Happy Monday! Today you’ll need: Your notebook for Weeds and Roses The paper you began your Read Around comments on A pen! A brain (borrow if you have to) Your essay charting paper (yellow or blue or green?) Homework: RER due Wednesday! Huck Finn 1-12 for Thursday; Reading group in here Tuesday after school!

Weeds & Roses Horace and Adversity

Weed #1: Put it in a Nutshell Where is the meat of your essay? What is the point of an introduction? What MUST you include in one? What is the point of a conclusion? In a timed writing, you will have to make concessions: consider where development is necessary, and forego the rest. Attend to it, but don’t dwell on it.

Weed #2: Analyze, Analyze! How much commentary/analysis should there be per concrete detail? What does commentary do for your essay? How do you create more commentary?

What about here? “Adversity builds men and women up to take new hardships in a healthier way, such as a woman’s mother dying. She cries for days on end, then years later her father dies and she is more prepared to comfort her siblings and soften their blow.”

“An example of this is in the novel The Cay “An example of this is in the novel The Cay. In it, a young, rich boy finds himself stranded on a remote island in the Caribbean with a black man after a storm wrecked his ship and left him blinded. Under these extreme conditions, the boy matures, learning racial acceptance of the black man as well as how to survive away from civilization. His situation pushes him to learn skills such as fishing and hunting, all of which, under regular circumstances, he would have never learned. This unique situation forces adaption and evolution.”

Look in the Sample 8: Where do you see examples of analysis? How do you know this is analysis? How much is there in relation to the CD?

Why is this little grammar tidbit SUPER important? Weed #3: Possess this! Some basics: Apostrophes show possession My English teacher’s brain (singular possessive) My English teachers’ brains (plural possessive) For words that end in an “s” already, you have a choice: Ms. Kitchens’ Ms. Kitchens’s (I think this one looks funny!) Why is this little grammar tidbit SUPER important?

Weed #4: The Fat Nazi Problem If you use multiple CD in one paragraph— awesome!! You MUST be sure to either: Thoroughly finish one idea Clearly transition into a new idea

“In Germany, the Germans themselves have perceived themselves through the eyes of WWII. They caution their citizens not to speak of Hitler in fear of being called a Nazi. Also, obesity plays a major role on how one can perceive himself…” “If one is faced with hardship, such as being poor, they become more determined and again more responsibility. A person could have a friend that has told them that they are homosexual.”

Roses! Nice use of transitions: “Not only does adversity effect [sic] morals, it also effects one’s perception of others.” “But, even though adversity helps define you, wealth can too.” “Dormant, however, does not mean unexistent [sic].” “The truth is, though, nobody ever lives life based on a dictionary definition.”

Roses!! EXCELLENT verb choices! “When their actions change to accommodate that difficulty…” “In some circumstances, conflict can unveil new knowledge about yourself.” “…is built around expectations that have been crafted in the mind of society itself…the desire to be accepted clouds their judgment. Many people scoff at such a comparison, but these are the people who submit to those rules…”

Roses! 99.9% of us answered the prompt—WOOHOO!! Some excellent hooks: “In a perfect world, there are no dilemmas, no hardships, no problems.” “Nature has its own incredible way of accomplishing the tasks necessary to support life.” “My swim coach has a chalk board on the wall of the pool deck.” “It is the classic underdog story: a person, severely disadvantaged financially, physically, or mentally, overcomes astounding odds to make it in the world.”

Scores! “Buy Nothing Day” Horace 9—0 8—3 7—6 6—7 5—10 4—11 3—2 2—0 9- 0 8-1 7-3 6-7 5-11 4-7 3-8 2-0

And Now, for something completely different! The class analogy!