+ Week 6: Analysis of the Drafting Process ENGL 1301 Mrs. Edlin

+ BLOG POST - due Sunday at 11:59 How do you feel about revision? Are you comfortable with the revision process? What about the process intimidates you? What types of errors do you typically notice in your own writing? In other people’s writing? What strategies do you use when proofreading and editing? What types of revisions do you typically make to your drafts?

+ Reviewing, Revising, and Editing: What’s the Difference? Reviewing calls for reading your draft with a critical eye and asking others to look over your work. Revising involves reworking your draft on the basis of the review you and others have performed, making sure that the draft is clear and effective and includes all essential information. Editing involves fine-tuning your prose, attending to details of grammar, usage, punctuation, and spelling.

+ Revising: What do I look for? 1. Assignment. Does the draft carry out the assignment? 2. Title and introduction. Does the title tell readers what the draft is about? How does it catch their interest? Does the opening make readers want to continue? How else might the draft begin?

+ Revising: What do I look for? 3. Thesis and purpose. Paraphrase the thesis as a promise: In this paper, the writer will…. Does the draft fulfill that promise? Why, or why not? Does it carry out the writer’s purposes? 4. Audience. How does the draft interest and appeal to its intended audience?

+ Revising: What do I look for? 5. Rhetorical stance. Where does the writer stand? What words or phrases indicate the stance? What influences have likely contributed to that stance? 6. Major points. List the main points, and review them one by one. Do any points need to be explained more or less fully? Do any seem confusing or boring? Should any points be eliminated or added? How well is each major point supported?

+ Revising: What do I look for? 7. Organization and flow. Is the writing easy to follow? Are the ideas presented in an order that will make sense to readers? Do effective transitions ease the flow between paragraphs and ideas? 8. Paragraphs. Which paragraphs are clearest and most interesting? Which paragraphs need further development, and how might they be improved?

+ Revising: What do I look for? 9. Sentences. Are any sentences particularly effective and well written? Are any sentences weak—confusing, awkward, or uninspired? Are the sentences varied in length and structure? Are the sentence openings varied?

+ Revising: What do I look for? 10. Words. Mark words that draw vivid pictures or provoke strong responses; then mark words that are weak, vague, or unclear. Do any words need to be defined? Are the verbs active and vivid? Are any words potentially offensive?

+ Revising: What do I look for? 11. Tone. What dominant impression does the draft create—serious, humorous, persuasive, something else? Where, specifically, does the writer’s attitude come through most clearly? Is the tone appropriate to the topic and the audience? Is it consistent throughout? 12. Conclusion. Does the draft conclude in a memorable way, or does it seem to end abruptly or trail off into vagueness? How else might it end?

+ Readings on Revision Read the following PDFs that discuss revision Revising Drafts: Tips The Maker’s Eye: Revising Your Own Manuscripts In 6-10 sentences, explain what you learned about the revision process from reading these two PDFs. Submit this paragraph to me via by no later than Sunday, July 12 at 11:59.59 p.m. CST

+ BA6 Objective: To develop the ability to determine what revisions should be made to an early draft of a document. Purpose: Most inexperienced writers have trouble identifying, prioritizing, and executing appropriate large scale revisions to a draft. In this assignment, you’ll read both an initial draft and a subsequently revised version of this draft, evaluate the changes made, and make suggestions as to what else might be revised.

+ BA6 Description: To complete this assignment, read the initial draft provided and then write an initial paragraph in which you discuss the problems that you see in the current draft. Next, read the revised draft and write another paragraph in which you discuss 1) whether the problems that you saw in the first draft were addressed, 2) whether the revisions fixed other issues that you hadn’t noticed in the draft, and 3) why the revisions are or are not an improvement over the first draft.

+ BA6 If you believe other revisions should be made to the draft, conclude your assignment with an explanation of what those are and how the revisions should be made. Your discussion should be words in length.

+ IMPORTANT BA6 INFORMATION Your paragraphs for BA6 should focus on the elements of revision discussed in Chapter 4b of the handbook (also discussed in previous slides of this presentation). DO NOT focus on grammar, punctuation, spelling, or usage. Those items fall into the “editing” category, and this assignment asks you to revise.

+ IMPORTANT BA6 INFORMATION Failure to follow these instructions will result in grade penalties. If you have questions about completing BA6, please feel free to send me an .

+ Homework Readings St. Martin's Handbook: Chapter 2, "Rhetorical Situations“ Audio Lesson: Rhetorical Analysis from a Reader's PerspectiveRhetorical Analysis from a Reader's Perspective Participation Complete blog post by Sunday, July 12 at 11:59.59 p.m. CST (this will count as your attendance for the week) Submit paragraph on readings via by Sunday, July 12 at 11:59.59 p.m. CST Submit a minimum 750-word rough draft of 1.1 via by Sunday, July 12 at 11:59.59 p.m. CST Quiz 5 – due via by Sunday, July 12 at 11:59.59 p.m. CST Raider Writer Work BA6 – due to Raider Writer by Friday, July 10 at 11:59.59 p.m. CST

+ Preparation for Draft 1.1 (due next week) As we move into the following week, you need to begin drafting your rhetorical analysis (draft 1.1). The following slides provide information regarding the assignment that will be helpful to you as you prepare for the submission of 1.1. Submit 750-word draft of 1.1 to me via by no later than Sunday, July 12 at 11:59.59 p.m. CST

+ Draft 1.1: Rhetorical Analysis After selecting your text and critically reading it, you will determine the writer’s purpose and intended audience for the text. Once you have determined these elements, you will begin to analyze the text so as to determine the specific strategies (rhetorical choices) the writer uses to achieve his or her purpose and to meet the needs of the audience.

+ Draft 1.1: Rhetorical Analysis After you determine what these strategies or rhetorical choices are, consider how well these strategies (rhetorical choices) actually work. Although this is an initial draft, it should be carefully edited and written in a professional tone. Please use MLA format for both your in-text citations and your works cited in this draft. Your draft should be 1200 words in length.