1. Skill: Awkward Sentence Arrangements

2. / Students are too leaf the building after school if he don’t have after school activities so the school remains safe / After receiving my progress report I no that I need to step it up or I will had to take summer school. / Students are too leaf the building after school if he don’t have after school activities so the school remains safe / After receiving my progress report I no that I need to step it up or I will had to take summer school. Monday: DOL

3. What is an “awkward sentence” ?? / An “awkward sentence” is a sentence that combines two or more segments in a confusing or inaccurate manner is normally called an awkward sentence.

4. Notes: Awkward Sentences (Please write out ALL notes) / Sentences normally consist of smaller units of meaning--phrases or clauses. When the writer combines these units in a confusing manner, the reader may not get the point, even if each part is clear when read separately.

5. Notes: Awkward Senteces / Example: The following two clauses are clear when read separately: I read in a magazine... Scientists believe they have discovered a new subatomic particle. / When we combine these two clauses with the wrong word, however, we create a slightly confusing sentence: I read in a magazine where scientists believe they have discovered a new subatomic particle. subatomic particle. / Example: The following two clauses are clear when read separately: I read in a magazine... Scientists believe they have discovered a new subatomic particle. / When we combine these two clauses with the wrong word, however, we create a slightly confusing sentence: I read in a magazine where scientists believe they have discovered a new subatomic particle. subatomic particle.

6. Notes: Awkward Sentences / The word "where" normally refers to a "place where"; in this sentence, however, the location of the magazine is not important. A more accurate way to combine the clauses is to use the word "that": I read in a magazine that scientists believe they have discovered a new

7. Example: Awkward Sentences / Awkward Sentence: What hasn’t been told it is rough to be a child raised in a big family. -->NOT an Awkward Sentence: What hasn’t been told is how rough it is to be a child raised in a big family. / Awkward Sentence: What hasn’t been told it is rough to be a child raised in a big family. -->NOT an Awkward Sentence: What hasn’t been told is how rough it is to be a child raised in a big family.

8. Now You Try…. Directions: Write the “awkward sentence”. Then rewrite the sentence correctly. 1) The best teachers help each student become a better student both academically and emotionally. 2) High school students have a lot of pressure on them being high achievers. 1) The best teachers help each student become a better student both academically and emotionally. 2) High school students have a lot of pressure on them being high achievers.

9. Correct Answers…. 1) The best teachers help each student to grow both academically and emotionally.  The sentence was awkward because it repeated “student” twice. Replacing it with a different word will make it less awkward. 1) The best teachers help each student to grow both academically and emotionally.  The sentence was awkward because it repeated “student” twice. Replacing it with a different word will make it less awkward.

10. Correct Answers…. 2) Being high achievers, high school students have a lot of pressure on them. --> In the awkward sentence, we are not sure whether high school students are high achievers and therefore have lots of pressure on them--or whether they have pressure on them to be high achievers. Do you see the difference? 2) Being high achievers, high school students have a lot of pressure on them. --> In the awkward sentence, we are not sure whether high school students are high achievers and therefore have lots of pressure on them--or whether they have pressure on them to be high achievers. Do you see the difference?