尚；好玩 有的同学认为：有错别字，不利于语文学习；有时难以理解 你的看法： … … Nowadays, many teenagers like to use the web language in their writing. Some students think it is humorous and cool. They use the web language. They feel it’s fun. Some think it is difficult. They cannot understand. When they are chatting on line, they don’t care about their writing. There have some wrongly-written characters. It is bad for Chinese learning. I think we can use the web language and we can express ourselves more freely. Improve the composition. Focus on topic sentences, advanced vocabulary & patterns and linking words.

You cannot teach a man anything; you can only help him find it within himself. --- Galileo Galilei

Homework Further improve the writing according to the assessment form. Make your final copy as neat as possible.

Let’s divide it into parts: Part.1 Part.2 Part.3 The computer … remember the characters. The government … help students learn Chinese well. It’s high time that we … by improving our mother tongue first.

Part 2: To deal with the situation, the government carry out a new policy. Part 3: As far as I am concerned, it’s high time that we took action. Part 1: It is common that there are many wrongly-written characters in a student’s composition. Come up with the topic sentences: A topic sentence tells the reader what a certain part is about.

Topic sentence for Part 2 Topic sentence for Part 3 … Topic sentence for Part 1 computer homework raise the awareness of have a positive effect on

Which ending do you like best? Why? a)In my opinion, the policy is beneficial to us. It makes sense in protecting our culture. b) As far as I am concerned, it’s high time that we took action. We should collect the mistakes and review them frequently. Only by hard working can we achieve our goal.

… they don’t care about their writing. There have many wrong characters in their compositions, too. Every day, they have many homework. writing are much

…________. ________, when young people chat online, they attach little importance to their writing. __________, with so much homework to do, they have trouble memorizing the characters. The new policy is intended to deal with the situation. Raising the social awareness of our mother tongue, it will have a positive effect on Chinese learning. __________, it’s high time that we took action. __________, we should refer to a dictionary for unknown characters. Second, collect the mistakes and review them frequently. In a word, only by working hard can we achieve our goal. A.There are several reasons behind. B. As far as I am concerned C. For example D. Moreover. E. First of all AC D B E

① When they are chatting, they don’t care their writing. ② Every day, they have much homework. They are too busy to remember the characters. ③ It will make people pay attention to our mother tongue. It will help students learn Chinese well. Can you improve them?

When they are chatting, they don’t care their writing. When chatting, they don’t care their writing. (Ellipsis 省略句 )

Every day, they have much homework. They can’t remember the characters. They have so much homework to do that they fail to remember the characters. (so…that; fail to do) with With so much homework to do, they have trouble in remembering the characters.

It will make people pay attention to our mother tongue. raise the awareness of It will raise the awareness of our mother tongue.

It will help students learn Chinese well. have a positive effect on It will have a positive effect on students’ Chinese learning.

It will raise the awareness of our mother tongue. It will have a positive effect on students’ Chinese learning. _______the awareness of our mother tongue, it will have a positive effect on Chinese learning. (non-verbal 非谓语） (not only…but also) It will not only raise the awareness of our mother tongue, but also have a positive effect on students’ Chinese learning. Raising

It is common that there are many wrongly-written characters in a student’s composition. There are several reasons behind. For example, when chatting on line, teenagers attach little importance to their writing. Moreover, with so much homework to do, they have trouble memorizing the characters. To deal with the situation, the government carry out a new policy. Raising the social awareness of our mother tongue, it will have a positive effect on Chinese learning. As far as I am concerned, it’s high time that we took action. We should collect the mistakes and review them frequently. In a word, only by working hard can we achieve our goal.

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