1. Short Answer Response
Mr. Brown
English II

2. What is a Short Analytical Response?
it's an open-ended response to literature and it is scored on content .
You will need to answer both a single and a paired selection SARs.

3. For each SAR, you will have a box like the one above that allows you 10 lines for your answer. Please note that the 10th line is the bottom edge of the box, and you cannot write below this point. Also, you may not “double line” and attempt to squeeze more writing in the box.

4. SAR Rubric Grading
Score Point 0 — Insufficient Response to the Question
Insufficient responses indicate a very limited reading performance.
These responses have one of the following problems.
The idea is not an answer to the question asked.
The idea is incorrect because it is not based on the text.
The idea is too general, vague, or unclear to determine whether it is reasonable.
No idea is present. Sometimes the response contains only text evidence. At other times there appears to be an idea; however, this idea cannot be considered an answer to the question because it merely repeats verbatim, or “echoes,” the text evidence.

5. Score Point 1 — Partially Sufficient Response to the Question
Partially sufficient responses indicate a basic reading performance.
These responses have one of the following characteristics.
The idea is reasonable, but the response contains no text evidence.
The idea is reasonable, but the text evidence is flawed and does not adequately support the idea. Text evidence is considered inadequate when it is
- only a general reference to the text,
- too partial to support the idea,
- weakly linked to the idea, or
- used inappropriately because it wrongly manipulates the meaning of the text.
The idea needs more explanation or specificity even though it is supported with text evidence.
The idea represents only a literal reading of the text, with or without text evidence.

6. Score Point 2 — Sufficient Response to the Question
Sufficient responses indicate a satisfactory reading performance.
These responses have the following characteristics.
- The idea is reasonable and goes beyond a literal reading of the text. It is explained specifically enough to show that the student can make appropriate connections across the text and draw valid conclusions.
- The text evidence used to support the idea is accurate and relevant.
- The idea and text evidence used to support it are clearly linked.
- The combination of the idea and the text evidence demonstrates a good understanding of the text.

7. Score Point 3 — Exemplary Response to the Question
Exemplary responses indicate an accomplished reading performance.
These responses have the following characteristics.
- The idea is perceptive and reflects an awareness of the complexities of the text. The student is able to develop a coherent explanation of the idea by making discerning connections across the text.
- The text evidence used to support the idea is specific and well chosen. Overall, the evidence strongly supports the validity of the idea.
- The combination of the idea and the text evidence demonstrates a deep understanding of the text.

8. Score Point 3 Exemplars Let’s look at some score point 3 SARs.
Students read a short story, then they wrote a SAR to the following prompt:
How would you describe Paul in the excerpt from The Custom of the Country? Support your answer with evidence from the selection.
As we read these exemplars, notice how they fit the criteria listed for a score point 3 (Exemplary).

9. Single Selection Exemplar # 1

10. Exemplar #1 Critique Score Point 3
In this exemplary response the student offers an idea that reflects an
awareness of the complexities of the selection. Overall, the direct
quotations strongly support why Paul feels so lonely, demonstrating
an accomplished reading performance.

11. Single Selection Exemplar # 2

12. Exemplar # 2 Critique
The student offers a perceptive idea and develops a coherent
explanation of how Paul has become accustomed to a lonely life.
Overall, the text evidence strongly supports the validity of the idea,
and the student shows a deep understanding of the text in this
accomplished reading performance.

13. How would you score this exemplar?

14. How would you score this exemplar?

15. To Answer SARs, Use RACE 1. Restate the question (provides focus).
2. Answer the question.
3. Cite evidence.
4. Explain the evidence.
But first, you must…..
1. Read the question carefully
2. Think about what the question asks.

16. Mentor Text “Shame” by Dick Gregory
Short Analytical Response
How would you describe Dick Gregory in the excerpt from “Shame”?
Support your answer with evidence from the selection.

17. Complete the RACE Process
We will only complete the
restating and answering today.
We will focus on citing and
embedding on Tuesday,
September 29, 2015.

18. Embedding Quotations
Mr. Brown
English II

19. What is embedding?
Embedding involves selecting only the most important words in your text evidence. In other words, you will never use an entire sentence from the text verbatim (that means word-for- word).
The embedded text is the essential part of a quote that will help you to advance your point and support your argument.
You are doing the work of “sifting through” unnecessary components of text evidence to offer your audience ONLY WHAT IS NEEDED.

20. What does embedding look like?
Combine a paraphrase with a quotation:
Not embedded:
Tania Modleski suggests that “if television is considered by some to be a vast wasteland, soap operas are thought to be the least nourishing spot in the desert.”
Embedded:
In her critique of soap operas, Tania Modleski argues that some view television as “a vast wasteland” and soap operas as “the least nourishing spot in the desert.”

21. Do not use a full-sentence quotation
Do not use a full-sentence quotation. Your own commentary or ideas should support and elaborate the quotation.
Not embedded: Richard Cory had everything going for him. “He was a gentleman from sole to crown.” “And he was rich— yes, richer than a king.”
Embedded: Richard Cory had everything going for him. Not only was he a “gentleman from sole to crown,” but he was “richer than a king.”

22. Own That Proof
Brackets: [ ]If you are quoting material and you've had to change the capitalization of a word or change a pronoun to make the material fit into your sentence, enclose that changed letter or word(s) within brackets:
Ellipsis: ...An ellipsis [ … ] comes in handy when you want to omit some words. Let's take the sentence,
"The ceremony honored twelve brilliant athletes from the Caribbean who were visiting the U.S." and leave out "from the Caribbean who were":

23. Crossover SAR
The crossover asks you to connect TWO different reading selections through ONE question.
It is testing your ability to make connections between texts and clearly communicate your thoughts through writing.
You need to be able to
Answer the question clearly.
Provide evidence from BOTH texts to support your answer.
Explain how your evidence proves your answer and how the texts relate or connect.

24. Transitions
In order to help the reader understand your train of thought, you need to use transition words that show the relationship between the two passages.
When the passages are similar:
Likewise…
Just like in the reading selection TITLE, in TITLE…
Just as…
Similarly…
When the passages are different:
Unlike in TITLE, in TITLE…
In contrast…

25. SAR Crossover Rubric Grading Score Point 0—Insufficient Response to the Question
Insufficient responses indicate a very limited reading performance.
These responses have one of the following problems.
For one or both selections, the idea is not an answer to the question asked.
The idea is incorrect because it is not based on one or both selections.
For one or both selections, the idea is too general, vague, or unclear to determine whether it is reasonable.
No idea is present from either selection. Sometimes the response contains only text evidence from one or both selections. At other times there appears to be an idea; however, this idea cannot be considered an answer to the question because it merely repeats verbatim, or “echoes,” the text evidence.

26. SAR Crossover Rubric Grading Score Point 1—Partially Sufficient Response to the Question
These responses have one of the following characteristics.
The idea is reasonable for both selections, but the response contains no text evidence (from one or both selections).
The idea is reasonable for both selections, but the text evidence (from one or both selections) is flawed and does not adequately support the idea. Text evidence is considered inadequate when it is
only a general reference to the text,
too partial to support the idea,
weakly linked to the idea, or
used inappropriately because it wrongly manipulates the meaning of the text.
For one or both selections, the idea needs more explanation or specificity even though it is supported with text evidence from both selections.
For one or both selections, the idea represents only a literal reading of the text, with or without text evidence (from one or both selections).
The response contains relevant textual evidence from both selections, but the student offers an idea that is reasonable for only one selection.
The response contains an idea and relevant text evidence for both selections, but the idea for one selection contains an inaccuracy.

27. SAR Crossover Rubric Grading Score Point 2—Sufficient Response to the Question
Sufficient responses indicate a satisfactory reading performance.
These responses have the following characteristics.
For both selections, the idea is reasonable and goes beyond a literal reading of the text. It is explained specifically enough to show that the student can make appropriate connections across the selections and draw valid conclusions.
For both selections, the text evidence that is used to support the idea is accurate and relevant.
For both selections, the idea and text evidence used to support it are clearly linked.
For both selections, the combination of the idea and the text evidence demonstrates a good understanding of the text.

28. SAR Crossover Rubric Grading Score Point 3—Exemplary Response to the Question
Exemplary responses indicate an accomplished reading performance.
These responses have the following characteristics.
For both selections, the idea is perceptive and reflects an awareness of the complexities of the text. The student is able to develop a coherent explanation of the idea by making discerning connections across both selections.
For both selections, the text evidence that is used to support the idea is specific and well chosen. Overall, the evidence strongly supports the validity of the idea.
For both selections, the combination of the idea and the text evidence demonstrates a deep understanding of the text.

29. Score Point 3 Exemplars Let’s look at some score point 3 SARs.
Students read two texts, then they wrote a Crossover SAR to the following prompt:
Do you think Jaime Teevan in “2009 Young Innovators Under 35: Jaime Teevan, 32” and Barry Bingham, Jr., in “Digital Dad Versus the Dinosaurs” have anything in common? Explain your answer and support it with evidence from both selections.
As we read these exemplars, notice how they fit the criteria listed for a score point 3 (Exemplary).

30. Crossover Selection Exemplar # 1

31. Crossover Exemplar Critique #1
In this exemplary response, the student presents the idea that both Jaime
Teevan and Barry Bingham, Jr., possess ambition, which helps them
become innovators in their respective fields. Further analysis clarifies the
idea and shows that the student can make discerning connections
across the selections. Overall, the textual evidence provided strongly
supports the validity of the idea.

32. Crossover Selection Exemplar #2

33. Crossover Exemplar Critique #2
The student develops a coherent response based on the idea that both
Teevan and Bingham, Jr., found ways to adapt in an ever-changing,
technology-based world. The student demonstrates an ability to
effectively connect a perceptive explanation to well-chosen textual
evidence. Overall, the evidence provided strongly supports the validity
of the idea in this accomplished reading performance.

34. How would you score this exemplar?
The student presents the reasonable analysis that both Jaime Teevan and Barry Bingham, Jr., dedicated their careers to transforming technology and advancing the use of the Internet. However, no text evidence is provided to support the analysis, making this response partially sufficient.

35. Mentor Texts “Shame” by Dick Gregory and “Fish Cheeks” by Amy Tan
Short Analytical Response
How are the authors’ attitudes toward family similar in “Shame” and “Fish Cheeks”?
Support your answer with evidence from the selection.