EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS Supporting Student Success Comprehensive Review & the Personal Statement 1

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS Presented by: Edward Aguilar, Director Academic Preparation Programs Hong Pham, Regional Assistant Director Early Academic Outreach Program 2

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Goals & Objectives Session 1: Comprehensive Review Session 2- April 23: The Personal Statement – Goal 1: Admissions Perspective Function of PS in an Admission Decision Content is Critical – Goal 2: Advising & Coaching Students Importance of THEIR Uniqueness Common Personal Statement Pitfalls – Goal 3: Writing A Sample Lesson Plan 3

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS The Admissions Perspective The Function of the Personal Statement in an Admissions Decision 4

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Purpose of the Personal Statement Part of UC’s comprehensive review process Opportunity to provide information that supports and adds to the review process – providing context for student achievement Helps readers know and understand applicants – content is key 5

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Personal Statement Prompts Two questions Students respond to both questions. – A maximum of 1,000 total for both prompts – Students should stay within the word limit as closely as they can. A little over—1,012 words, for example—is fine. Students choose length of each response. – Shorter response should be at least 250 words. 6

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Prompt #1 Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. 7

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Prompt #2 Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are? 8

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS Advising and Coaching Students Helping Students Discover their Uniqueness 9

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Finding a Topic Preparation Questions handout Deeply reflective exercise Consider CR areas – Highlight qualities of a successful student – Consider “intellectual vitality” and “potential to contribute” – UC gives consideration for leadership, special skills and talents, and personal difficulty 10

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Finding a Topic Students are encouraged to write about special circumstances that have influenced their educational experience: Topic areas for LBHS students – Refugee experience – 1 st generation college student – Parental role in family – Personal challenges beyond student control 11

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Feedback Areas Answering both parts of the question – Focus on 2 nd part Explores topic deeply: depth vs. breadth Time – Experiences during high school or that affected their high school experience Information not captured on application Specificity 12

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Common Pitfalls R EPEATING I NFORMATION In my junior year I was a cheerleader for my school. I worked really hard at it, and found it to be fun and challenging. I was also part of my school's Kids in the Kitchen program, which helped to make food available to poor people in my community. Cheerleading and volunteer work kept me very busy. I spent approximately twenty hours each week cheering and another five hours volunteering. I learned a lot from this experience and can manage my time effectively and maintain a positive attitude in the face of adversity. 13

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Common Pitfalls C OMPLAINING INSTEAD OF EXPLAINING Because my mother is a single parent, she has had to make a lot of sacrifices to keep me and my brother in a private school. It means that we have to go without a lot of things, which is sometimes embarrassing. But even though everyone in my school knows that we are poor, no one is willing to give me a break. This is especially true of my English teacher, Sister Magdalena. Because she didn't like me, and she is not comfortable with poor people, she gave me a C in English when I really should have gotten a B. 14

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Common Pitfalls V OICE : C LICHÉS AND O VER - THE - TOP P ROSE – My father always told me that there is nothing to fear but fear itself. (A cliché) – A feeling of indescribable disbelief overcame me. (Wordy prose) 15

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Common Pitfalls “S ELFLESSNESS ”: F OCUSING MORE ON SOMEONE ELSE ’ S EXPERIENCE My mother is a refugee from Vietnam. At the young age of 17, she had to leave her country, her friends, and the only life she knew to escape communist oppression. As a child, I remember her struggle to learn English: as a matter of fact, I remember that we learned to read together when I was in kindergarten. Eventually, she learned enough English and was able to take some classes at a community college near our home. She earned an AA in accounting. I admire her strength, determination and resilience and she is a constant reminder to me that anything is possible as long as you can dream and are willing to work hard. 16

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS Writing Case Studies, Lesson Plan & Resources 17

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Case Study Discussion Case Study #1 Case Study #2 Case Study #3 18

EARLY ACADEMIC OUTREACH PROGRAM EDUCATIONAL TALENT SEARCH UPWARD BOUND COLLEGE OPTIONS UC DAVIS ACADEMIC PREPARATION PROGRAMS Lesson Plan & Resources Lesson 1: Writing Process and Planning the Personal Statement – Handouts: Sample UC Application Terms, Topics, Planning, and Organizing Preparation Questions Lesson 2: Feedback and Revision – Handouts: Guided Feedback forms : Author and Peer editor 19