1. Argument Essay Who is admirable?

2. Who is worth admiring in The Great Gatsby? Why? 1.Talk with a partner. 2.Tell me your answer. 3.Back up your answer with evidence. (7 Minutes) Example: Nick is worth admiring because he lives by a moral code that cannot be changed, even with the temptation of money and fame. An example would be when Nick attended Gatsby’s funeral when nobody else would.

3. Socratic Seminar Who is worth admiring in The Great Gatsby? Why? 1.Talk with a partner. 2.Tell me your answer. 3.Back up your answer with evidence. (7 Minutes) Example: Nick is worth admiring because he lives by a moral code that cannot be changed, even with the temptation of money and fame. An example would be when Nick attended Gatsby’s funeral when nobody else would.

4. What are your first steps in starting an essay? Thesis (Pick a side) Answer the question, using the prompt. Attention grabber (Using information, anecdote, rhetorical question)

5. Now Take out a piece of paper. Label it “Thesis.” Take out another piece of paper. Label it “Statement of fact introduction.”

6. Write this on your “Thesis” paper. 1.Driving Question for Thesis: Which character in The Great Gatsby is admirable and why? 2.Jay Gatsby is an admirable character whose reaching for the impossible is considered heroic.

7. Write this on your “Thesis” paper. 1.Driving Question for Thesis: Which character in The Great Gatsby is admirable and why? 2.Answer with FATT. Example: In the (TEXT) novel (TITLE) The Great Gatsby, by (AUTHOR) F. Scott Fitzgerald, Jay Gatsby is an admirable character whose reaching for the impossible is considered heroic.

8. Introductions You are making a first impression. What do you do when first meeting someone you want to like you? Charm? Humor? Sincerity? Writing is a social act.

9. Introduction Anecdotal using Scene Rhetorical Question Interesting Factual statement COLLECT NOTES on these moves.

10. Introductions Write an introduction for each “move.” Anecdotal using Scene Rhetorical Question Interesting Factual statement

11. Introductions Rhetorical Question –First sentence grabs reader’s attention and asks a rhetorical question. –Rest of introduction talks about the “who”, “what”, “where” of argument. –Who: Us, a public figure, a family member –What: judgment, admiral qualities –Where: Earth, the heavens, your backyard.

12. Introductions Examples: –“Is a woman judged by her actions or her thoughts?” –“If perfection is impossible, why do we judge harshly for those who are imperfect?” –Write your own.

13. Introductions Rhetorical Question If perfection is impossible, why do we judge harshly for those who are imperfect? Whether it is those in our personal lives or those who are in literature, we among the flawed (who, where). Flaws are what keep us human, and being admired means we accept our flaws, grow from them (what). THESIS: In The Great Gatsby, Daisy Buchanan is fatally flawed, but she is admirable because of her willingness to follow her instincts and live with emotion. –Who: Us –What: Flaws and judgment –Where: Personal lives and literature

14. Introductions Interesting Statement of Fact –Start introduction with a compelling fact. –Tone of introduction is factual, objective, and scientific. –Writer is telling reader, “I’m not messing with feelings. It’s all facts, baby.” –Good for writing that is heavily leaning on logic Research papers Science writing

15. Introductions Take out ANOTHER piece of paper. Write “interesting fact” on this paper.

16. Introductions Interesting Statement of Fact Look up an interesting fact about character or judgment: When Martin Luther King Jr. marched for equality, he was a target for murder. Nelson Mandela was imprisoned for 25 years. Fifty two percent of marriages end in divorce, which means someone at some point was not acting admirably.

17. Introductions Start first sentence with interesting fact Fifty two percent of marriages end in divorce, which means someone at some point was not acting admirably. Human beings (WHO) are embedded with flaws, and it is the drama of trying to understand these flaws under the light of our strengths that is the human struggle (WHEN), represented through every day statistics and in literature. Those who live understanding this struggle are to be admired for their awareness (WHAT). In the novel The Great Gatsby, Nick Carroway lives with this awareness, because of his conscious way of living, he is admirable. Who, what, where of argument. –Who: Human Beings, Divorced people –What: Awareness –When: Human struggle

18. Introductions Start first sentence with interesting fact Stanford University’s acceptance rate is 0.6%, and these candidates are the top students of their schools. These candidates strive for what they want, despite the statistics, enduring hours of homework, playing sports, and surviving disasterous family lives. In the same way these students strove for greatness, Jay Gatsby in the novel The Great Gatsby also attains what he wants. In the novel The Great Gatsby, Jay Gatsby is an admirable character because he strives for what he wants. Who, what, where of argument. –Who: Human Beings, Divorced people –What: Awareness –When: Human struggle

19. Introductions Start first sentence with interesting fact In Ferguson County, protestors were shot at by rubber bullets, gassed, and beaten my militant police. The protesters were teachers, mothers, sons: Americans. They believed fiercely for the right to be equal, to protest the institutional racial profiling pervading the state. Another person who fiercely fought for his beliefs was Tom Buchannan, from the novel The Great Gatsby. In the novel The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald, Tom Buchannan is an admirable character because he fights mightily for his deepest beliefs. Who, what, where of argument. –Who: People who fight for beliefs –What: admirable character

20. Introductions Start first sentence with interesting fact In the novel The Great Gatsby, Jay Gatsby is an admirable character because he strives for what he wants. Who, what, where of argument. –Who: Human Beings, Divorced people –What: Awareness –When: Human struggle

21. Introduction Take out a piece of paper and label it, “Statement of Opinion.”

22. Introduction Father Thesis, Baby Thesis: Statement of Opinion Write a more GENERAL version of your thesis as your first line. First line must HOOK.

23. Introduction Father Thesis, Baby Thesis: Statement of Opinion Write a more GENERAL version of your thesis as your first line. First line must HOOK. GENERAL STATEMENT: The people worth admiring are the people who don’t know how to be contained. THESIS: In the novel The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald, Jay Gatsby is an admirable character whose reaching for the impossible is considered heroic. Who, what, where of argument. –Who: Visionaries like Christopher Columbus –What: Boundless imagination,

24. Introduction Father Thesis, Baby Thesis: Statement of Opinion Write a more GENERAL version of your thesis as your first line. First line must HOOK. GENERAL STATEMENT: People with extraordinary visions are bound to do extraordinary things. President Obama saw a country whose sons would be able to take care of their dying mothers because we would all have health care. He saw it first. THESIS: In the novel The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald, Jay Gatsby is an admirable character whose reaching for the impossible is extraordinary. Who, what, where of argument. –Who: Visionaries like Christopher Columbus –What: Boundless imagination,

25. Introduction The people worth admiring are the people who don’t know how to be contained. An artist’s soul is capacious, able to take in the entire world and place it on a plate, or a blueprint, or a classroom. A visionary requires limitless thinking and dreaming, a way of being that cannot be bound by sensibility and conventions. Christopher Columbus saw a world that in fact never ended, a circumference that could run forever with enough wind and will. Those who are tyrannized by fear and limited vision seem always bound by height, weight, or aptitude, reasons for staying cornered by fear and cynicism, a combination that always underlies sadness for what is already determined in their minds. It is our reaching and straining beyond limitations that make us admirable, that make life boundless and soaring with the very stars we can’t reach. In the novel The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald, Jay Gatsby is one such hero, an admirable character whose reaching for the impossible is considered heroic.

26. Introduction Scene Use 3 out of the 5 senses Quickest way to emotionally convince the reader Pure storytelling Mr. Kim is nuts about this one. But you should learn other techniques. Who, what, where of argument. –Who: People, beings, living creatures –What: Transience –Where: Living rooms, kitchens, schools, anywhere!

27. Introduction Take out a piece of paper. Label it “Scene Introduction.”

28. Introduction Turn in “Scene Introduction” in the back tray.

29. Introduction Scene: Write 3 sensory details about a time you experienced the thesis: EXAMPLE: MR. KIM’s FATHER IN COMMUNITY COLLEGE. 3 SENSORY DETAILS Air conditioning Back Pack zipping Whispering of students

30. Introduction Scene: Write 3 sensory details. The air conditioning of the classroom (WHERE) came down heavily on my father’s (WHO) head, chilling the sweat off of his neck. The community college classroom was filled to capacity, with 80 students rustling papers, zipping up back packs, and whispering to each other before the professor arrived. My father smelled the strange perfumes that reminded him of fruit and flowers. When the professor began the lecture, my father was utterly bewildered. He could catch a few words, but the Chemistry class seemed fractured, unable to be pieced together. Although he had a minimal understanding of English, my father charged ahead to take this class to provide a better life for his family. The impossibility (WHAT) stared him in the face, but he attempted the class anyways. He ultimately dropped out of the class, but it doesn’t mean he is less admirable. (TRANSITION TO THESIS)It is the reaching that matters more than the attaining. Who, what, where of argument. –Who: My father –What: impossibility –Where: Classroom

31. Introduction Scene: Write 3 sensory details. Nick Carraway doesn’t judge people: The Topanga mall smelled like pretzel and perfume. Jay was quiet, his hands shoved into his pockets. The loud conversations bounced off the tile floor, and I could hardly hear Jay’s words as he pulled out the stack of one dollar bills. He told me he had stolen the money for a birthday present. I hugged him.

32. Introduction Write your thesis after each of your introductions: Scene, Rhetorical Question, Factual Statement. Example: The air conditioning of the classroom came down heavily on my father’s head, chilling the sweat off of his neck. The community college classroom was filled to capacity, with 80 students rustling papers, zipping up back packs, and whispering to each other before the professor arrived. My father smelled the strange perfumes that reminded him of fruit and flowers. When the professor began the lecture, my father was utterly bewildered. He could catch a few words, but the Chemistry class seemed fractured, unable to be pieced together. Although he had a minimal understanding of English, my father charged ahead to take this class to provide a better life for his family. The impossibility stared him in the face, but he attempted the class anyways. He ultimately dropped out of the class, but it doesn’t mean he is less admirable. It is the reaching that matters more than the attaining. In the novel The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald, Jay Gatsby is one such hero, an admirable character whose reaching for the impossible is considered heroic.

33. In groups of 2: 1.Take out two pieces of paper 2.Hamburger Hot Dog your papers. 3.Read each person’s introductions. 4.Critique the following items for each introduction: 1.Transition from introduction to thesis 2.Presence of: WHO-WHAT-WHERE 5.Vote for each partner’s best introduction on center diamond. For full credit, you must turn in all reviews.

34. Hamburger Hotdog Paper Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim Statement of Opinion Introduction: Statement of Fact Introduction: Scene Introduction: Reviewed By: Brendon Wydra Favorite

35. Introduction Note the following items for each introduction: 1.Is the “who-what-where” of the argument present? 2.Do the sentences following the first sentence flow properly? In other words, is the sentence after the rhetorical question relevant or just wacky? 3.Is the transition from introduction to the thesis smooth? Or does it need a transition word/phrase? 4.Is there even a thesis with “F.A.T.T.”? YOU MUST ADDRESS ALL 4 OF THESE ITEMS FOR EACH INTRODUCTION, “RHETORICAL QUESTION, STATEMENT OF FACT AND SCENE” IN ORDER TO GET FULL CREDIT.

36. Hamburger Hotdog Paper Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim Rhetorical Question Introduction -First line is a great hook, interesting. -Second sentence didn’t quite make sense with first sentence. -Third sentence didn’t stay on topic from first sentence. -Transition from intro to thesis was rough and wasn’t smooth. Statement of Fact Introduction -First sentence was interesting, and made me want to read more. -The WHO, WHAT, WHERE were clear and dead-on. -Transition from intro to thesis was smooth, expert, and professional gangsta. Scene Introduction -Sensory details were strong. Made me want to eat the paper. -Sense of place was like reality TV -Transition from scene into thesis was rougher than driving without wheels. Needs to use more transitional words. Reviewed By: Brendon Wydra Favorite: Statement of Fact Introduction

37. Introduction In Groups: –Highlight and number the following items from the student essay: #1 Thesis #2 Transition from paragraph #1 to paragraph #2

38. Finding Quotes to support your thesis Take out a piece of paper. Hamburger-Hotdog a regular piece of paper. Write your thesis in the middle diamond. Choose two quotes to support your thesis on the two halves.

39. Introduction How do you find quotes to support your thesis?

40. Finding Quotes to support your thesis Hamburger-Hotdog a regular piece of paper. Write your thesis in the middle diamond. Choose two quotes to support your thesis on the two halves.

41. Choose two quotes to support your thesis.

42. Gatsby Argumentative Essay Take out: The Great Gatsby Character Tracker Worksheet Say-Mean-Matter Power verbs/phrases worksheet (Extra Fun! Vocabulary: Doltish, Asinine, Moronic, Vapid)

43. Hamburger Hotdog Paper Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim Quote #1 Author: F. Scott Fitzgerald Title: The Great Gatsby Say: “But with every word she was drawing further and further into herself, so he gave that up and only the dead dream fought on as the afternoon slipped away, trying to touch what was no longer tangible, struggling unhappily, undespairingly, toward that lost voice across the room (Fitzgerald 142).” Quote #2 Author: F. Scott Fitzgerald Title: The Great Gatsby Say: “’Jimmy was bound to get ahead. He always had resolves like this or something’ (Gatsby 182). Quote #3 (Counterargument) Author: F. Scott Fitzgerald Title: The Great Gatsby Say: “He and this Wolfshiem bought up a lot of side-street drug stores here and in Chicago and sold grain alcohol over the counter. That’s one of his little stunts. I picked him for a bootlegger the first time I saw him and I wasn’t far wrong (Fitzgerald 141). In the novel The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald, Jay Gatsby is one such hero, an admirable character whose reaching for the impossible is considered heroic.

44. Thesis: Gatsby is admirable. Quote #1 Say: “But with every word she was drawing further and further into herself, so he gave that up and only the dead dream fought on as the afternoon slipped away, trying to touch what was no longer tangible, struggling unhappily, undespairingly, toward that lost voice across the room (Fitzgerald 142).” Mean (What does the quote “mean”? Summarize): This passage explains how Gatsby reaches for the unattainable, knowing he can’t convince Daisy to leave Tom. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): In this case, even though Gatsby knows Daisy will not be with him, the dream continues, nourishing a vitality in Gatsby’s imagination, which is essential to his ability to see more than failure or fear. He suffers for this vision, but it is through struggle that we transform not only ourselves, but those around us, as Nick was transformed by Gatsby’s pain.

45. Thesis: Gatsby is admirable. Quote #2 Say: “’Jimmy was bound to get ahead. He always had resolves like this or something’ (Gatsby 182). ” Mean (What does the quote “mean”? Summarize): Mr. Gatz proclaims that his son, ever since he was a boy, had the habits of achievement, a type of resolve that craves the impossible. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): Ultimately it is this dynamic, between possibility and impossibility, between the practical and impractical, that provides the tension to step foot into the wild world to seek and achieve, sometimes the impossible.

46. The Counterargument “I know you are, but what am I?”

47. Evidence: The Counterargument What do you know about a “counterargument?”

48. Evidence: The Counterargument Your parents tell you, “your curfew is set for 10pm. The Van Nuys police website shows that crime is mostly committed between the times of 10pm-2am.” Talk to a partner and explain how you can give a counterargument. 1 minute.

49. Evidence: The Counterargument Your parents tell you, “you cannot go to Alejandro’s party. He was arrested in middle school for bringing matches and dirty underwear to school.” Talk to a partner and explain how you can give a counterargument. 1 Minute

50. Evidence: The Counterargument Your parents tell you, “downtown Los Angeles is too far. You can’t go there without an adult.” Talk to a partner and explain how you can give a counterargument. 1 Minute

51. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis Contradicting Evidence Counter-argument on how evidence Is NOT valid.

52. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis Contradicting Evidence Use an UNMENTIONED VARIABLE to show how contradicting evidence still proves thesis.

53. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: Pitbulls are one of the friendliest breeds and the ban in Denver should be overturned. Contradicting Evidence: Pitbulls have the highest rate of attacks on humans. Unmentioned variable: THE OWNERS!

54. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: Pitbulls are one of the friendliest breeds and the ban in Denver should be overturned. Contradicting Evidence: Pitbulls have the highest rate of attacks on humans. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: This breed of dog attracts owners who are criminals who raise the dogs to fight, training them to have violent tendencies. Like children, mean and violent owners will translate to mean and violent dogs, and most other breeds have owners who want to raise their dogs properly. It’s not the dog breed that is violent but the type of owner who raise them.

55. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: All types of guns should be legal. Contradicting Evidence: The Sandy Hook shootings left dozens of children dead. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: Work with a partner and come up with why this contradicting evidence can be WRONG. I will give you 3 minutes.

56. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: All types of guns should be legal. Contradicting Evidence: The Sandy Hook shootings left dozens of children dead. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: Unmentioned VARIABLE: Mental Illness!

57. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: We should encourage the use of capital punishment in all states. Contradicting Evidence: Texas has the most executions out of all states, but the murder rate is also the highest. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: Work with a partner and come up with why this contradicting evidence can be WRONG (hint, use 3 rd variable, low income, low graduation rates, etc. of TX). I will give you 3 minutes.

58. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: We should encourage the use of capital punishment in all states. Contradicting Evidence: Texas has the most executions out of all states, but the murder rate is also the highest. Unmentioned variable: Income (low)

59. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: College athletes should get paid for playing. Contradicting Evidence: In Slovania, where college players get paid, they have the highest dropout rate in the world. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: Unmentioned variable: Slovania’s average income is lowest in the European Union.

60. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: We should encourage the use of capital punishment in all states. Contradicting Evidence: Texas has the most executions out of all states, but the murder rate is also the highest. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: Work with a partner and come up with why this contradicting evidence can be WRONG (hint, use low income, low graduation rates, etc. of TX). I will give you 3 minutes.

61. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: The Lakers are the best team in basketball this season. Contradicting Evidence: The Lakers have the worst record in the league. Counter-argument using UNMENTIONED VARIABLE on how evidence is NOT valid: Work with a partner and come up with why this contradicting evidence can be WRONG. I will give you 3 minutes.

62. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: Birmingham Students are the most kind students in all of the valley. Contradicting Evidence: Birmingham has the highest rate of fights. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: Work with a partner and come up with why this contradicting evidence can be WRONG. I will give you 3 minutes.

63. Thesis: Gatsby is admirable. Quote #3 – COUNTERARGUMENT: Find a quote that CONTRADICTS your thesis. Say: “He and this Wolfshiem bought up a lot of side-street drug stores here and in Chicago and sold grain alcohol over the counter. That’s one of his little stunts. I picked him for a bootlegger the first time I saw him and I wasn’t far wrong (Fitzgerald 141). Mean (What does the quote “mean”? Summarize): Tom argues that Gatsby is of inferior moral quality because he breaks the law. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): Although some laws make sense in their time, other laws are unreasonable, playing out the collective paranoia that keep citizens tyrannized. Slavery, segregation, women’s suffrage (Unmentioned variable) were all legal embodiments of a vicious tyranny against those who are deprived of political and social power. Laws can be wrong. Alcohol is now legal, and if any political figure would try to abolish alcohol today, they would be ensuring their downfall in the next election. Gatsby’s cause for the impossible transcended a misguided law, and he was a hero for seeing beyond it.

64. Hamburger Hotdog Paper Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim Quote #1 Say: “But with every word she was drawing further and further into herself, so he gave that up and only the dead dream fought on as the afternoon slipped away, trying to touch what was no longer tangible, struggling unhappily, undespairingly, toward that lost voice across the room (Fitzgerald 142).” MEAN: This passage explains how Gatsby reaches for the unattainable, knowing he can’t convince Daisy to leave Tom. MATTER: In this case, even though Gatsby knows Daisy will not be with him, the dream continues, nourishing a vitality in Gatsby’s imagination, which is essential to his ability to see more than failure or fear. He suffers for this vision, but it is through struggle that we transform not only ourselves, but those around us, as Nick was transformed by Gatsby’s pain. Quote #2 Say: “’Jimmy was bound to get ahead. He always had resolves like this or something’ (Gatsby 182). MEAN: Mr. Gatz proclaims that his son, ever since he was a boy, had the habits of achievement, a type of resolve that craves the impossible. MATTER: Ultimately it is this dynamic, between possibility and impossibility, between the practical and impractical, that provides the tension to step foot into the wild world to seek and achieve, sometimes the impossible. Quote #3 (Counterargument) Author: F. Scott Fitzgerald Title: The Great Gatsby Say: “He and this Wolfshiem bought up a lot of side-street drug stores here and in Chicago and sold grain alcohol over the counter. That’s one of his little stunts. I picked him for a bootlegger the first time I saw him and I wasn’t far wrong (Fitzgerald 141). MEAN: Tom argues that Gatsby is of inferior moral quality because he breaks the law. MATTER: Although some laws make sense in their time, other laws are unreasonable, playing out the collective paranoia that keep citizens tyrannized. Slavery, segregation, women’s suffrage were all legal embodiments of a vicious tyranny against those who are deprived of political and social power. Laws can be wrong. Alcohol is now legal, and if any political figure would try to abolish alcohol today, they would be ensuring their downfall in the next election. Gatsby’s cause for the impossible transcended a misguided law, and he was a hero for seeing beyond it. In the novel The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald, Jay Gatsby is one such hero, an admirable character whose reaching for what is believed by others to be unattainable is heroic.

65. Introduction Take out your introduction (Statement of fact and scene) Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog paper

66. Introduction Take out your introduction Take out your thesis Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog paper Take out your 18 moves list

67. Introduction Write your thesis and transition into your thesis after your favorite introduction: Example: The people worth admiring are the people who don’t know how to be contained. An artist’s soul is capacious, able to take in the entire world and place it on a plate, or a blueprint, or a classroom. A visionary requires limitless thinking and dreaming, a way of being that cannot be bound by sensibility and conventions. Christopher Columbus saw a world that in fact never ended, a circumference that could run forever with enough wind and will. Those who are tyrannized by fear and limited vision seem always bound by height, weight, or aptitude, reasons for staying cornered by fear and cynicism, a combination that always underlies sadness for what is already determined in their minds. It is our reaching and straining beyond limitations that make us admirable, that make life boundless and soaring with the very stars we can’t reach. (Move #1) In the novel The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald, Jay Gatsby is one such hero, an admirable character whose reaching for the impossible is considered heroic.

68. Introduction Take out the essay “Star Travel” by Tommy Kim.

69. Introduction Writing can be reduced to a series of moves. Let’s see what kind of moves Mr. Kim has!

70. Transience Essay Moves Take out the essay, “Star Travel” by Tommy Kim. Work with a partner You will highlight each move I will call on you Read the first three words of the sentence for each move.

71. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2 9.Mean#2 10.Matter#2 11.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 12.Introduce counterargument quote 13.Say #3 (Counterargument) 14.Mean#3 15.Matter#3 16.Transition into last paragraph 17.Restatement of thesis 18.Connect thesis to the rest of the world

72. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis

73. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote #1

74. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1

75. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1

76. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1

77. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph

78. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)

79. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2

80. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2 9.Mean#2

81. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2 9.Mean#2 10.Matter#2

82. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2 9.Mean#2 10.Matter#2 11.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph

83. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2 9.Mean#2 10.Matter#2 11.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 12.Introduce counterargument quote

84. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2 9.Mean#2 10.Matter#2 11.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 12.Introduce counterargument quote 13.Say #3 (Counterargument)

85. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2 9.Mean#2 10.Matter#2 11.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 12.Introduce counterargument quote 13.Say #3 (Counterargument) 14.Mean#3

86. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2 9.Mean#2 10.Matter#2 11.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 12.Introduce counterargument quote 13.Say #3 (Counterargument) 14.Mean#3 15.Matter#3

87. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2 9.Mean#2 10.Matter#2 11.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 12.Introduce counterargument quote 13.Say #3 (Counterargument) 14.Mean#3 15.Matter#3 16.Transition into last paragraph

88. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2 9.Mean#2 10.Matter#2 11.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 12.Introduce counterargument quote 13.Say #3 (Counterargument) 14.Mean#3 15.Matter#3 16.Transition into last paragraph 17.Restatement of thesis

89. Underline and number each move: 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2 9.Mean#2 10.Matter#2 11.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 12.Introduce counterargument quote 13.Say #3 (Counterargument) 14.Mean#3 15.Matter#3 16.Transition into last paragraph 17.Restatement of thesis 18.Connect thesis to the rest of the world

90. Introduction Take out your introduction (scene/statement of fact) Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hamburger paper Take out my essay “Star Travel” Take out your 18 moves list (we just copied them down)

91. Essay Take out the following and begin your essay: 2 introductions (interesting statement of fact and scene) Hamburger/Hamburger paper My rubric, paragraph by paragraph 1.Thesis 2.Introduction to quote 3.Say #1 4.Mean#1 5.Matter#1 6.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 7.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 8.Say #2 9.Mean#2 10.Matter#2 11.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 12.Introduce counterargument quote 13.Say #3 (Counterargument) 14.Mean#3 15.Matter#3 16.Transition into last paragraph 17.Restatement of thesis 18.Connect thesis to the rest of the world

92. Move #1 Write your thesis after your transition into your thesis. Example: The people worth admiring are the people who don’t know how to be contained. An artist’s soul is capacious, able to take in the entire world and place it on a plate, or a blueprint, or a classroom. A visionary requires limitless thinking and dreaming, a way of being that cannot be bound by sensibility and conventions. Christopher Columbus saw a world that in fact never ended, a circumference that could run forever with enough wind and will. Those who are tyrannized by fear and limited vision seem always bound by height, weight, or aptitude, reasons for staying cornered by fear and cynicism, a combination that always underlies sadness for what is already determined in their minds. It is our reaching and straining beyond limitations that make us admirable, that make life boundless and soaring with the very stars we can’t reach. (Move #1) In the novel The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald, Jay Gatsby is one such hero, an admirable character whose reaching for what is believed by others to be unattainable is heroic.

93. MOVE #2, PARAGRAPH #2! Introduce quote “move” Use the following template: (Summarize what is happening around the quote. Assume the reader hasn’t read the book.) –Example: When Gatsby was in the hotel room with Daisy, Tom and the entourage of friends, he saw that his argument for Daisy to leave Tom was flagging, that he was immersed in what was hopeless.

94. Move #3 - 5 (Move # 3) “But with every word she was drawing further and further into herself, so he gave that up and only the dead dream fought on as the afternoon slipped away, trying to touch what was no longer tangible, struggling unhappily, undespairingly, toward that lost voice across the room (Fitzgerald 142).” (Move # 4) This passage explains how Gatsby reaches for the unattainable, knowing he can’t convince Daisy to leave Tom. (Move # 5) In this case, even though Gatsby knows Daisy will not be with him, the dream continues, nourishing a vitality in Gatsby’s imagination, which is essential to his ability to see more than failure or fear. He suffers for this vision, but it is through struggle that we transform not only ourselves, but those around us, as Nick was transformed by Gatsby’s pain.

95. Move #6 & 7 Transition “move” into paragraph #3 Use the following template: (Move #6) Not only does Fitzgerald highlight_____________ about this character, he also emphasizes how___________. (Move #7) (Summarize what is happening around quote.)

96. Paragraph #3: Moves 8-10 Move 8 (Say): “’Jimmy was bound to get ahead. He always had resolves like this or something’ (Gatsby 182). Move 9 (Mean) Mr. Gatz proclaims that his son, ever since he was a boy, had the habits of achievement, a type of resolve that craves the impossible. Move 10 (Matter) Ultimately it is this dynamic, between possibility and impossibility, between the practical and impractical, that provides the tension to step foot into the wild world to seek and achieve, sometimes the impossible.

97. Paragraph #4: Moves 11-15 Move 11 (Contrast Transition): Although this character’s traits are overall admirable, there are some traits that some might find unappealing. Move 12 (Introduce quote): Summarize what is happening around quote. Move 13 (Say: a quote that CONTRADICTS your thesis)“He and this Wolfshiem bought up a lot of side-street drug stores here and in Chicago and sold grain alcohol over the counter. That’s one of his little stunts. I picked him for a bootlegger the first time I saw him and I wasn’t far wrong (Fitzgerald 141). Move 14 (Mean): Tom argues that Gatsby is of inferior moral quality because he breaks the law. Move 15 (Matter): Although some laws make sense in their time, other laws are unreasonable, playing out the collective paranoia that keep citizens tyrannized. (Unmentioned Variable)Slavery, segregation, women’s suffrage were all legal embodiments of a vicious tyranny against those who are deprived of political and social power. Laws can be wrong. Alcohol is now legal, and if any political figure would try to abolish alcohol today, they would be ensuring their downfall in the next election. Gatsby’s cause for the impossible transcended a misguided law, and he was a hero for seeing beyond it.

98. Paragraph #4: Moves 16-18 16.Transition into last paragraph 17.Restatement of thesis 18Connect thesis to the rest of the world (Move 16: Transition) Laws that are morally detestable require courage and vision to break. These traits also fuel the hearts and minds who chase after stars, empowering the great contributors of our society. (Move 18: Connect thesis to rest of the world)Thomas Edison, Neal Armstrong, Rosa Parks all stood tall against the impossible, and with courage and vision they defined a quintessential American ideal. (Move 17: Restatement of thesis) Like Gatsby, we are at our best when we are struggling, fighting for a vision that seems impossible. Dreams are no longer real when we achieve them. In order for us to live authentically, we continually need to place the impossible in front of us.

99. Essay Rubric If you are finished, turn in the following, stapled: 1.Your Essay 2.The rubric, graded by your partner (attach the paper your partner WROTE on)

100. Finish! 1.Turn in your rough draft in the back tray. 2.If you are not done, finish the essay this weekend or come into tutoring during lunch. Or schedule a time to meet. DEMAND a time to meet. Own your life.