1. Revising to Improve Ideas and Organization (C) FreeWritingWorksheets.com 2016

2. Four Major Revisions 1.Cut: Remove extraneous details. 2.Replace: Find general or vague details and replace them with specific details. 3.Add: Add details to support your main idea. 4.Rearrange: rearrange details and add transitions so that they are clearly in a specific order, such as chronological order, order of importance, spatial order, or compare and contrast order. (C) FreeWritingWorksheets.com 2016

3. Which extraneous details should you cut? My friend Marie is strange. She eats weird things. She is always making up songs and singing them for no reason. She is a normal height and weight. She wears wacky clothes. (C) FreeWritingWorksheets.com 2016

4. Which extraneous details should you cut? My friend Marie is strange. She eats weird things. She is always making up songs and sings them for no reason. She is a normal height and weight. She wears wacky clothes. It’s fun to have a weird friend, though—you never get bored! If the paragraph is about how strange Marie is, we don’t need a sentence proving that she is normal! (C) FreeWritingWorksheets.com 2016

5. Which general, unspecific details should you replace? My friend Marie is strange. She eats weird things. She is always making up songs and singing them for no reason. She wears wacky clothes. It’s fun to have a weird friend, though— you never get bored! (C) FreeWritingWorksheets.com 2016

6. Which general, unspecific details should you replace? My friend Marie is strange. She eats weird things. She pours tabasco sauce all over her cereal, dips her pizza in honey, and eats plain pepperoni sandwiches for breakfast. She is always making up songs and singing them for no reason. She wears wacky clothes. She wears top hats, tutus, and Scottish kilts to school. It’s fun to have a weird friend, though—you never get bored! (C) FreeWritingWorksheets.com 2016

7. What additional kinds of details could you add? My friend Marie is strange. She pours tabasco sauce all over her cereal, dips her pizza in honey, and eats plain pepperoni sandwiches for breakfast. She is always making up songs and singing them for no reason. She wears top hats, tutus, and Scottish kilts to school. It’s fun to have a weird friend, though—you never get bored! (C) FreeWritingWorksheets.com 2016

8. What additional kinds of details could you add? My friend Marie is strange. She pours tabasco sauce all over her cereal, dips her pizza in honey, and eats plain pepperoni sandwiches for breakfast. She is always making up songs and singing them for no reason, even in the middle of class! She wears top hats, tutus, and Scottish kilts to school, and her hair is always styled in a 1960s beehive. It’s fun to have a weird friend, though—you never get bored! (C) FreeWritingWorksheets.com 2016

9. How could you rearrange and add transitions to put this in a specific order? My friend Marie is strange. She pours tabasco sauce all over her cereal, dips her pizza in honey, and eats plain pepperoni sandwiches for breakfast. She is always making up songs and singing them for no reason, even in the middle of class! She wears top hats, tutus, and Scottish kilts to school, and her hair is always styled in a 1960s beehive. It’s fun to have a weird friend, though—you never get bored! (C) FreeWritingWorksheets.com 2016

10. How could you rearrange and add transitions to put this in a specific order? My friend Marie is strange. Some of her odd habits aren’t that big of a deal, like making up songs and singing them quietly in class. Some are more noticeable, though—like the fact that she wears top hats, tutus, and Scottish kilts to school, and her hair is always styled in a 1960s beehive. By far the strangest thing about her, however, is her disgusting eating habits. She pours tabasco sauce all over her cereal, dips her pizza in honey, and eats plain pepperoni sandwiches for breakfast! It’s fun to have a weird friend, though—you never get bored. (C) FreeWritingWorksheets.com 2016

11. Revision is hard work, but it’s worth it! BeforeAfter My friend Marie is strange. She eats weird things. She is always making up songs and singing them for no reason. She is a normal height and weight. She wears wacky clothes. My friend Marie is strange. Some of her odd habits aren’t that big of a deal, like making up songs and singing them quietly in class. Some are more noticeable, though—like the fact that she wears top hats, tutus, and Scottish kilts to school, and her hair is always styled in a 1960s beehive. By far the strangest thing about her, however, is her disgusting eating habits. She pours tabasco sauce all over her cereal, dips her pizza in honey, and eats plain pepperoni sandwiches for breakfast! It’s fun to have a weird friend, though—you never get bored. (C) FreeWritingWorksheets.com 2016